A Vampire's Proposal
Love transcends death47 total reviews
Comment from sammielwf
Lancellot,
How could any sweet, red blooded woman fend of the vampire wooing of such a one as you?
Only time will tell....do her fear defenses crumbled against your dark sanguine desires..Can you save her....and yourself.
Dear dark Lancellot.....this rhyme was a "killer".
Sammielwf
to your advances
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Lancellot,
How could any sweet, red blooded woman fend of the vampire wooing of such a one as you?
Only time will tell....do her fear defenses crumbled against your dark sanguine desires..Can you save her....and yourself.
Dear dark Lancellot.....this rhyme was a "killer".
Sammielwf
to your advances
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
Comment from Anne-Marie brison
Sad and beautiful,. A remarkable poem you should be proud of.. a pleasure to read this!! Thanks for sharing this!!!! May God forever bless you and your family!!!
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Sad and beautiful,. A remarkable poem you should be proud of.. a pleasure to read this!! Thanks for sharing this!!!! May God forever bless you and your family!!!
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
Comment from Patty Palmer
This is quite a poem! It's very strong and passionate. I like the rhyme and rhythm. It reminds me strongly of the Twlight series about the vampires and a couple who falls in love. He is the vampire and she is the mortal. He loved the girl so deeply and tried hard not to bite her. You did a great job on this poem. Good luck with the contest!
Patty
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This is quite a poem! It's very strong and passionate. I like the rhyme and rhythm. It reminds me strongly of the Twlight series about the vampires and a couple who falls in love. He is the vampire and she is the mortal. He loved the girl so deeply and tried hard not to bite her. You did a great job on this poem. Good luck with the contest!
Patty
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
Comment from dragonpoet
This sounds like a man arguing with himself about going out with someone. Though with him it is about killing her and making his love forever even if she doesn't want it.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
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This sounds like a man arguing with himself about going out with someone. Though with him it is about killing her and making his love forever even if she doesn't want it.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
Comment from Alchera
Well written and rhymed structural format throughout its six couplets interwoven with its seven quatrains. The storyline completely and beautifully describe its romantic haunting subject matter. I prefer the last stanza.Great Work! Best wishes for the contest
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Well written and rhymed structural format throughout its six couplets interwoven with its seven quatrains. The storyline completely and beautifully describe its romantic haunting subject matter. I prefer the last stanza.Great Work! Best wishes for the contest
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Lancellot,
Nice piece of Romance Poetry having impressive as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology, enchanting flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting the high flight of imagination and romance.
The last stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Picture enhances depth and beauty of the poem.
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
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Hello Lancellot,
Nice piece of Romance Poetry having impressive as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology, enchanting flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting the high flight of imagination and romance.
The last stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Picture enhances depth and beauty of the poem.
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The Vampires sweet recruitment here into the world of the undead. A creepy write and I shall have my garlic on hand on Halloween to prevent such blood stains, ha ha ha, unfortunately blood sucking creatures do exist, this is great fun, love Dolly x
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The Vampires sweet recruitment here into the world of the undead. A creepy write and I shall have my garlic on hand on Halloween to prevent such blood stains, ha ha ha, unfortunately blood sucking creatures do exist, this is great fun, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
I enjoyed reading the Vampire story. Didn't know Vampires could be so romantic! The poem rhymes well. The entry is very apt for the Halloween season. Good luck in the contest!
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I enjoyed reading the Vampire story. Didn't know Vampires could be so romantic! The poem rhymes well. The entry is very apt for the Halloween season. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
Comment from Nicole Mendiola
This could be a movie. I loved reading your poem. I also love vampires. Live the end where he promises not to feed on her because he chooses her n love over his hunger. Awesome write.
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This could be a movie. I loved reading your poem. I also love vampires. Live the end where he promises not to feed on her because he chooses her n love over his hunger. Awesome write.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
Comment from Boogienights
I think this rhymes very well and is appropriate for the season. I especially like the twist at the end, when the vampire king lets his love live. That could become problematic when she starts to age, but let's not ruin this by thinking ahead. Best of luck in the contest.
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I think this rhymes very well and is appropriate for the season. I especially like the twist at the end, when the vampire king lets his love live. That could become problematic when she starts to age, but let's not ruin this by thinking ahead. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
