Comment from mfowler

Excellent

Great poem, Steve. I feel like I've been very busy. Those imaginative verses full of teddy bear and girl activity really roll along with great rhythm and detailed movements. The form, rhyme and meter are terrific and aid the sense of purpose. The poem is alive within the imagination of the bear and feels so realistic with all of the dialogue and great descriptions. I liked this part best:
The morning flies past in the blink of an eye;
What adventures we shared in, my Molly and I.
What booty we plundered, what galleons we sank!
Though my fur's a bit wet - that's from walking the plank.
But the brigands were beaten - piratical bunch-
And we scuppered the lot just in time for our lunch!

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014

Thanks!

Yes a kid's (and a bear's) life is always busy. I have a bit of a soft spot for this poem....

Steve

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Cute is an understatement! Kids would love it and adults too, I think. What fun to have Teddy tell the story from his Point of view. Sounds like a great book! :)

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014

Thanks, Phyllis.

I may have confused people - the book is just a random bunch of my children's poems - not a coherent story - although, now that you mention it!

Steve

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

congratulations on your win! you deserved it! love the concept of the teddy bear. nice and light-hearted fun!
thank you for sharing!

rebekka x

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014

Thanks, Rebekka.

The win was a couple of years ago...

Steve

Comment from Emily George

Exceptional

It's delightful, what lucky kids.
Great aa,bb,cc rhyming,end rhymes are terrific.(I'm sure Teddy would approve)
I liked the rhyme the illustration that complemented it to a tea(sorry)
you really created wonderful word imagery

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014

Emily, thanks for the generous review and the six lovely stars.

Steve

Comment from OLA THOMAS

Excellent

Well, this is an interesting post about Molly and Teddy. I like the run which contains kiddies' real minds and activities. Digging deep into the minds of the kids to come out with this formula.

ola thomas

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014

Thanks, Ola. Glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from granny goes viral

Excellent

I loved this. I must look into the rest of the story. And I don't think I ever had a teddy. Boo hoo. Maybe I had a bankie. My granddaughter had a teddy. She dragged it around, called it a softy. She is 20 now, leaving home. Oh well...good job.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014

Now, now, don't be having a severe case of teddy envy!

Thanks for reviewing - the book is not one coherent story, just a collection of most of my children's poems.

Steve

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

We snuggle up tightly, the moon shines its beams
On Molly and Teddy, together in dreams.
Well done...Steve...is this in print.....
Congrats with the win
God bless

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014

Thanks, jenny.

Alas, nothing of mine is really in print yet. I have sent a few of the poems in this collection away for possible inclusion in an anthology called 'Prints Rhyming' to come out next year, but it is also my goal to take more serious steps towards getting something published this year. OMG the year's half gone!

Steve

reply by kiwijenny on 04-Aug-2014

Steve you had a goal to win contests on here and accomplished that..you will get published.try authorspublish.com
Fatfoxbooks.com
Hopeclarkfundsforwriters.com. I too am trying to get published. I am going to 2 writing conferences to meet publishers. I will let you know what I find out there
Try going direct to small publishing houses...
This is the blind leading the blind I have only had rejection emails so far:o)
God bless

reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014

Jenny, thanks for the tips.

I will get further down the road towards publishing one way or another this year!

Steve

Comment from livelylinda

Exceptional

Steve: this is a very clever and entertaining book for children. I can see their little eyes glowing as mom or dad, perhaps granddad, reads them this poem. They will giggle with delight at the pirates and nod with recognition about the tea party. They will grimace at the thought of a bath, end of day, but feel comfort once those pjs are on and they are in bed waiting for their story. Great poem for children. livelylinda

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014

Linda, thanks for the lovely verbal picture of children listening to the poem. So glad you enjoyed this.

Steve

Comment from NicciFaye

Excellent

Congrats on the win! This is wonderful, beautiful and just lovely. Great structure and wording of each stanza. What child or adult wouldn't love this poem? Amazing.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014

Thank you for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

Well, kids love teddy bears, especially ones dressed up as pirates, and who drink tea! Cute story, with good rhymes and cute characters. Enjoyable read. Faye

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014

Thanks, Faye - glad you enjoyed.

Steve