5/7/5 (Leaves in Fright)
Leaves float back to tree, so frightened.121 total reviews
Comment from vkmack
Tremendously creative. I had to read this one out loud a couple of times to get the full force of the personification--it's powerful. Great use of the 5-7-5 format, and you used the Halloween season to great advantage as well. Wonderful art work for the poem, too. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Tremendously creative. I had to read this one out loud a couple of times to get the full force of the personification--it's powerful. Great use of the 5-7-5 format, and you used the Halloween season to great advantage as well. Wonderful art work for the poem, too. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Thank you.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I've noticed that most of the Halloween poems this year are horror Halloween poems, but this one is the most clever for it has captured an element of horror in its short 17 syllables. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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I've noticed that most of the Halloween poems this year are horror Halloween poems, but this one is the most clever for it has captured an element of horror in its short 17 syllables. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Thank you.
Comment from twowheels
Cute and very original imagery! I only had issue with one word: "raw" which implies something more visceral, not dried up like leaves would be.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Cute and very original imagery! I only had issue with one word: "raw" which implies something more visceral, not dried up like leaves would be.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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The leaves fear was raw, not the leaves themselves. Thanks for reading.
Comment from Suzie Q
LOL! Very imaginative! Now that's some kind of fear! Haiku's are challenging, but you said it short and sweet and I loved it! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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LOL! Very imaginative! Now that's some kind of fear! Haiku's are challenging, but you said it short and sweet and I loved it! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Thank you for enjoying and your feedback.
Comment from paulah60
I'm always impressed by poems that have personified elements. It adds vitality to the overall piece.
Halloween has its roots in ancient times, and because the ancients personified everything, their stories were rich and full of life (just read the ancient myths!).
So it's fitting that you've breathed life into leaves in your Halloween piece. Well done!
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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I'm always impressed by poems that have personified elements. It adds vitality to the overall piece.
Halloween has its roots in ancient times, and because the ancients personified everything, their stories were rich and full of life (just read the ancient myths!).
So it's fitting that you've breathed life into leaves in your Halloween piece. Well done!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much.
Comment from GregoryCody
Oooh really nice. This wouldve been the first six I would've given for a 5-7-5. Leaves jump back. Wow that's a cool, unique thought. Very imaginative. Hope you win!
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Oooh really nice. This wouldve been the first six I would've given for a 5-7-5. Leaves jump back. Wow that's a cool, unique thought. Very imaginative. Hope you win!
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much. So glad you liked this piece.
Comment from visionary1234
great photo to go along with this one! a fun Halloween 5-7-5 - and the concept of leaves jumping BACK on to their trees is delightfully Stephen King!
:)S
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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great photo to go along with this one! a fun Halloween 5-7-5 - and the concept of leaves jumping BACK on to their trees is delightfully Stephen King!
:)S
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Now that was a compliment. . .like Stephen King. Thank you.
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Comment from GracieAnn
This 5-7-5 writing prompt entry is delightfully original and turns the typical perspective about leaves "upside down". LOL Very humorous. I'll find out who you are later! All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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This 5-7-5 writing prompt entry is delightfully original and turns the typical perspective about leaves "upside down". LOL Very humorous. I'll find out who you are later! All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Thank you.
Comment from allborn66
This is a very interesting poem. I loved the word choice. You have great imagination. The picture is an excellent pairing.
Barbara
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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This is a very interesting poem. I loved the word choice. You have great imagination. The picture is an excellent pairing.
Barbara
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Thank you.
Comment from /*Twinkle
In just a few words a picture is painted. The artwork really jumps out of the picture to create a unique Halloween fright.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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In just a few words a picture is painted. The artwork really jumps out of the picture to create a unique Halloween fright.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Thank you.