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Remembering Yesterday

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A widow's journey into her relationship with her

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Comment from lyenochka
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What a huge change for your to suddenly have all your older children away from home and you have Connie as a kind of second generation. I was shocked that Carol destroyed your records without even asking you first.

Singing Nun, who was poplar at the time, (popular)

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 11-Nov-2020
    Yes it was a huge change. I kept the telephone lines hot, because I needed to make sure they were Okay. I really missed them. We saw the twins often but Carol was far away and I was concerned about her. Thank you for reviewing and for promoting this chapter.
    Beth
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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As always--grabs and holds! Quite a shock having your records destroyed--what was the fallout?--did Carol continue in her extreme beliefs?


macreme s/b macrame

He and his roommate, Lowell, had become close friends and [would be missed s/b would miss each other], as well.

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
    Thank you, Liz. Actually, Carol extreme beliefs before they got better. She never destroyed any records again. however. Thank for the help
    Beth
reply by Elizabeth Emerald on 10-Nov-2020
    Where does she stand today?
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2020
    After many years an different pursuits and personality changes, she got into New Age and has very different belief from my own. She is still a very sweet and loving daughter, and I don't judge her. The pendulum will probably swing again.
Comment from Jay Squires
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I really enjoy your writing style. I believe I told you that before. It's quite conversational. It's written to enlighten the reader not to impress him/her with your verbal magic. I like that.

I'm ashamed to say that I let my frustration get the best of me. [I don't know why you'd be ashamed to say it ... I would be livid and there would be some serious grounding.]

The campus was lovely and her room was spacious. [You need to space from preceding paragraph. While you are doing that, there is another one a few paragraphs down]


 Comment Written 10-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
    I'm so pleased you are writing that. I glad you like my conversational style. Parents can discipline, but I hated it that at that moment I was so angry that I lost control. You are right. I should space out the paragraphs where I change directions. I will do that.
    Beth
Comment from Mistydawn
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I imagine it would be different for Connie to have a houseful of siblings and then none at all. The poor kid probably feels a bit out of sorts. I imagine it was an adjustment for you as well. I'm glad Don got to put his talent to use. Your story is very well-written, interesting start to finish. I look forward to reading more.

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
    Thank you so much for the review and comments. It was a big adjustment for all of us.
    Beth
Comment from Suzanna Ray
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Dear Beth, you did a good job in this chapter, describing the family dynamics as the older children went away to school. Have you had feedback from any of your children discussing how 'they' saw the situation, and if they agreed with your assessments?

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
    Thank you Suzanne, Yes, three of my children are reading this and they all agree with everything I've said. They haven't disagreed with anything excepted occasionally to tell me they something happened early or later. If they are right correct it. For the most part, I might memory is better than theirs. They seem to love reading about things they have forgotten about.
    Beth
Comment from Ulla
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Hi Beth, I love your biography. It is so well written and you make it very interesting the way you talk to your late husband.
Now, I don't think for one minute that you should me ashamed of telling Carol off. She had no business of destroying your precious music. Religion or no religion!
And now they are all away at school. No wonder little Connie felt a bit lost.
Just a few things:
He keep buying books with new designs=He kept buying books with new designs
until we had luged suitcases = until we had lugged suitcases
Now out house seemed very empty.= Now our house seemed very empty.
All best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
    Thank you Ulla, I'm so glad you find this interesting. Thank you for pointing our my errors.
    Beth
Comment from patcelaw
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After we have lost our spouse we do find we are making many changes, while retaining many memories. This is a wonderful memory you have shared. I wish you a blessed day and a very Happy Thanksgiving.
Patricia

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
    Thank you so much Patricia. I appreciate you reading this. I hope you have a happy Thanksgiving as well.
    Beth
Comment from Ben B.
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Thank you for explaining early who this was dedicated to, it did make the reading a lot easier for us. How exactly was country music contradictory to Christianity. Some of John Denver's music actually encouraged religion.
"Now OUR house seemed empty"

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
    Thank you for the review and comments. My daughter was just going through a stage, and I don't know how she came to the conclusion that the music was bad. She got past that in time.
    Beth
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
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So many changes, so suddenly. Carol's interest in religion. Don't interest in macreme. Connie wanting dance lessons. My, my, and then three gone from the nest. How lonely that would be, so suddenly. At our house, it was one at a time, so a little easier to take. Aaah, but life does move on.
You tell it with flair. Good writing.

Now that school was out (of) the summer,> for the summer

He (keep) buying books>>He kept buying

would like()take dancing.>> would like to take

I though() she might>> I thought

had (luged) suitcases>>had lugged

A (recrurter) for a Christian Academy >> A recruiter for

we had to go (throuh) on>> we had to go through

Now (out) house seemed very empty.>>Now our house

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 Comment Written 10-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
    Thank you Ralf, All my children were different and they kept something new going on all the time. They still make life interesting but their interests change constantly. I can't believe I can't catch those error when I read over what I've written but I always miss some. You are so helpful.
    Beth
reply by Raffaelina Lowcock on 10-Nov-2020
    Your children are much like mine, only I had four boys. Each one pursues a different venue and yet they are all compatible.
    As far as the errors, I go through the same thing. I can't believe I missed so many in my writings. We are all the same.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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This was a really interesting part of your story, Beth. I had to smile at your daughter, Carol, cutting up your favourite records, I think I would have been a little upset too! It's sad when you find your children have grown and leaving home. You feel a bit redundant. I enjoyed reading this, my friend. Well done. :)) Sandra xx

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 Comment Written 10-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
    Thank you so much for reviewing this Sandra. When raising those children, I always surprised at the odd things they did. I was an only child myself so I had to learn along the way. It was interesting. I made some typos that I hope I've corrected in this one.
    Beth