Short Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Keep The Juices Flowing"A book of a mixture of stories
46 total reviews
Comment from Ash Madox
Great write, Carol. Creeping and crawling around in the trapped mind of a writer who neglects what's most important. How many of us can relate to that at times? It's like an exposition of being torn between two lovers--unable to make one feel complete without sacrifice of the other. Then the conclusion with common sense prevailing--perfect. Really enjoyed it. Cheers. Ash.
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
  |
Great write, Carol. Creeping and crawling around in the trapped mind of a writer who neglects what's most important. How many of us can relate to that at times? It's like an exposition of being torn between two lovers--unable to make one feel complete without sacrifice of the other. Then the conclusion with common sense prevailing--perfect. Really enjoyed it. Cheers. Ash.
Comment Written 15-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
-
Ash,
Thank you somuch...My life has been so turned upside down of late, I feel that I have neglected everything and every one. The story though told from a man's point of view just tumbled out of me this morning. Glad you enjoyed and I thank you for your continued support and kindness. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your story that reminds us of our true priorities. ("Time" lost its "e" in paragraph four.) I especially liked your use of hyperbole in the first paragraph and your fresh "niggling of shame worms..."
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
|
I enjoyed your story that reminds us of our true priorities. ("Time" lost its "e" in paragraph four.) I especially liked your use of hyperbole in the first paragraph and your fresh "niggling of shame worms..."
Comment Written 15-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
-
Joan,
Thank you so much for reading and for your continued support of my work. I truly appreciate the kindness. Smiles, Carol
Comment from adewpearl
typo - Tim stops for no one - Time
You know I have a dead line to meet - deadline
You get into the mind of this obsessed writer so well, Carol - I can imagine his writing without stop except for a brief meal or shower. The dialogue also works well to expose the wife's feelings - I could hear the tone of her desperation and her feelings of abandonment. The ending where they both come together is touching. Brooke
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
|
typo - Tim stops for no one - Time
You know I have a dead line to meet - deadline
You get into the mind of this obsessed writer so well, Carol - I can imagine his writing without stop except for a brief meal or shower. The dialogue also works well to expose the wife's feelings - I could hear the tone of her desperation and her feelings of abandonment. The ending where they both come together is touching. Brooke
Comment Written 15-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
-
Brooke,
I had hust caught the first typo, but missed the second. It's fixed and I thank you for the eagle eye...Does that come with your love of nature? lol I truly appreciate the kind words and your enjoyment. Thank you again...Smiles, Carol
-
Yeah, they do both come from being observant. LOL
Comment from ladybird
A very nice read,and oh so true sometimes. I think you have written very well how the overwhelming need to put thinsg on paper can blot out everything else around us, even to the exclusion of the ones we love.
(Tim) stops for no one. Add an e
..... know I have a (dead line) to meet." deadline
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
|
A very nice read,and oh so true sometimes. I think you have written very well how the overwhelming need to put thinsg on paper can blot out everything else around us, even to the exclusion of the ones we love.
(Tim) stops for no one. Add an e
..... know I have a (dead line) to meet." deadline
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
-
ladybird,
I just completed rereading it and changing the errors, but I thank you for catching them as well. The more eyes the better for these weary ones. Thanks for the continued suppport and for enjoying. smiles, Carol
-
You're welcome.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Carol,
You have such a fluid imagination which serves you well. I use the word
fluid' because all of your writes are smooth and easy to understand. This one is exceptional and speaks to me on several levels. Well done...blessings, chey
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
|
Hi Carol,
You have such a fluid imagination which serves you well. I use the word
fluid' because all of your writes are smooth and easy to understand. This one is exceptional and speaks to me on several levels. Well done...blessings, chey
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
-
Chey,
I think we can all relate in one way or the other with this one. I truly thank you for your support and all your kindness. Smiles, Carol
Comment from IndianaIrish
This is a stunning story, Carol! Well-written with an emotional pull from the start. We do tend to get caught up with writing sometimes, don't we? Great descriptions and a story that moves along smoothly...too soon we're at the end.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
 |
This is a stunning story, Carol! Well-written with an emotional pull from the start. We do tend to get caught up with writing sometimes, don't we? Great descriptions and a story that moves along smoothly...too soon we're at the end.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 15-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
-
Karyn,
Awesome..I just started writing this one this morning and it just flowed - guess because we all can relate to the time we devote to our passion. You were my first review and what a stunning begnning...Thank you so much my dear friend for starting my day off with gracious words and glittering stars. Thank you...Carol