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19 total reviews
Comment from Ann Market
This is an adorable story that tells so much in so few words! I loved reading it and I know I'll have to come back to read it again!
Also, congratulations on winning First Place in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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This is an adorable story that tells so much in so few words! I loved reading it and I know I'll have to come back to read it again!
Also, congratulations on winning First Place in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What a cute story about the grade school dating. I enjoyed reading this story. I entered this contest, too . Yours was better. In middle school, kids in opposite gender were too shy to talk to each other so they just stared. This is what I remembered.
Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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What a cute story about the grade school dating. I enjoyed reading this story. I entered this contest, too . Yours was better. In middle school, kids in opposite gender were too shy to talk to each other so they just stared. This is what I remembered.
Well done.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much.
Comment from dragonpoet
So one act of kindness to an angry woman started a true love. He was truly chivalrous and sacrificed himself to a bee sting to save her from one.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dp
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So one act of kindness to an angry woman started a true love. He was truly chivalrous and sacrificed himself to a bee sting to save her from one.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dp
Comment Written 10-Nov-2020
Comment from juliaSjames
Congratulations on your win. This write is proof of the old saying, "Faint heart never won fair lady". I like the not quite repetition of the final paragraph.. Justin won her heart and then some. We women are suckers for the gallant gesture.
Stay safe
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Congratulations on your win. This write is proof of the old saying, "Faint heart never won fair lady". I like the not quite repetition of the final paragraph.. Justin won her heart and then some. We women are suckers for the gallant gesture.
Stay safe
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 09-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Congrats on your win! Allow me the honor of being #15 reviewer--which magic number will result in your receiving a virtual blue recognition ribbon--admittedly anticlimactic considering the far more impressive winning ribbon. Cute flash! Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Congrats on your win! Allow me the honor of being #15 reviewer--which magic number will result in your receiving a virtual blue recognition ribbon--admittedly anticlimactic considering the far more impressive winning ribbon. Cute flash! Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 09-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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LOL. Thank you. To be honest, I actually forgot all about this dribble, until this morning's message. I was like: Congratulations... for what?
Comment from sammielwf
Lancellot,
This poem was true to your name sake Sir Lancelot -chivalrous to the stinging end game.
Nicely written and nicely played Sir Lancellot/Justin
Sammielwf
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Lancellot,
This poem was true to your name sake Sir Lancelot -chivalrous to the stinging end game.
Nicely written and nicely played Sir Lancellot/Justin
Sammielwf
Comment Written 09-Nov-2020
Comment from pome lover
A perfect story for a Lancelot!
Gallant and brave. Wonderful.
and to tell the story in so few words -every word important to the narrative!
Bravo! and congratulations on your win.
Katharine - pome lover
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A perfect story for a Lancelot!
Gallant and brave. Wonderful.
and to tell the story in so few words -every word important to the narrative!
Bravo! and congratulations on your win.
Katharine - pome lover
Comment Written 09-Nov-2020
Comment from Contests
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 09-Nov-2020
Comment from Mastery
Hi Lance. Not too sure on this one but I guess it qualifies as an entry in the Dribble Fiction. Just that it is a thinking man's story, I guess. Not complicated, but not too clear either. That's probably just me, my friend. Go with it. If I changed anything however, I would change one thing if possible. Instead of "Ouch" make your word count work for "Damned bee."
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
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Hi Lance. Not too sure on this one but I guess it qualifies as an entry in the Dribble Fiction. Just that it is a thinking man's story, I guess. Not complicated, but not too clear either. That's probably just me, my friend. Go with it. If I changed anything however, I would change one thing if possible. Instead of "Ouch" make your word count work for "Damned bee."
Comment Written 01-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
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Thank you. I see. I should make better use of each word.
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I think so, yes. Bob
Comment from Bill Schott
This dribble, The Girl by the Window, has the right word count and seems to present the funny situation of two people who are attracted to each other but may be unaware of how they are perceived by others. Or, something totally different.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
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This dribble, The Girl by the Window, has the right word count and seems to present the funny situation of two people who are attracted to each other but may be unaware of how they are perceived by others. Or, something totally different.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
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Thank you.
