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Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Revival of the Red"5/7/5 poems
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Comment from hari anand
Thats very creative, I love the L Work it flows so smoothly. Rave resurrection perfect satorie.picture perfect. Great work.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
Thats very creative, I love the L Work it flows so smoothly. Rave resurrection perfect satorie.picture perfect. Great work.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from fdgsr
In general I do not like 5-7-5 style. It is too restrictive. I let any poem take the form of its own rhythm and rhyme. I never force it into a mold. Sometimes I find a mold ready made for my theme. I only wrote two such poems in my life. Thanks for this. I understand the underlying meaning, or have faked it. Thanks for this.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
In general I do not like 5-7-5 style. It is too restrictive. I let any poem take the form of its own rhythm and rhyme. I never force it into a mold. Sometimes I find a mold ready made for my theme. I only wrote two such poems in my life. Thanks for this. I understand the underlying meaning, or have faked it. Thanks for this.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from H Darwin Reeves
Interesting. Read in the light of a vampire this makes good sense. Great imagery. "Lurk lusty leeches
love luminal life-liquor" great description of a vampire. You've packed a lot of description in a few words. Good job. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
Interesting. Read in the light of a vampire this makes good sense. Great imagery. "Lurk lusty leeches
love luminal life-liquor" great description of a vampire. You've packed a lot of description in a few words. Good job. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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I appreciate your comments.
Thanks for your lovely words and excellent review:-)
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi AS,
Creative and thought provoking - I'm not sure I truly understand what you wisdom is in this one. But creative imagery for sure. Your syllables are spot on.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
"Lurk lusty leeches 5
love luminal life-liquor 7
rave resurrection " 5
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
Hi AS,
Creative and thought provoking - I'm not sure I truly understand what you wisdom is in this one. But creative imagery for sure. Your syllables are spot on.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
"Lurk lusty leeches 5
love luminal life-liquor 7
rave resurrection " 5
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Hello:-)
The first and second line depict their typical traits.
The word 'luminal' is tricky here and doesn't mean 'glowing'.It refers to the class of medicines classified as sedatives.
I am glad to receive a review from you.thanks for the excellent rating:-).
You truly are an inspiration.
Regards
Anupam
Comment from Ben Colder
5-7-5 about blood suckers. The poem is good and right on but when wading in water where they live; always carry a sharp knife or burn them loose with a match.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
5-7-5 about blood suckers. The poem is good and right on but when wading in water where they live; always carry a sharp knife or burn them loose with a match.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Thanks for sharing your words and excellent review:-)
Comment from Cindy Warren
Nice job with the alliteration. I don't think I'd want to be a vampire, or even meet one. Great picture, very creepy. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
Nice job with the alliteration. I don't think I'd want to be a vampire, or even meet one. Great picture, very creepy. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from Jane Johnson
Well you made that look easy. Maybe you should try ghost writing, as you seemed to have nailed the meaning in a very few words/syllables. I like the artwork you chose and the words flowed well. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
Well you made that look easy. Maybe you should try ghost writing, as you seemed to have nailed the meaning in a very few words/syllables. I like the artwork you chose and the words flowed well. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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It's a big complement.but I have never thought about it.I am not so good at narrating stories and framing characters.
Thank you for your generous rating and excellent review:-)
Comment from country ranch writer
Vampires are at it again I see wrecking havoc down by the sea ,nice picture for the poem so what are the vampires out roaming this time as if I didn't know!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
Vampires are at it again I see wrecking havoc down by the sea ,nice picture for the poem so what are the vampires out roaming this time as if I didn't know!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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thanks for your interesting review and excellent rating:)
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welcome
Comment from muezza56
i really enjoyed reading this really well written 5-7-5 poem on the subject of the blood lust of vampires, great imagery with great choice of acc ompanying pic
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
i really enjoyed reading this really well written 5-7-5 poem on the subject of the blood lust of vampires, great imagery with great choice of acc ompanying pic
Comment Written 16-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from Norbanus
You catch Vampire red with lust for blood
the rave for resurrection understood
Now, there beneath the bat infested moon
The victim who is next will be found soon
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
You catch Vampire red with lust for blood
the rave for resurrection understood
Now, there beneath the bat infested moon
The victim who is next will be found soon
Comment Written 16-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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That's a wonderful quatrain.i appreciate your comments.
If you wish,go to the prompt i created,you will surely win...hehe..
Thanks for the amazing review:-)