The Memory Coat
Sage advice from a FS friend39 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You were given some wise advice and you decided to put all your grief filled memories into a coat and hung it up, I liked the concept and will remember your words, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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You were given some wise advice and you decided to put all your grief filled memories into a coat and hung it up, I liked the concept and will remember your words, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Hello Ms. Dolly, yes ma'am I sure was give wise advice !
YM gave the advice.
I know things have been difficult for a lot of us in FS and I know that I had to share this bit of information in a way that translated to most - feeling like the grief was holding on to our bodies like some extra weight just smashing us to the floor daily...
For me sometimes not being able to function or find "Grief Relief"
This concept was extraordinary to me... I hope it helps...
Thank you so kindly for your review, I am very grateful for what you offer here.
Love and hugs!
Cheers, Fonda
Comment from Gail Denham
Quite an idea - and you tried it - it helped? fanstory folk are supposed to help one another -I think that's why we're all here. To offer help and guidance in writing, constructive critique, etc.
Good poem.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Quite an idea - and you tried it - it helped? fanstory folk are supposed to help one another -I think that's why we're all here. To offer help and guidance in writing, constructive critique, etc.
Good poem.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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The reason this poem was written was that it took me from a 24/7 grieving individual to someone who found "Grief Relief".
Thank you kindly for your offering in your review. I am grateful.
Comment from Neonewman
I agree this is a great suggestion hanging your pain on a hook. This is a great, well-crafted piece you have entered for this particular contest.
God bless
Steve
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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I agree this is a great suggestion hanging your pain on a hook. This is a great, well-crafted piece you have entered for this particular contest.
God bless
Steve
Comment Written 13-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much for the kind review. I am grateful.
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My pleasure.
Comment from Jo.G
I love the memory coat.. as we all, at some point in time, can be overwhelmed by our life's journey. And what a great way of dealing with issues. Some never leave us but can be managed. Take care..
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I love the memory coat.. as we all, at some point in time, can be overwhelmed by our life's journey. And what a great way of dealing with issues. Some never leave us but can be managed. Take care..
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Comment Written 13-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Hi - Jo.G,
I noted Good - and I'm not sure if you meant to rate it that way and if you did - that is okay - (but you said, "I love the memory coat") so I am a bit confused. I just would like to point out that sometimes things aren't always as they appear here in Fan Story and I usually am a person to alert someone to how they kind of work. Good isn't really Good - it is kind of for when you make mistakes and need improvement to some degree. (its more like fair) which I don't know if you want to keep that as your rating or if you meant another rating by mistake? Either way, I am okay with however you rate my work. And if you have any questions - as I see you are a new member - I am okay with answering as well. Just shoot me a message. And ask away.
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Thanks Ms.Snyder for clarifying this for me. Yes I am still finding my way 'round this site. And I certainly did not wish to rate your work as fair because it is much better than fair. I thought I rated your work as a 5 star, this is obviously not the case, so I need to remedy this but not really sure how to. I will continue to search the ratings. Thanks for alerting me to this. Jo.G
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All you have to do is go back in and change to a 5 it will update it - it is normally that simple. The only time you cannot do this is on the 6's you have to have 6's and it has to be the same night maybe? I don't know I only give mine out readily - so don't know I tried to change once and I couldn't... But you can change from 4 to five right away. Always. And I appreciate that. And again just send me any questions you may have... Cheers
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Ms Snyder
I think this is a lovely piece of work and you were given some really great advice. The rhymes are good, however, I will say sometimes the length of the lines made me loose track that I was reading a piece of rhymed poetry. Good luck in your contest. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Hi Ms Snyder
I think this is a lovely piece of work and you were given some really great advice. The rhymes are good, however, I will say sometimes the length of the lines made me loose track that I was reading a piece of rhymed poetry. Good luck in your contest. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 13-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Sorry if I made you lose track. I tend to run long-winded... thank you for the luck and I appreciate your review.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"The Memory Coat", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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"The Memory Coat", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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thank you for the kind review. I am very grateful.
Ms Snyder, you're more than welcome.
God bless you and best wishes,
the Duchess
You're very welcome.
Comment from lyenochka
Good to see you back, Fonda! Is your hand fully healed now? What a great idea to hang all those memories on a coat and keep the part that comforts and initiates healing. Best to you in the contest. Hugs!
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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Good to see you back, Fonda! Is your hand fully healed now? What a great idea to hang all those memories on a coat and keep the part that comforts and initiates healing. Best to you in the contest. Hugs!
Comment Written 13-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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I'm only replying to you tonight - because I just reviewed a piece of work of yours that I had been waiting to review anyway... I had wanted to give you a 6 for it because it was such a cool word, but also there are so many posts of yours that deserve my sixes. I have a group of you that I love so much that I have been waiting to type for the week. You and one other are the only ones tonight. I will be a good patient and only get a few reviews done so that I can at least work my muscles the proper amount tomorrow. I can only type for so long each day for the next few weeks. I have to ration it for other tasks. So FS has to take a back seat. I let Gloria know I think that I will pop in every other weekend or so and I think I am going to try that for a while so I don't feel so overwhelmed once or twice in the week. But I had contest stuff and have a few more that I dared to involve myself to push out a few more things that revolve around the year's grateful decision. I'm grateful for you and your quick review of my work and the lovely notes in your review. I will be here reading for sure. I am so thankful for the things you offer my brain! Hugs and Love, Fonda
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I'm so honored that you take time for me, Fonda. But please do take care of your health first and give me an update on how to be praying for you!! ♥♥
Comment from Iza Deleanu
What a fantastic idea to put all the memories in a coat. The grief that can be placed in a hook behind the door next to the coat. Good luck with your writing.
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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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What a fantastic idea to put all the memories in a coat. The grief that can be placed in a hook behind the door next to the coat. Good luck with your writing.
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Comment Written 13-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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thank you for your kind review. I am grateful.
Comment from 24chas
Love the concept of this, Fonda. And your execution was flawless. It had a good flow to it and the message was well stated and easy to understand. Great job and good luck in the contest.
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Love the concept of this, Fonda. And your execution was flawless. It had a good flow to it and the message was well stated and easy to understand. Great job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
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That was super fast and thank you... Well here it is... I was just about to send you the link because I couldn't get this thing to copy as I forgot I did it in Paint ergggh - okay well I will take your compliments - and right back at ya... I will probably get all kinds of hate now... But it was nice to see the first review be you of course. Thank you :)