Short Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Mistaken Identity"A book of a mixture of stories
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Comment from RBrown201
That was a pretty nice story line. I think it does not need any more work, it is great the way it is.
I hope you continue writing because you are pretty good at it:)
RBrown201
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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That was a pretty nice story line. I think it does not need any more work, it is great the way it is.
I hope you continue writing because you are pretty good at it:)
RBrown201
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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RBrown,
Thank you for the compliment and the review. smiles, Carol
Comment from anne1204
Clever little story. Good build up and good ending. Character description are realistic. A very entertaining read. Good writing. Anne 1204
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Clever little story. Good build up and good ending. Character description are realistic. A very entertaining read. Good writing. Anne 1204
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Anne
So pleased that you enjoyed the story. Thank you for your kind review. CArol
Comment from Sasha
What a lovely ending to a nearly disastrous day. You did a great job with this and I found it very well written and kept me glued to my chair. I think is is great entry for the contest and I wish you all the best.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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What a lovely ending to a nearly disastrous day. You did a great job with this and I found it very well written and kept me glued to my chair. I think is is great entry for the contest and I wish you all the best.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Sasha,
So glad you enjoyed the story..Proves sometimes mishaps pay off big time...Smiles, Carol
Comment from ms. cardshark
Cute story. Nice twist with the underdog getting the guy. Well written, and concise. Good luck in the contest, nice entry.
MM
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Cute story. Nice twist with the underdog getting the guy. Well written, and concise. Good luck in the contest, nice entry.
MM
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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MM
Thank you so much for the wonderful review. I appreciate your generous comments,
Carol
Comment from flygirl254
Absolutely fabulous contest entry - and I believe this will be a great contender for the prize. The way the story progressed was entirely believable, because this is something that lots of people do; press send without realizign what they've done. I don't think this would be considered romance, which was ruled out by the prompt, but some might feel it is. I think of it more as humor. It's a wonderful piece, either way. Great work! Good luck!
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Absolutely fabulous contest entry - and I believe this will be a great contender for the prize. The way the story progressed was entirely believable, because this is something that lots of people do; press send without realizign what they've done. I don't think this would be considered romance, which was ruled out by the prompt, but some might feel it is. I think of it more as humor. It's a wonderful piece, either way. Great work! Good luck!
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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flygirl
I didn't consider it romance because she wasn't looking for a relationship with him..She finished another of Susan's jobs and then was big enough to take the blame...Can't help the consequences benefited her as well...Thanks for the wonderful review...Carol
Comment from lola29
Carol, I really enjoyed your story, and with e-mails, this happens all too often. In today's hi-tech climate, people really take a chance when they post something in writing.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Carol, I really enjoyed your story, and with e-mails, this happens all too often. In today's hi-tech climate, people really take a chance when they post something in writing.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Lola,
Though I don't think Susan intended to send her day dreaming email...an innocent mistake of Mandy trying to finish Susan's job as usual certainly led to a few surprising events...Thanks for the great review. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Thesis
Carol, that was smoothe. I liked how you built up Susan's ability to lure men, while downplaying Mandy's.
One for the good guy's. Mandy was willing to take a bullet for her friend and winds up with the "prize." - John
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Carol, that was smoothe. I liked how you built up Susan's ability to lure men, while downplaying Mandy's.
One for the good guy's. Mandy was willing to take a bullet for her friend and winds up with the "prize." - John
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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John,
Glad you enjoyed this story...Without even trying, Mandy came out on top...Hurrah for the good guy or girl!! thanks for the kind review.Smiles, Carol
Comment from ulster3
Hello writer friend.
I liked the characters and the sense of integrity you gave to Mandy. This work flowed well and was easy to read. Amusing. Ulster
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Hello writer friend.
I liked the characters and the sense of integrity you gave to Mandy. This work flowed well and was easy to read. Amusing. Ulster
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Ulster,
Thank you so much for the kind and generous review. I always appreciate knowing others enjoyed my story. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Alison Williams
Oh I enjoyed this so much. It was a fun read. Good characterisation, love the 'in your face to Susan.' They might be friends but she was incredibly bitchy to Mandy.
Hehehe Well done. Again, I didn't spot any errors,I rarely do in your work!
Alison :)
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Oh I enjoyed this so much. It was a fun read. Good characterisation, love the 'in your face to Susan.' They might be friends but she was incredibly bitchy to Mandy.
Hehehe Well done. Again, I didn't spot any errors,I rarely do in your work!
Alison :)
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Alison,
Thank you so much for the wonderful review. I always appreciate hearing from you. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Penpal
Lol. I especially liked the dialog in this piece which is realistic and wonderfully written. I liked how the story turns out as well. My only consideration would be when Mandy is wondering if Jack would fire Susan or embarrass her since Mandy told him she had sent the letter.
Well, I can understand if she assumed Jack knew Susan's pen name as well, so I guess it can work. What a surprise for her to be asked out for dinner.
Pen
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Lol. I especially liked the dialog in this piece which is realistic and wonderfully written. I liked how the story turns out as well. My only consideration would be when Mandy is wondering if Jack would fire Susan or embarrass her since Mandy told him she had sent the letter.
Well, I can understand if she assumed Jack knew Susan's pen name as well, so I guess it can work. What a surprise for her to be asked out for dinner.
Pen
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Pen
Thanks for the kind review. I wrote this a t midnight last night so my mind wasn't working on all cylinders, I guess. Smiles, Carol