A Broken Heart Won't Kill Ya
[Meant to be sung, folks - not precise meter...]67 total reviews
Comment from royowen
I somehow knew when it was time to move, the only Achilles heel I experienced was my my first love, she dumped me, which absolutely shattered me, and about seven years later we coupled again and guess what? She did it again, but I'm glad because I met my wife a couple of years later, that was the right one. Beautifully written Song Yvette, you are a clever girl. Blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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I somehow knew when it was time to move, the only Achilles heel I experienced was my my first love, she dumped me, which absolutely shattered me, and about seven years later we coupled again and guess what? She did it again, but I'm glad because I met my wife a couple of years later, that was the right one. Beautifully written Song Yvette, you are a clever girl. Blessings, Roy
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much, Roy, for stopping by on this one -- always so good to hear from you over here! ;) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care! ;) Yvette
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Well done
Comment from A. Louise Robertson
This is a beautiful song, composed by someone who has experienced the loss of a love and had their heart shattered. Though I don't know what tune would go with these lyrics, I made up some notes in my head so thatI could "hear" the words. I know I'm not the only one who can relate to the emotions that you invoke. It is a well written piece.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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This is a beautiful song, composed by someone who has experienced the loss of a love and had their heart shattered. Though I don't know what tune would go with these lyrics, I made up some notes in my head so thatI could "hear" the words. I know I'm not the only one who can relate to the emotions that you invoke. It is a well written piece.
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much, A-Louise, for stopping by on this one -- always so good to hear from you over here! ;) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from StrengthInNumbers
Hello!
I enjoyed reading your piece!
First I'll talk about the artwork, because it is stunning. I think I see why you chose this. The two trees almost look like a heart, but they are wilting and looking sad, so if it's a heart, it's a broken one. Also the two birds, at opposite ends of the picture goes along nicely with the theme. The moon shines, as the sun has set on this relationship.
I actually tried singing it out loud. It works as a song, but I would love to know the tune.
Do you write the music to go along with lyrics?
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Hello!
I enjoyed reading your piece!
First I'll talk about the artwork, because it is stunning. I think I see why you chose this. The two trees almost look like a heart, but they are wilting and looking sad, so if it's a heart, it's a broken one. Also the two birds, at opposite ends of the picture goes along nicely with the theme. The moon shines, as the sun has set on this relationship.
I actually tried singing it out loud. It works as a song, but I would love to know the tune.
Do you write the music to go along with lyrics?
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Yeah, got the music in my head, but i don't write... :) Thanx so much, my friend, for stopping by on this one -- so good to hear from you over here! ;) Sorry I've been a bit AWOL lately - been packing up our house to get it ready to sell... but gonna spend some time here today! ;) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from lyenochka
Great job with this song. I couldn't think right away of any tune that would go with this but the sentiment is completely understandable. I know several young men who've experienced this and they still haven't recovered. It doesn't help to tell them that there are other fish in the sea. But your song helps because it affirms the pain is real.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Great job with this song. I couldn't think right away of any tune that would go with this but the sentiment is completely understandable. I know several young men who've experienced this and they still haven't recovered. It doesn't help to tell them that there are other fish in the sea. But your song helps because it affirms the pain is real.
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much, Helen, for stopping by on this one -- so good to hear from you over here! ;) Sorry I've been a bit AWOL lately - been packing up our house to get it ready to sell... but gonna spend some time here today! ;) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care! ;) Yvette
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Always a joy to hear from you, Yvette! Hope all the house sale process goes smoothly! Congrats on the honorable mention in the Review Contest! You are amazing juggling so much! ♥
Comment from Diana L Crawford
Love, love, love this! What a great song! Perfect description of heartbreak and how it feels like you died sometimes! Would make a great slow rock or country song!
Thanks so much for sharing this! xoxo
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Love, love, love this! What a great song! Perfect description of heartbreak and how it feels like you died sometimes! Would make a great slow rock or country song!
Thanks so much for sharing this! xoxo
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much for those beautiful stars, Diana -- songs are something I do rarely as they have to have a 'push' behind them... ;) :) And I guess I would have a preference for a rock ballad, but it does seem country, yeah? :) Sorry I've been a bit AWOL lately - gonna spend some time here today... :) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care, my lady! ;) Yvette
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You and me both! My twin grandkids are here and their momma actually let me and my daughter see them. Her and my son have had their difficulty and she is in a "you can't see Dad", so sad, just hurts the kids the most. My grandson just clung to me the whole time we been able to see them this week. We haven't see them since last summer and before that, it was about 2 years. Ugh, life sometimes! :) and of course, i like the ROCK-N-ROLL idea the best!! HAHA! xoxoxoxoxoxox
Comment from Willie P. Smith
Six stars, going on 12, Yvette. This would make a beautiful, but sad, country song. I believe Alan Jackson would be the best choice to record it.
You should send it to his manager, copyrighted. You song bird, you.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Six stars, going on 12, Yvette. This would make a beautiful, but sad, country song. I believe Alan Jackson would be the best choice to record it.
You should send it to his manager, copyrighted. You song bird, you.
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Alan J, huh? Wow... I am flattered. ;) :) Thanx so much for those beautiful stars, Willie -- songs are something I do rarely as they have to have a 'push' behind them... ;) :) Sorry I've been a bit AWOL lately - been packing up our house to get it ready to sell... but gonna spend some time here today! ;) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Sugarray77
Such a unique and beautiful song, Yvette. I like it that you shared it with us... I do not remember if you have written lyrics before here on FS. So well done!!!
Melissa
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Such a unique and beautiful song, Yvette. I like it that you shared it with us... I do not remember if you have written lyrics before here on FS. So well done!!!
Melissa
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much, Melissa, for stopping by on this one -- always so good to hear from you over here! ;) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Shirley McLain
That five actually reads six. I thought I should tell you since I loved your poem about your broken heart. I wonder if there is a female our age that hasn't experienced a broken heart. Great job. Shirley
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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That five actually reads six. I thought I should tell you since I loved your poem about your broken heart. I wonder if there is a female our age that hasn't experienced a broken heart. Great job. Shirley
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much, Shirley, for stopping by on this one -- so good to hear from you over here! ;) Sorry I've been a bit AWOL lately - been packing up our house to get it ready to sell... but gonna spend some time here today! ;) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care! ;) Yvette
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Selling a house is so much work. All is well here, right now. My computer died 2 days ago and my Grandson rebuilt it for me. Take care and God Bless.
Comment from Drew Delaney
No six stars left! So sorry! I loved this. I used to write songs too, but once my house burned, I never got any instruments to play. Just chording got me going. The music part came naturally. The words were harder for me. Well, take care now! Drew xx
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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No six stars left! So sorry! I loved this. I used to write songs too, but once my house burned, I never got any instruments to play. Just chording got me going. The music part came naturally. The words were harder for me. Well, take care now! Drew xx
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much, Drew, for stopping by on this one -- so good to hear from you over here! ;) Sorry I've been a bit AWOL lately - been packing up our house to get it ready to sell... but gonna spend some time here today! ;) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from country ranch writer
Who knows one day it might be a hit song if a broken ol relationship but remember one can die of a real broken because Greer hearts were so intertwined.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Who knows one day it might be a hit song if a broken ol relationship but remember one can die of a real broken because Greer hearts were so intertwined.
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much, Barb, for stopping by on this one -- always so good to hear from you over here! ;) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care! ;) Yvette
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Hope life is treating you good. Here they are rioting and burning and shooting up the country. They are going about things the wrong way.