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Somebody knows . . . somebody always knows.71 total reviews
Comment from Readywriter52
Maybe Tony should have stuck with the divorce and judge rather than taking justice into his own hands. Ghosts can be very vengeful.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2009
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Maybe Tony should have stuck with the divorce and judge rather than taking justice into his own hands. Ghosts can be very vengeful.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2009
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Thanks for the brief but much appreciated review Readywriter. What was your take on my Charlie character? Please get back to me when you have time...Thanks again, Bob
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Charlie has a walk on/ walk off part so I don't get much of a feel for him. Maybe you should make him a little more pushy. It would have been suspenseful if Charlie came into the house and walked around while Tony is preparing to kill him if he finds the bodies or evidence of the murders.
Sarah
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LOL...Funny you should say that...I had it that way and changed it...LOL...Bob
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But those subtleties are what counts for decent story...must be realistic...like a neighbor dropping by just when you don't need anybody..Bob
Comment from johnss
The moral of the story is, remember to keep your head at all times.
I enjoyed the tale, and certainly the execution was flawless. You must have been writing for quite a while, judging by the smooth flow and good mix of discription and action.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2009
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The moral of the story is, remember to keep your head at all times.
I enjoyed the tale, and certainly the execution was flawless. You must have been writing for quite a while, judging by the smooth flow and good mix of discription and action.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2009
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Hi, John..Thanks so much for your kind review. Yes, I have been writing since 1964. For more info on me and my writes...please see my profile..Thanks again, Bob
Comment from dlewis
Mastery... wow! Very good not sure what to say ; For I'm speechless, although she was cheating ,it was a good sexual turn onuntill the tables turned once her rusband entered the room...Cheaters do get got in the long run...
Too bad they ended up side by side on the front porch...dlewis
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2009
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Mastery... wow! Very good not sure what to say ; For I'm speechless, although she was cheating ,it was a good sexual turn onuntill the tables turned once her rusband entered the room...Cheaters do get got in the long run...
Too bad they ended up side by side on the front porch...dlewis
Comment Written 29-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2009
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Thank you, dlewis. I do appreciate your review very much. What did you think of my Charlie character? Bob
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HEY mastery.... Just getting back to you..... Your Charlie dude was a happy dude , .... dlewis..have you read any of broken angels cry no more.......dlewis
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I think I read one...not sure...I will go check....Bob PS (I meant Charlies place in the story) LOL.. his role?
Comment from Jessica Bell
I have to say that I definitely didn't expect such an ending when I started reading this story!
I love the fact that you're able to seamlessly blend so many genres - romance/erotica, crime, and then a bit of horror as well.
Like the idea of Tony getting his come uppance in the end- maybe from beyond he grave?
Nicely written piece, and very apropos for the season! Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2009
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I have to say that I definitely didn't expect such an ending when I started reading this story!
I love the fact that you're able to seamlessly blend so many genres - romance/erotica, crime, and then a bit of horror as well.
Like the idea of Tony getting his come uppance in the end- maybe from beyond he grave?
Nicely written piece, and very apropos for the season! Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 29-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2009
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Well, thanks so much, Jessica (like the name by the way) Yes, I had a couple of people mwho basicly told me it wasn't enouogh etc. I am so pleased you reviewed this...I was beginning to give up on my fan base and genre people in general...LOL...Bob
Comment from fictionwriter
eewww, gruesome and very dark. You've got the killer instinct my friend. But Karma can be a great thing. It's not like she probably didn't deserve it the cheating *&#%@, but murder is murder. Great story, you suckered me. Well done.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2009
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eewww, gruesome and very dark. You've got the killer instinct my friend. But Karma can be a great thing. It's not like she probably didn't deserve it the cheating *&#%@, but murder is murder. Great story, you suckered me. Well done.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2009
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Thanks so much, Joy...I am glad i suckered you...That was my goal for the reader...LOL..Iam glad you liked it...What did you think of Charlie? Just curious..Bob
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He's a cold hearted bastard, but then he planned it, and anyone who premeditates murder has to be a bit that way. So you nailed him well.
Comment from misscookie
I give you five stars the story was very sexual mixed with every thing you warned about. tto be truthful this is not the type of story I read but its a good story
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2009
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I give you five stars the story was very sexual mixed with every thing you warned about. tto be truthful this is not the type of story I read but its a good story
Comment Written 29-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Miss Cookie. Like you said, the warning sare all there. Good idea to stay away from these sort of stories...I don't write many of them, but ponce in awhile...well. So sorry...Bob
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Your welcome ther's nothing to be sorry about once in awhile I write a little steamy too.(smile)
This is what makes a great write on who can write all type of stories or poems. they write for everyone. Never be sorry for the gift you have.
I just have to bye pass it for that I'm sorry because I know I will be missing some great writes.
So WRITE ON WRITE ON!!!!!!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You have strong characters and a very detailed descriptions. A little too detailed for my taste, but I won't score you less for my taste. You met all the requirements for a good post.
dresser next to his. (dresser beside his)
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2009
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You have strong characters and a very detailed descriptions. A little too detailed for my taste, but I won't score you less for my taste. You met all the requirements for a good post.
dresser next to his. (dresser beside his)
Comment Written 29-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2009
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Thank you. Bob
Comment from The Guardian
You know, Bob. I do think your prose gets better and better each year. The descriptions, narrative, and word choice are amazing. And despite the grizzly nature of this tale, not my favorite, I found it nearly impossible to take my eyes off the screen.
Favorite descriptions included the naked legs sticking out of the bag, and the following: "Most of the time, talking to Charlie was like driving an RV across North Dakota at seven miles per hour. Except less interesting."
I'm not sure if I loved the ending with the two heads appearing on his porch. I guess it served as his trick or treat. But, it give me that big aha moment. Perhaps it's me, though.
Great read, Bob!
Merle
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2009
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You know, Bob. I do think your prose gets better and better each year. The descriptions, narrative, and word choice are amazing. And despite the grizzly nature of this tale, not my favorite, I found it nearly impossible to take my eyes off the screen.
Favorite descriptions included the naked legs sticking out of the bag, and the following: "Most of the time, talking to Charlie was like driving an RV across North Dakota at seven miles per hour. Except less interesting."
I'm not sure if I loved the ending with the two heads appearing on his porch. I guess it served as his trick or treat. But, it give me that big aha moment. Perhaps it's me, though.
Great read, Bob!
Merle
Comment Written 29-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2009
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Aww, Merle ...Thanks so much for putting up with my nonsense. LOL..The ending? I'm not msure what you are saying? I can't imagine I tipped you off that he would find theheads on his porch? Who did that? Who knows? Know what I mean? LOL...Perghaps it's the title...If it is tell me quick, because I am changing it pronto....Thanks again..Bob
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Typo. . . sorry, Bob. It didn't give me that aha moment and not because I expected it. I think it's just that it felt too predictable when you wrote how he felt as if someone was there. But, since there weren't too many incidents leading up to the "heady" appearance, it wasn't spooky, just oh.
Understand what I mean? Again, it might just be me. But, isn't Halloween, after all these years, just an oh?
Can't wait for your next installment. I do love your prose though.
Best,
Merle
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Yeah....I have a tendency to stick with things that could happen rather than "spooky for the sake of spooky. The instructions said write a thriller for Halloween..."It doesn't have to be about Hallloween. I felt as I say, the fact that somebody was wise to this guy, plus....he got his just deserts with a heart attack (Payback) was the deal. I have written scary stuff...See "Backfire" in my portfoio, Merle...I truly thank you for your input...just trying to figure if I maed a big mistake....Bob
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Honey, your prose is so effective and compelling, it leaves others in the dust.
Comment from cherry_rose
I'm not sure about this one. You did a good job of being graphic enough about describing the sex, the murder, and the disposal of the corpses to create a visual image in my mind without turning my stomach. I was expecting something to happen at the end, but I didn't expect the bloody heads to show up on the doorstep. I think I expected Lisa's lover, at least initially, to grow a second head and he and Tony do a high five that they had eliminated another slut from the world or some such. Or a similar scenario. Actually, the story was a bit creepier this way. Very good job, Bob.
cherry_
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2009
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I'm not sure about this one. You did a good job of being graphic enough about describing the sex, the murder, and the disposal of the corpses to create a visual image in my mind without turning my stomach. I was expecting something to happen at the end, but I didn't expect the bloody heads to show up on the doorstep. I think I expected Lisa's lover, at least initially, to grow a second head and he and Tony do a high five that they had eliminated another slut from the world or some such. Or a similar scenario. Actually, the story was a bit creepier this way. Very good job, Bob.
cherry_
Comment Written 29-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2009
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See the bloody heads is one hell of a lot more realistic..I mean the chances of somebody Knowing he did the deed is the thing..The ways you mention are simply not possible...more science fiction which is not my genre...I prefer realism, Cherry...I thank you so much for your opinion and the great review....Bob
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and I think I prefer fantasy, but I can admire a nice touch of realism when I read it. It was a very good story.
Comment from Begin Again
Bob
Way to go...Halloween terror or any time terror for that matter! I couldn't stop reading...kept wondering what was going to happen next and when it did...chills ran up an down my spine. Yuck! Should be an excellent contender for the contest. Good luck!
Carol
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2009
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Bob
Way to go...Halloween terror or any time terror for that matter! I couldn't stop reading...kept wondering what was going to happen next and when it did...chills ran up an down my spine. Yuck! Should be an excellent contender for the contest. Good luck!
Carol
Comment Written 29-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2009
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Thanks so much, Carol...I do so appreciate you taking the time....Bob