haiku (midnight rendezvous)
A haiku for the contest16 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Midnight Rendezvous, presented with a 5-7-5 formatting, captures the meeting of birds to examine or perhaps produce the next generation. Nice.
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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This haiku, Midnight Rendezvous, presented with a 5-7-5 formatting, captures the meeting of birds to examine or perhaps produce the next generation. Nice.
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from DentedSyke
The picture is really apropos; it feels like their tryst is a "rendezvous." I imagined this haiku without the picture and the first image that came to mind was of eagles (the word "nest" brought this about) soaring in the dark; there would be screeching and violent action in the air; they are, after all, intense predators.
As I read and re-read your haiku, I saw (or felt) that you had captured the rendezvous quite well. The concrete images of "feather" and "eggs" certainly capture the intent of this literary form, but I think that "rendezvous" tied it all together. A wonderful haiku. I find so few that are worth reading, but this one is a keeper!
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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The picture is really apropos; it feels like their tryst is a "rendezvous." I imagined this haiku without the picture and the first image that came to mind was of eagles (the word "nest" brought this about) soaring in the dark; there would be screeching and violent action in the air; they are, after all, intense predators.
As I read and re-read your haiku, I saw (or felt) that you had captured the rendezvous quite well. The concrete images of "feather" and "eggs" certainly capture the intent of this literary form, but I think that "rendezvous" tied it all together. A wonderful haiku. I find so few that are worth reading, but this one is a keeper!
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to read and share your insights- I?m glad you enjoyed this haiku. Your feedback is much appreciated.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A wonderful compilation of the visual and the emotional here, June -- love the marriage of the two to create a complete, enveloping image! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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A wonderful compilation of the visual and the emotional here, June -- love the marriage of the two to create a complete, enveloping image! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Nature has got it right when it comes to love and loyalty. We can learn from them...
Comment from Cindy Decker
June,
I love how you took a lovely photo Full of reflections, and made a wonderful poem out of it.
Like people, this pair may remain together, as some water fowl have one partner in life.
You use a nest full of eggs as proof of these birds love.
Good luck in the contest, June!
Have a wonderful weekend.
Cindy
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
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June,
I love how you took a lovely photo Full of reflections, and made a wonderful poem out of it.
Like people, this pair may remain together, as some water fowl have one partner in life.
You use a nest full of eggs as proof of these birds love.
Good luck in the contest, June!
Have a wonderful weekend.
Cindy
Comment Written 14-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
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Thank you for reading and for your encouraging feedback!
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You?re welcome, June
Comment from Joan E.
Oh, aren't the flamingos stunning! It is wonderful to see how much devotion so many birds have to their fledglings. I enjoyed your haiku filled with "moonlight reflections", Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2020
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Oh, aren't the flamingos stunning! It is wonderful to see how much devotion so many birds have to their fledglings. I enjoyed your haiku filled with "moonlight reflections", Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 12-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2020
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So glad you enjoyed this haiku. Always appreciate your dropping by to share your feedback!
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
Beautiful
Haiku contest entry. I Love your choice of words. Moonlight reflections of deep loving devotions- a nest full of eggs. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2020
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Beautiful
Haiku contest entry. I Love your choice of words. Moonlight reflections of deep loving devotions- a nest full of eggs. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2020
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So glad you enjoyed this haiku. Thank you for dropping by!
Comment from juliaSjames
This is a most attractive, tender haiku. The artwork is gorgeous. Thanks for sharing the facts about flamingos. All creatures, including humans, nurture their young. But some seem to go the extra mile.
Good luck in the contest.
Stay safe and healthy
Julia
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2020
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This is a most attractive, tender haiku. The artwork is gorgeous. Thanks for sharing the facts about flamingos. All creatures, including humans, nurture their young. But some seem to go the extra mile.
Good luck in the contest.
Stay safe and healthy
Julia
Comment Written 12-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2020
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So glad you enjoyed this haiku. Always appreciate your dropping by to share your feedback!
Comment from Teri7
June, This is a very beautiful and well written haiku you have penned for the contest. You used very lovely descriptive words and the art work you chose goes so well with your words. Best wishes in the contest. love, teri
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2020
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June, This is a very beautiful and well written haiku you have penned for the contest. You used very lovely descriptive words and the art work you chose goes so well with your words. Best wishes in the contest. love, teri
Comment Written 12-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2020
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So glad you enjoyed this haiku. Always appreciate your dropping by to share your feedback!
Comment from Mark D. R.
June,
Your delicately written Haiku IMHO does not require your italic script font to emphasize your flamingo imagery. I appreciate your author's notes as it expands my limited knowledge of these graceful birds. Your selected artwork also reinforces their reflections at night.
Consider centering your text lines for these short verses. Methinks it adds to the overall presentation value to FanStory reviewers.
Mark
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2020
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June,
Your delicately written Haiku IMHO does not require your italic script font to emphasize your flamingo imagery. I appreciate your author's notes as it expands my limited knowledge of these graceful birds. Your selected artwork also reinforces their reflections at night.
Consider centering your text lines for these short verses. Methinks it adds to the overall presentation value to FanStory reviewers.
Mark
Comment Written 12-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2020
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So glad you enjoyed this haiku. Always appreciate your dropping by to share your feedback!
Comment from BethShelby
Beautiful picture and a lovely haiku. Flamingos are such colorful and graceful birds. By instinct these birds know their eggs and the hatchling will be in danger and they will do everything they can to afford protection. You haiku is a beautiful poem that reflection this devotion.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2020
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Beautiful picture and a lovely haiku. Flamingos are such colorful and graceful birds. By instinct these birds know their eggs and the hatchling will be in danger and they will do everything they can to afford protection. You haiku is a beautiful poem that reflection this devotion.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2020
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Thank you for sharing your positive thoughts in this piece! Glad you enjoyed the read.
