The Black Bat Lounge
Thigh High Boots contest entry12 total reviews
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Wow. This was a compelling and spellbinding piece of work. You had me on the edge of my seat. I liked the references to the different songs playing on the jukebox, it added ambiance to the pool playing joint. You stayed in character well, the whole way through, and gave an interesting performance, to the ending of the story. The story left me feeling a little empty, like there was no message to take away, from it. I admit that there needn't be a message but, I suppose I expected one. Well written and intriguing. I found no fault with any of the storytelling. Thank you for sharing.
Take care,
Jesse
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Wow. This was a compelling and spellbinding piece of work. You had me on the edge of my seat. I liked the references to the different songs playing on the jukebox, it added ambiance to the pool playing joint. You stayed in character well, the whole way through, and gave an interesting performance, to the ending of the story. The story left me feeling a little empty, like there was no message to take away, from it. I admit that there needn't be a message but, I suppose I expected one. Well written and intriguing. I found no fault with any of the storytelling. Thank you for sharing.
Take care,
Jesse
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the awesome review, Jesse. Yeah, there wasn't really much of a plot or anything to take away from it. Just a silly vampire story for the contest. All the songs and little add ins was me trying to add a little humor with them being something related to vampires. Lol. I appreciate the generous stars and great review, friend. I'm glad you liked it even though it didn't really lead to anywhere. Have a great day, Jesse.
Ron
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You're welcome, Ron. I admire your honesty and appreciate your gracious response. Both are characteristics I like in a writer. Have a good evening.
Jesse
Comment from L. Kalere
Great story...you really took your "cue" and ran with it. I like the characters, the conversation, the creative music, and the pace. Very realistic non-reality. Sounded a bit like Philip Marlow.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Great story...you really took your "cue" and ran with it. I like the characters, the conversation, the creative music, and the pace. Very realistic non-reality. Sounded a bit like Philip Marlow.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and the giant sixer, LK. I have to admit, I'm not real sure who Philip Marlow is. I really appreciate the gracious rating, L. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have yourself a great day.
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Ron
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
A wickedly witty treat--a fresh change from the vampire depictions typical of the genre--inserting song titles--so clever--stunning imagery and masterful narration.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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A wickedly witty treat--a fresh change from the vampire depictions typical of the genre--inserting song titles--so clever--stunning imagery and masterful narration.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the great review and stars, Elizabeth. Yes, the same old, 'I'm going to bite your neck' runs its course too often. I had to go a different route. Lol. I'm glad you liked my little story.
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Ron
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL! I was thinking about entering this one -- goodness knows it was a detour from the norm! ;) :) Great offering except that now you've got half (or more ) of those songs running through my head!! (not even joking, sir)... ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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LOL! I was thinking about entering this one -- goodness knows it was a detour from the norm! ;) :) Great offering except that now you've got half (or more ) of those songs running through my head!! (not even joking, sir)... ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Yeah, I had to put songs in there that would be on a 'vampire' jukebox. Lol. Thank you for the fantastic review, Yvette. I'm glad you had a chuckle at my silly little offering. Yes, a detour from the norm is always welcome. I hope all is well on your end.
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Ron
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
I like your story.
I especially like that you gave us the tunes that were playing on the juke box. I know and like most of them and it really helped to make the reader feel like he/she was there in the bar...very nice touch.
I can remember nights in bars like this. Of course, to my knowledge, no one was killed. :)
I thought her character was pretty well drawn for a short piece. I particularly like the surprise ending. I surely didn't see it coming and it was satisfying.
Good job.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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I like your story.
I especially like that you gave us the tunes that were playing on the juke box. I know and like most of them and it really helped to make the reader feel like he/she was there in the bar...very nice touch.
I can remember nights in bars like this. Of course, to my knowledge, no one was killed. :)
I thought her character was pretty well drawn for a short piece. I particularly like the surprise ending. I surely didn't see it coming and it was satisfying.
Good job.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the great review, Cynthia. Yeah, I tried to pick songs that be on a vampire jukebox. lol I really appreciate the generous. I'm glad you liked my little story. Hope you have a great weekend.
Ron
Comment from Harley Dayman Rayne Quinn
I will I could it seven stars...
That was awesome and while I'm sad that I didn't add a couple more spot so I could end. That was freaking awesome and great use of boots
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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I will I could it seven stars...
That was awesome and while I'm sad that I didn't add a couple more spot so I could end. That was freaking awesome and great use of boots
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the excellent review and giant sixer, Harley. And thank you for throwing the contest. I had fun with it. I really appreciate the kind comments generous stars. I'm glad you liked my little offering. I hope you have a great weekend and thanks again.
Ron
Comment from amada
This story kept my attention even if I do not nothing about the pool, the game. The action kept me going, I liked the bloody Mary, hold the Mary! oh dear, I am still smiling. Quite a chick...
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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This story kept my attention even if I do not nothing about the pool, the game. The action kept me going, I liked the bloody Mary, hold the Mary! oh dear, I am still smiling. Quite a chick...
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the great review, Amada. Yeah, I tried to make little vampire jokes throughout the whole thing. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked my little vampire piece. Have yourself a wonderful weekend.
Ron
Comment from LyndaS
Ha! Love the ending on this! Years ago I was on a women's pool league and I really enjoyed it. Good story with what you had to work with. Try to remember 3 weeks from now that you entered this. Great art!
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Ha! Love the ending on this! Years ago I was on a women's pool league and I really enjoyed it. Good story with what you had to work with. Try to remember 3 weeks from now that you entered this. Great art!
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the great review, Lynda. I'm glad to know you were on a pool league so you actually know what it means to bank a shot. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked this little piece. Yeah, I hope we all still remember I wrote this three weeks from now. lol Have a great day.
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Ron
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This girl does not take prisoners! I have never played pool, but it's great seeing women play and beat the men. I play chess and I was on a cruise once where a couple of members of the onboard chess club kept asking me to play. I kept saying no and one day at a loose end I agreed to play one of the best players in the team. I was sure I would lose. Half way through the game he lost one of his castles and it was looking like I was going to win. I decided to give him a draw as my end game is a bit dodgy and I saved his disgrace among the team and they never once asked me to play again! Ha ha ha. Your story reminded me of how powerful women can be and how men always think they are the best at everything, ha ha ha, I enjoyed this one very much, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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This girl does not take prisoners! I have never played pool, but it's great seeing women play and beat the men. I play chess and I was on a cruise once where a couple of members of the onboard chess club kept asking me to play. I kept saying no and one day at a loose end I agreed to play one of the best players in the team. I was sure I would lose. Half way through the game he lost one of his castles and it was looking like I was going to win. I decided to give him a draw as my end game is a bit dodgy and I saved his disgrace among the team and they never once asked me to play again! Ha ha ha. Your story reminded me of how powerful women can be and how men always think they are the best at everything, ha ha ha, I enjoyed this one very much, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Dolly. I actually play chess, too. I used to be pretty good but I haven't played in a long time. I'm watching this series on Netflix about a girl who plays chess so I broke out my chess video game and played a couple matches. And the computer totally kicked my butt. lol I really appreciate the gracious stars and great comments. I'm glad you liked this silly little piece. I hope you have a great weekend.
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Ron
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I?ve watched that series Ron, I loved it! I love to see women play chess, I learned the game late in life and I was hooked! I love to win x
Comment from Pantygynt
I am tempted to say 'What the bloody hell!' The only things missing were the garlic and the crucifix. That wouldn't have been a problem in UK right now. Another stick in two would have the crucifix sorted (use his shoelaces in one of those girl guide lashings to make it secure. The place wouldn't be open any more unless it sold food under the covid-19 rules so there has to be a kitchen and no kitchen worth anything would be without garlic.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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I am tempted to say 'What the bloody hell!' The only things missing were the garlic and the crucifix. That wouldn't have been a problem in UK right now. Another stick in two would have the crucifix sorted (use his shoelaces in one of those girl guide lashings to make it secure. The place wouldn't be open any more unless it sold food under the covid-19 rules so there has to be a kitchen and no kitchen worth anything would be without garlic.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Lol. Thank you for the great review, Pantygynt. Yeah, I was trying to figure out a way to get garlic in the story but the word count limit kept me from doing so. I really appreciate the generous stars, friend. I'm glad you liked my little offering. Have a great rest of your weekend.
Ron
