Comment from Cass Carlton

Exceptional

Know what? I'm a sucker for happy ever after endings. And this piece fills the bill very well indeed. I always feel as though I've been let down when things remain unresolved or the two lovebirds aren't reconciled at the end of the story. Here is a mother sad in spirit, searching for her lost daughter. They are reconciled after Death has claimed them both and they go to heaven together . Great stuff good ending. cheers Cass

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2020

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020

Thank you. I like happy endings too, I just can't help it. Thanks again for reading my poem and for this lovely 6 star review. :)

Comment from equestrik

Excellent

I enjoyed this story and feel it should do really well in the Traditional Ghost Story Contest. The picture you chose is enchanting and beautiful. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2020

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020

Thank you, I really appreciate your reading my poem. :)

Comment from Carlos' girl

Excellent

note to author:

typo at paragraph 6: that spirt though left...
should be that spirit though left...

this is a good poem, highly entertaining and spellbinding. you did a great job here. i like that your Ghost was a benign one, not malicious. I like how you stayed on point from beginning to end and maintained the theme.

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2020

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020

Thanks for pointing out my mistake, I fixed it. I really appreciate this nice review and your help, have a great day. :)

reply by Carlos' girl on 22-Oct-2020

very welcome

Comment from Mary Vigasin

Excellent

I found one thought on the first stanza about "hear" the sentence seems awkward
Otherwise, It is a wonderful story told in well worded rhyme.
I enjoyed this writing.
Good luck in the contest
Mary

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 Comment Written 22-Oct-2020

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020

Thank you for this encouraging review, I really appreciate it. :)

Comment from the13thpoet

Excellent

Hello fellow poet. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. It had good rhymes and a good story. Good job and good luck in the contest.


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 Comment Written 22-Oct-2020

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020

Thank you, that's very kind of you. I appreciate your reading my poem.