Autumn's arrival
nature 5-7-5 contest entry47 total reviews
Comment from Hitcher
The poem and picture work really well together friend. It makes one wonder who it will be that gets to walk on that read carpet and what the occasion is. Good luck, very cool!
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2018
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The poem and picture work really well together friend. It makes one wonder who it will be that gets to walk on that read carpet and what the occasion is. Good luck, very cool!
Comment Written 23-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2018
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I wouldn't mind walking down that red carpet lol. Thank you for the awesome review Hitcher.
God bless!
Comment from rama devi
Great pun in the closing line. the picture is perfect too. Did you write this based on the picture or find the pic after? Just curious! I applause your artistic alliteraiton in the two word opening line plus echoes in array and affair in the next lines...as well as the consonance of S and T and P. Sounds super read aloud.
This made me chuckle!
No nits but one suggestion (optional) to use a dash after line two for dramatic pause effect.
Good luck.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2018
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Great pun in the closing line. the picture is perfect too. Did you write this based on the picture or find the pic after? Just curious! I applause your artistic alliteraiton in the two word opening line plus echoes in array and affair in the next lines...as well as the consonance of S and T and P. Sounds super read aloud.
This made me chuckle!
No nits but one suggestion (optional) to use a dash after line two for dramatic pause effect.
Good luck.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 22-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2018
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Thank you Rama devi for this most excellent review my friend. I created this piece before finding the artwork. I generally try to follow this procedure as I don't want my mind to become dependent on inspiring photo's.
God bless
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Oh yes, I understand, though I have a very different approach. I LOVE writing poems about artwork (it is a genre, actually, called 'ekphrastic poetry') where both art and words mutually enhance each other.
Warm Smiles,
rd
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That sounds quite stimulating to the mind my friend. Love how individual we all can be, even with our similarities.
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:-))) Yes!!!
Comment from meeshu
an awesome picture and I like the last line, very fitting. I remember autumn in the Midwest, the colors are magnificent. good luck to you..
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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an awesome picture and I like the last line, very fitting. I remember autumn in the Midwest, the colors are magnificent. good luck to you..
Comment Written 22-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Thank you for the wonderful review meeshu.
God bless
Comment from rhonnie69
HELLO POET: WOW! You have posted a brilliant and witty observation here. YES. Our God has rolled out His red carpet for us here; as He does at autumn year after year. Who are we that our God is so mindful of us? He created us in His image, that's why. Jesus is our example in all things. Which means that He wants us to roll out our red carpets to all His people of our world too. Let us follow our creator's example. Let us all be one happy family...united in His Holy Name. God bless you, my dear fellow poet. Cordially: rhonnie69.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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HELLO POET: WOW! You have posted a brilliant and witty observation here. YES. Our God has rolled out His red carpet for us here; as He does at autumn year after year. Who are we that our God is so mindful of us? He created us in His image, that's why. Jesus is our example in all things. Which means that He wants us to roll out our red carpets to all His people of our world too. Let us follow our creator's example. Let us all be one happy family...united in His Holy Name. God bless you, my dear fellow poet. Cordially: rhonnie69.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Thank you Rhonnie for this beautiful, glowing review my friend. God is absolutely amazing, like the song says "you're a good, good Father" So many little miracles that are over looked everyday by most.
God bless
Comment from miajaffri
You have selected a perfect picture for your poem, Nature. All these red leaves do make the world look like a "red carpet affair." And, with the incredible beauty of autumn at its best, it does portray a boisterous beauty.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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You have selected a perfect picture for your poem, Nature. All these red leaves do make the world look like a "red carpet affair." And, with the incredible beauty of autumn at its best, it does portray a boisterous beauty.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Thank you Miajaffri for this incredible review my friend. Autumn is definitely my favorite time of the year.
God bless
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
"Red carpet affair." That was an awesome line. Your photo is so stunning. I wish I could talk a stroll down that red carpet! :) This is a well-written and formatted 5-7-5 poem. Perfect entry for the nature contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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"Red carpet affair." That was an awesome line. Your photo is so stunning. I wish I could talk a stroll down that red carpet! :) This is a well-written and formatted 5-7-5 poem. Perfect entry for the nature contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 22-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Me too Cindy! Thank you for this most excellent review and taking the time to comment on my work.
God bless
Steve
Comment from closetpoetjester
And what a show stopper indeed!
Autumn is my absolute favourite season and I find much irony in the fact that the dying and fallen are so vibrant and alive with colour.
You've just proved that in spades. And shades.
Of red, of course LOL
Well done
Good luck, I think this has a great chance.
P
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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And what a show stopper indeed!
Autumn is my absolute favourite season and I find much irony in the fact that the dying and fallen are so vibrant and alive with colour.
You've just proved that in spades. And shades.
Of red, of course LOL
Well done
Good luck, I think this has a great chance.
P
Comment Written 22-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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My favorite time of the year as well my friend.Thank you for the beautiful six star review. I am always honored and humbled at such approval.
God bless!
Comment from jaded831
You eloquently captured autumn's arrival. Your poem glorifies the beauty of the season and Mother Nature's talents. Excellent imagery and tone. The picture compliments your poem. Great job, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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You eloquently captured autumn's arrival. Your poem glorifies the beauty of the season and Mother Nature's talents. Excellent imagery and tone. The picture compliments your poem. Great job, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Wow! Jade, thank you for this most exceptional review. Autumn would be my favorite season.
have a blessed day my friend.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ah, excellent closing line featuring a bit of double intendre, lol.
Good word economy and use of descriptive words not commonly seen such as "boisterous".
Your display is also splendid.
You just might have the winner here--best of luck!
~Dean :)
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Ah, excellent closing line featuring a bit of double intendre, lol.
Good word economy and use of descriptive words not commonly seen such as "boisterous".
Your display is also splendid.
You just might have the winner here--best of luck!
~Dean :)
Comment Written 22-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Thank you Dean, my friend for this most excellent review. FYI, Halloween is just around the corning my friend. LOL.
God bless!
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
Oh... I love the "red carpet affair" in this lovely 5-7-5 Nature poem.
Nicely done. Good luck! ~Kerry
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Oh... I love the "red carpet affair" in this lovely 5-7-5 Nature poem.
Nicely done. Good luck! ~Kerry
Comment Written 22-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Thank you Kerry for the awesome review my friend.
God bless!
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Very welcome.