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Comment from Laurie Clayton
Hello there,
Love the imagery and feel of your 5-7-5 entry. It would be nice to go back to a more innocent time, wouldn't it.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Laurie
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2013
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Hello there,
Love the imagery and feel of your 5-7-5 entry. It would be nice to go back to a more innocent time, wouldn't it.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Laurie
Comment Written 05-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from Titanx9
This 5/7/5 poem is cogent and clear even without your author notes. One can imagine all the potentials, which are usually in the heart, waiting to burst free and discover the wonders of the world. I like this one.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2013
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This 5/7/5 poem is cogent and clear even without your author notes. One can imagine all the potentials, which are usually in the heart, waiting to burst free and discover the wonders of the world. I like this one.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from ElegantButler
I love this simple poem. It is because of its simplicity, not in spite of it, that its message comes through so clearly.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2013
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I love this simple poem. It is because of its simplicity, not in spite of it, that its message comes through so clearly.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from Topher Phaestus
The first two lines of this are really beautiful, but the last one almost seems to come out of nowhere.
You've got the perfect syllable count and the picture goes perfectly.
I feel like the content is very safe. There is nothing in the contest rules stating that you have to do a nature poem.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2013
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The first two lines of this are really beautiful, but the last one almost seems to come out of nowhere.
You've got the perfect syllable count and the picture goes perfectly.
I feel like the content is very safe. There is nothing in the contest rules stating that you have to do a nature poem.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2013
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Thanks
Comment from richardwarfe
I really like this piece, it has strong imagery and a romantic undertone that really celebrates the beauty of birth and transformation. The image suits it so well too the way it echoes the heart shape of the cocoon. Great work.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2013
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I really like this piece, it has strong imagery and a romantic undertone that really celebrates the beauty of birth and transformation. The image suits it so well too the way it echoes the heart shape of the cocoon. Great work.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from arkyn_the_brave
You have managed to capture an interesting idea quite well in just a few short lines. I sort of had an idea of what you were talking about even before I read the 'Author Notes,' which is an accomplishment for such a short poem. The advantage of doing a poem in this style is that you really have to think about your words and make every one count in order to achieve meaning. You have done this here. Each word contributes to what you are trying to convey. Good work.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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You have managed to capture an interesting idea quite well in just a few short lines. I sort of had an idea of what you were talking about even before I read the 'Author Notes,' which is an accomplishment for such a short poem. The advantage of doing a poem in this style is that you really have to think about your words and make every one count in order to achieve meaning. You have done this here. Each word contributes to what you are trying to convey. Good work.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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I appreciate your analytical feedback.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
How true this is. We lose the innocence and feeling of we feel as we grow. Well phrased 5-7-5. Good luck in the contest and keep writing! Debbie
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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How true this is. We lose the innocence and feeling of we feel as we grow. Well phrased 5-7-5. Good luck in the contest and keep writing! Debbie
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from PhilThePoet
Extremely good use of imagery in this lovely 5-7-5. The picture accompanies the piece well and rounds off a great contest entry.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Extremely good use of imagery in this lovely 5-7-5. The picture accompanies the piece well and rounds off a great contest entry.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
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You're very welcome! Good luck in the contest :) I entered it a few months back... been excited to see the winner ever since! Not long now!
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Still it will take two weeks at least for declaration of the winner.and i glad to finally meet a person who i near my age..lol..have great time:-)
Comment from notdeadyet
As you say, by the time we realize life is not fair, it is too late! We can go back in memory, though. That is what is so stupendous about writing. We can re create our childhood. This is a very lovely sentiment written concisely.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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As you say, by the time we realize life is not fair, it is too late! We can go back in memory, though. That is what is so stupendous about writing. We can re create our childhood. This is a very lovely sentiment written concisely.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from RedMarie33
Lovely poem - I love the imagery! You found the perfect picture to go with your poem.
I also love the rhyme in the 2nd & 3rd line.
I also really like the explanation in the author's notes - it helps even better understand and "feel" the poem.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Lovely poem - I love the imagery! You found the perfect picture to go with your poem.
I also love the rhyme in the 2nd & 3rd line.
I also really like the explanation in the author's notes - it helps even better understand and "feel" the poem.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)