A Broken Heart Won't Kill Ya
[Meant to be sung, folks - not precise meter...]67 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
Maybe a broken heart won't kill ya, but is sure will make you feel like it is trying to.
I think we have all been in love and had our hearts broken so this is easy to relate to. It seems very singable as well. Nice lyrics and a tune shouldn't be too hard to find to match it.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Maybe a broken heart won't kill ya, but is sure will make you feel like it is trying to.
I think we have all been in love and had our hearts broken so this is easy to relate to. It seems very singable as well. Nice lyrics and a tune shouldn't be too hard to find to match it.
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much for those beautiful stars, W.J. -- songs are something I do rarely as they have to have a 'push' behind them... ;) :) Sorry I've been a bit AWOL lately - been packing up our house to get it ready to sell... but gonna spend some time here today! ;) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from GE Parson
Yep, abroken heart won't kill you but every one I had, killed a little part of me, until I had no feelings for giving my heart to another, for a long long time.
Really like your song and different chorus for each verse.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Yep, abroken heart won't kill you but every one I had, killed a little part of me, until I had no feelings for giving my heart to another, for a long long time.
Really like your song and different chorus for each verse.
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thank you for your review! ;)
Comment from Raul1
This is a very good poem on the matters of a broken heart. I like how you structured this poem. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. I like your poem. Nice work. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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This is a very good poem on the matters of a broken heart. I like how you structured this poem. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. I like your poem. Nice work. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thank you for your review!
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You're welcome!
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for the reminder in this song that a broken heart will not kill us. I admired your rhymes and varying choruses. The artwork helped to establish the mood for your lost love song. Sighs- Joan
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thank you for the reminder in this song that a broken heart will not kill us. I admired your rhymes and varying choruses. The artwork helped to establish the mood for your lost love song. Sighs- Joan
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much for those beautiful stars, Joan -- songs are something I do rarely as they have to have a 'push' behind them... ;) :) Sorry I've been a bit AWOL lately - been packing up our house to get it ready to sell... but gonna spend some time here today! ;) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care! ;) Yvette
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Best wishes in preparing your house for sale and the ultimate process. That's one challenge I don't currently face. Be safe and well- Joan
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Nice ikebana of feelings aka picture and feel well with the poem. I really like the chorus section, it's quite inspiring and optimistic :"But a broken heart won't kill ya
Though it'll change your point of view
The colors fade
To black and gray
Knowing dreams just don't come true
No, a broken heart won't kill ya
But I guarantee you this
Deep down inside
You'll think you've died
And you lose the will to live"
Thank you for sharing and have a lovely day.
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reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Nice ikebana of feelings aka picture and feel well with the poem. I really like the chorus section, it's quite inspiring and optimistic :"But a broken heart won't kill ya
Though it'll change your point of view
The colors fade
To black and gray
Knowing dreams just don't come true
No, a broken heart won't kill ya
But I guarantee you this
Deep down inside
You'll think you've died
And you lose the will to live"
Thank you for sharing and have a lovely day.
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Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much, Bill, for stopping by on this one -- always so good to hear from you over here! ;) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from January L'Angelle
I like this song. It has some great elements. My husband is a professional singer/ songwriter... that's what he's done for over 50 years. So, when I see a song, I ask him to look at it with me. The note that he gave was that the chorus was longer than the verse. He said you might think about breaking up the chorus and making some of it into verse. (Less is more) The song is good, keep going with it. He actually sang it. (A shorter version of it) It came out pretty good. - I like this a lot! I think it's a very good song. -January L.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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I like this song. It has some great elements. My husband is a professional singer/ songwriter... that's what he's done for over 50 years. So, when I see a song, I ask him to look at it with me. The note that he gave was that the chorus was longer than the verse. He said you might think about breaking up the chorus and making some of it into verse. (Less is more) The song is good, keep going with it. He actually sang it. (A shorter version of it) It came out pretty good. - I like this a lot! I think it's a very good song. -January L.
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Appreciate it, January, but sometimes we don't write to publish, we write for the outlet of feelings... :) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care! ;) Yvette
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Yvette... I didn't mean in any way to offend you. I hope I have not. I loved the song exactly as it was. We sang it and it was so pretty. Your talent is amazing. I hope to see much more. God bless you and your family. -January L.
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Not at all, Beautiful Lady - I appreciate the gesture!! ;) You have a wonderful week, ya hear?! ;) :)
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello dear Yvette!
Damn!
You are one talented writer! No genre is too difficult or challenging for you to attempt and master!
But... I must admit, this song was incredibly sad for me to absorb. It's been a lifetime since I felt these selfsame emotions, but I certainly can relate...
Would love to hear your song sung!
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Hello dear Yvette!
Damn!
You are one talented writer! No genre is too difficult or challenging for you to attempt and master!
But... I must admit, this song was incredibly sad for me to absorb. It's been a lifetime since I felt these selfsame emotions, but I certainly can relate...
Would love to hear your song sung!
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much for those beautiful stars, Lady Di -- songs are something I do rarely because they have to have a 'push' behind them... ;) :) Sorry I've been a bit AWOL lately (you know why) - gonna spend some time here today! ;) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe, my wonderful friend - take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Sandra Leon-Gonzalez
This was totally awesome my friend. You painted such a descriptive portrait with these words that drew me in to feel the emptiness left from a broken heart. I remember so vividly and this piece brought those memories back of a young naïve me who thought there would be no life after my first love. Thankfully age and experience proved me wrong, and I now know that you must always choose to love. Thanks for sharing this sad but beautiful piece.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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This was totally awesome my friend. You painted such a descriptive portrait with these words that drew me in to feel the emptiness left from a broken heart. I remember so vividly and this piece brought those memories back of a young naïve me who thought there would be no life after my first love. Thankfully age and experience proved me wrong, and I now know that you must always choose to love. Thanks for sharing this sad but beautiful piece.
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much for those beautiful stars, Sandra -- songs are something I do rarely because they have to have a 'push' behind them... ;) :) Sorry I've been a bit AWOL lately - been packing up our house to get it ready to sell... but gonna spend some time here today! ;) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care! ;) Yvette
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I've been rather busy and haven't had much time to be on. Please be well.
Comment from aryr
This was great Yvette, and I think I heard to tune rumbling in my head. It was a sad poem/ song but you addressed it very well. I do agree that one does not die from a broken heart but it can sorely tear one up. Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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This was great Yvette, and I think I heard to tune rumbling in my head. It was a sad poem/ song but you addressed it very well. I do agree that one does not die from a broken heart but it can sorely tear one up. Well done.
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much, Alie, for stopping by on this one -- always so good to hear from you over here! ;) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care! ;) Yvette
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You are so very welcome Yvette, well I guess Arizona is Arizona, although it has been triple digits for about 3 weeks and according to the new that is unusual until mid June or early July. Oh well, hot is hot lol.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hey Yvette. That certainly is an interesting song title. I certainly understand the sentiment. I don't thingk there is anyone that hasn't experienced a broken heart.
There was a little fatalism in the lyrics: "
You'll think you've died
And you lose the will to live.
That's pretty tough. :~(
You need to write you some music for this.
Da Z :~)))
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Hey Yvette. That certainly is an interesting song title. I certainly understand the sentiment. I don't thingk there is anyone that hasn't experienced a broken heart.
There was a little fatalism in the lyrics: "
You'll think you've died
And you lose the will to live.
That's pretty tough. :~(
You need to write you some music for this.
Da Z :~)))
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thanx so much, Z, for stopping by on this one -- so good to hear from you over here! ;) Sorry I've been a bit AWOL lately - been packing up our house to get it ready to sell... but gonna spend some time here today! ;) Hope all's well in your corner of the universe - take care! ;) Yvette
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You're welcome.
Nothing much happening here, just bathing in some of the ugly words coming my way for the last couple of posts.
I don't envy you. I don't know if I could ever sell a house and move again.
Early in my corporate career, My wife and I went to 19 house closings in 13 years. We closed on this house 35 years ago. No Mas. :~)))))