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Comment from misscookie
I love the artwork it beauitful If I look at long enough it put me in a reance.
your story is vry touching. I sense the feeling when the woman reach to toudh her husband and inhaled his scent. I went through this for a long time after my mate pssed away. this is a good write.
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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I love the artwork it beauitful If I look at long enough it put me in a reance.
your story is vry touching. I sense the feeling when the woman reach to toudh her husband and inhaled his scent. I went through this for a long time after my mate pssed away. this is a good write.
Comment Written 12-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Cookie,
It's funny how we remember so many little things when we lose someone we love. Smiles, Carol
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I think we know it but take everything for granted to apreicate them untill they are gone.
Comment from Treasuregirl
I think you have the beginnings of a good novel here. This first chapter holds much promise and could travel in one or two ways towards sheer romanticism or a more melodramatic situation. Well done and good luck in the contest.
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I think you have the beginnings of a good novel here. This first chapter holds much promise and could travel in one or two ways towards sheer romanticism or a more melodramatic situation. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-May-2010
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Treasuregirl,
Not quite sure where it might lead, but you are right there are many different avenues to follow. Thanks so much..Carol
Comment from fionageorge
Carol, what a wonderful story. So sad, so poignant, and then a little girl brings her mother around to thinking that perhaps, maybe, life may not be so bad.
The dialogue was exquisite, the interaction between mother and daughter so sweet. Mothers weariness and slight impatience at times so realistic. A great and uplifting story, Carol. I wish you luck in the contest, and warmest regards, Marijke
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Carol, what a wonderful story. So sad, so poignant, and then a little girl brings her mother around to thinking that perhaps, maybe, life may not be so bad.
The dialogue was exquisite, the interaction between mother and daughter so sweet. Mothers weariness and slight impatience at times so realistic. A great and uplifting story, Carol. I wish you luck in the contest, and warmest regards, Marijke
Comment Written 12-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Marijke,
Thank you so much. I hoped the little girl's charm would win the reader over and Mom too. Thank you for the awesome review and the blessing of stars. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
I like the implied hope of reconciliation, or a better relationship, between the woman and her father that is implied by the incident of the shoes on the wrong feet. Best wishes, Jeanie Mercer
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I like the implied hope of reconciliation, or a better relationship, between the woman and her father that is implied by the incident of the shoes on the wrong feet. Best wishes, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 12-May-2010
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Jeanie,
There's always a glimmer of hope if we just look for it. Thankyou...Carol
Comment from dportwood
Begin Again,
A truly beautiful, tender little bit of fiction. I liked the shoes-on-the-wrong-feet part. I chuckled along with Katie and her mom. Well done and good luck. You may want to consider editing this one item:
I had things to be done
might be better as:
I had things to do
Duane
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reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Begin Again,
A truly beautiful, tender little bit of fiction. I liked the shoes-on-the-wrong-feet part. I chuckled along with Katie and her mom. Well done and good luck. You may want to consider editing this one item:
I had things to be done
might be better as:
I had things to do
Duane
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Comment Written 12-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Duane,
Thank you for catching that oops! I have corrected it. Smiles, Carol
Comment from bayoupoet
Carol, this is a absolutely wonderful story. I do love the way you write. You are so natural and it is such a pleasure to read for you.
sandra
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Carol, this is a absolutely wonderful story. I do love the way you write. You are so natural and it is such a pleasure to read for you.
sandra
Comment Written 12-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Sandra,
Thanks for putting a big smile on my face this morning. Truly appreciate your thoughts and generous stars. Smiles, Carol
Comment from adewpearl
This sounds like a novel with lots of dramatic possibilities as this woman sets out on a whole new life where there is the potential for new relationships, working out old relationships - you have me hoping you're actually writing a second chapter. I like the characters, the situation. Brooke
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This sounds like a novel with lots of dramatic possibilities as this woman sets out on a whole new life where there is the potential for new relationships, working out old relationships - you have me hoping you're actually writing a second chapter. I like the characters, the situation. Brooke
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Comment Written 12-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Brooke,
The interest in this little story has be reeling in surprise. I think little Katie won quite a few hearts already. Thank you for your generous reply. Smiles, Carol
