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Bringing Lunch Home

An Amanda's Pitch poem

36 total reviews 
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
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"Bringing Lunch Home", is an extremely well-written, and delightfully descriptive piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review, a poem of this standard. DAMOMMY, my thoughts and prayers are with you.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
    Thank you so much, Duchess.
reply by duchessofdrumborg on 18-Oct-2020

    damommy,
    you're very welcome.
    the Duchess
Comment from mermaids
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My condolences on the passing or your son. There is a good feeling in your poem as the bird is providing lunch for his mate. You have a smooth poetic flow of words and a strong steady beat. You also create a clear scene of nature and it is wonderful to read a poem about a mockingbird.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
    Thank you. And I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
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First of all I'm very sorry for your loss. Can't imagine what you must be going through. Your poem is very beautifully written. I like your chosen words today the mockingbird flew by my window pane. With tasty tidbit gripped and dangling from his beak a morsel to be shared with waiting mate. He wooed and won her in the spring. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
    Thank you so much for your condolences. I'm so happy you liked the poem.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
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Perfectly done and just the right time to be read. My heart cries for you, it took me years to write about my twins but when i did i use it to reach those that need to hear, they are not alone and through God, they will survive through understanding. My prayers to you as long as you need them. I dont know how you feel, i only know how i felt

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
    Thank you for that, Barb. I admire you so much for handling your grief. People who haven't lost a child don't realize how much more devastating it is. Thank you for your prayers.
Comment from Janetsue
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I am so sorry for your loss and can understand, as a fellow writer, how our emotions can spur us into action, or slow us down while our hearts are trying to adjust to a tragic situation. I feed several varieties of birds every day and the mockingbirds are one of my favorites. They always gulp the chopped grapes I put out right away. It always makes me smile watching all the different species getting along together while having a feast. The squirrels join in as well, and enjoy peanuts the most.

My heart goes out to you at this difficult time, my friend. Hugs, Janet

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
    Thank you for your caring, Janet. It is so much appreciated. I don't feel so alone with all you wonderful people here.
Comment from aryr
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Welcome back. I have a tendency to frequently say 'better late than never' so I really enjoyed your poem about the little mockingbird and his mate. It was very well presented and I found the theme rather interesting, lunch is always delightful. (But I am not crazy about worms, yuk)

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
    Thank you so much for the welcome back. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Maybe it was a worm he brought back to her.
reply by aryr on 18-Oct-2020
    You are so welcome Yvonne.
reply by aryr on 18-Oct-2020
    You are so welcome Yvonne.
Comment from dragonpoet
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This sounds like a nice picnic lunch for the love birds. This is a new form for me. It seems intricate and fun to write. I might try.
Sorry for your loss. Write about it when you are ready. It will help. It took me about six months to write about my mother's death and that made me start writing about my father's death too. It was cathartic and a form of therapy.
Welcome back.
Joan

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
    I've heard that it is cathartic, but it's too early yet. Thank you for the support. I appreciate it very much!
reply by dragonpoet on 19-Oct-2020
    You'll know when it's time. You're welcome, Yvonne.
    Joan
Comment from Mrs. KT
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Good Morning, Yvonne,
I cannot begin to imagine your grief, but know for a certainty that I am sending you positive and healing thoughts. So very devastating on so many levels ...
As to your poetic offering, it is delightful. I've yet to see and/or hear a mockingbird. They don't venture this far north, or so I understand. But your mockingbird is much like my purple finches, cardinals, and chickadees. So very sweet.

"God gave us memory that we may have roses in December." This quote by James Barrie sustained me when my parents passed away ...

Take Care,
diane

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
    Thank you for the beautiful words. I appreciate your concern and support. I didn't know there is any place mockingbirds don't go. Hmmm. Learn something every day.
Comment from Ben Colder
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I understand this very well. I lost my second son to Cancer a fight hard to explain but knowing God was on his side gives a peace that passes all understanding.
My heart and prayers are for you and the others who was so close to him.
It is hard to come back to the idea of sharing thoughts, but you must go on for he would want that for your own peace of mind. It will give you strength you never knew you had.
My prayers and blessings are for you this day.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
    Thank you so much for that, Ben. It means a lot, especially when you've been through it yourself. I'm way behind on your story, but I'll try to catch up.
reply by Ben Colder on 18-Oct-2020
    We take it day by day. I was troubled about my son's death and I went to prayer and one night God gave me a night vision of my son's grave at the foot of the cross.
    "My grace is sufficient" He spoke.
    said.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
    How wonderful that must have been. I've prayed for a sign, and I did receive one that I could be positive of. Thank you for your understanding, and for your friendship.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
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First my deepest sympathy and God Bless you and the family.
Your poem does give the reader the image of the bird and his lady. First, as he finds lunch and shares it with his lady.
I like poetry that gives me an image and in this case gives me nature.
God bless.
Mary

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
    Thank you. I'm glad you got that from this poem.