The Fighter
The perks of winning31 total reviews
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is the tale of yours I was searching for, I think. You use an interesting choice of unusual words for something as cutthroat as a high-level boxing match (e.g. tinctured / freefall). Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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This is the tale of yours I was searching for, I think. You use an interesting choice of unusual words for something as cutthroat as a high-level boxing match (e.g. tinctured / freefall). Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Thank you, Katherine.
Comment from Mastery
Hi Jay. These are some splendid opening words "hook" for this writing.
"I harvested my tender age in those days following the flurry of hooks and uppercuts that sprawled Riggs on the canvas"
Excellent opening for a well choreographed story, how ever so brief. Thanks for sharing. Bob.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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Hi Jay. These are some splendid opening words "hook" for this writing.
"I harvested my tender age in those days following the flurry of hooks and uppercuts that sprawled Riggs on the canvas"
Excellent opening for a well choreographed story, how ever so brief. Thanks for sharing. Bob.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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Ever so brief it had to be, of course. Thanks, Bob, for your kind words about the opening. I carved and whittled that one. I'm glad it was appreciated.
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It sure was. Bob
Comment from Mastery
Hi Jay. These are some splendid opening words "hook" for this writing.
"I harvested my tender age in those days following the flurry of hooks and uppercuts that sprawled Riggs on the canvas"
Excellent opening for a well choreographed story, how ever so brief. Thanks for sharing. Bob.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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Hi Jay. These are some splendid opening words "hook" for this writing.
"I harvested my tender age in those days following the flurry of hooks and uppercuts that sprawled Riggs on the canvas"
Excellent opening for a well choreographed story, how ever so brief. Thanks for sharing. Bob.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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I don't know why this review came through twice. I hope you got paid twice.
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My fault. Nope...no double pay. LOL Bob
Comment from jenintorre
This is a very interesting true story. I really enjoyed reading it. You packed such a lot into so few words. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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This is a very interesting true story. I really enjoyed reading it. You packed such a lot into so few words. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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So kind of you, Jen. I'm happy it resonated with you.
Comment from BethShelby
An excellent true-story flash. That few moments fo being on the top of world, can fall so quickly. I like how how in your young you saw yourself through as invincible. Reality set in when you were confronted by a more season fighter. I hope all of your adoring fans didn't leave you in defeat.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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An excellent true-story flash. That few moments fo being on the top of world, can fall so quickly. I like how how in your young you saw yourself through as invincible. Reality set in when you were confronted by a more season fighter. I hope all of your adoring fans didn't leave you in defeat.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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Afterward there was some pity recognition, but fans were a thing of the past. As it should have been. I had been living on borrowed fame. Thanks, Beth, for reading.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Jay Squires,
Nice piece of Biographical Non-Fiction as 'Flash Fiction' meeting the desired norms, having impressive phraseology, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and in the END - Free-fall where lies not something, but ALL.
Interesting with a Remarkable Twist!
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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Hello Jay Squires,
Nice piece of Biographical Non-Fiction as 'Flash Fiction' meeting the desired norms, having impressive phraseology, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and in the END - Free-fall where lies not something, but ALL.
Interesting with a Remarkable Twist!
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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Well, thanks for the kind comments and the lovely 6 stars. Thank you, RP. You are appreciated.
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Jay Squires, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from palmart
It is hard when one person climbs in the society thinking that feeling will last, But it is harder to step down from that "Olympia Mountain", as privileges disappear in a blink of an eye. This descent is even harder when it is a free fall, as happened to your character.
A well-deserved recognition! The first of (I guess) more to come!
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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It is hard when one person climbs in the society thinking that feeling will last, But it is harder to step down from that "Olympia Mountain", as privileges disappear in a blink of an eye. This descent is even harder when it is a free fall, as happened to your character.
A well-deserved recognition! The first of (I guess) more to come!
Comment Written 17-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Well, more was not to come in the fighting arena--not and keep my stunning good looks! Haha, thanks for digging deeper in this, Palmart.
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You´re welcome, Jay!
Life is a wheel, sometimes we are up, sometimes, down. One thing is for sure; it runs and changes every single day...
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
I had no idea that three dots and space would be counted. Good to know.
Aside from that this is quite a good story about fame and ultimate failure. Very succinctly told. Good luck.
Ralf
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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I had no idea that three dots and space would be counted. Good to know.
Aside from that this is quite a good story about fame and ultimate failure. Very succinctly told. Good luck.
Ralf
Comment Written 17-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Thank you, Ralf. I appreciate your kind words and well-wishes.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
You are weird write and I like weird writing because I do that, too. This piece of writing is a little hard for me to understand, especially the ending. Your choice of the words are efficient. This is my third attempt trying to review this piece and I decide to take the plunge.
Why did he turn from a champion to a downhill free fall loser because of Scotty, who by the way was F. Scot. Fitzgerald's daughter's name.
I have a weird poem called "Severed Hand" which is not as popular as my other poems. I also have a new novel (only 500 words): Chapter 1: Interview. People like it.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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You are weird write and I like weird writing because I do that, too. This piece of writing is a little hard for me to understand, especially the ending. Your choice of the words are efficient. This is my third attempt trying to review this piece and I decide to take the plunge.
Why did he turn from a champion to a downhill free fall loser because of Scotty, who by the way was F. Scot. Fitzgerald's daughter's name.
I have a weird poem called "Severed Hand" which is not as popular as my other poems. I also have a new novel (only 500 words): Chapter 1: Interview. People like it.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much, Lisa for reading this. I'm glad you took the plunge and wrote your review. I couldn't have been more humiliated if I had fought Scotty Fitzgerald--and lost. LOL. But it's like they say, "The higher climb, the farther you fall."
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork, Jay,
and thanks for sharing
the notes; that does sound
a bit odd that a space would
count as a word.
-You definitely told a good
story, and had "some perks
from winning!"
-For some reason I like
the like about drawing
"Scotty,from Cleveland."
-It sets him up sounding
like a real tough guy, not
used to losing. You describe
the pummeling well, too.
-A very good story and
excellent ending; good luck
in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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-Good artwork, Jay,
and thanks for sharing
the notes; that does sound
a bit odd that a space would
count as a word.
-You definitely told a good
story, and had "some perks
from winning!"
-For some reason I like
the like about drawing
"Scotty,from Cleveland."
-It sets him up sounding
like a real tough guy, not
used to losing. You describe
the pummeling well, too.
-A very good story and
excellent ending; good luck
in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much, Pam. For the longest time I left it at just "Scotty" but he seemed to need some sort of grounding to place him in a stateside military framework and not Scotland or Star Trek.
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You are very welcome, Jay, and thanks for sharing. I think it was a great idea not to just leave it at Scotty. As you indicate, many other images could be inferred that way.