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Seafoam Green

Ocean's Mistress

10 total reviews 
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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This is a fine 5-7-5 as the sea brings the mermaid with the tide here and turns the golden sand to sparkling crystals with the ebbing tide, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
    thank you
Comment from Bill Schott
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This 5-7-5, Seafoam Green, has the proper formatting and sees the mermaids hair in the rippling waters which kiss the shore and then whisk back out to sea.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
    Thanks for "seeing" my poem
Comment from Wendy G
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Lovely poem to match the beautiful photo. Does indeed look like a mermaid! Well-written, and the syllable structure is met, without it being forced. Well done. All the best for your entry.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
    Thank you
Comment from palmart
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Great writing! You addressed to a mermaid your subject, which is definitively both mysterious and strange at the same time. Nice Picture because of colour and landscape (it reflects the "rule of the thirds").

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
    yes picture was a lucky find
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Hello, anonymous,

I love the sea and mermaids. Nice entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. I love the presentation. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
    i surely do like mermaids/the sea... thank you
Comment from AnnieDawn
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A nice portrayal of the mermaid theme. I am always interested in what others come up with as mermaids have fascinated me for years. This is a well thought out fantasy. Great job.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
    thanks very much, i like mermaids
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
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What a great picture. I love the ocean. I lived just a few blocks from it in Calif. I still miss it. Was a great place to live, then anyway. Well done poem, I do hope you do well in the contest.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
    thanks so much!
Comment from George Santhosh
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Beautiful descriptions! "Sunlit golden tresses"

However, I did not quite catch what mermaid of the sea meant. Please add a bit more to the author's notes.

All the best,
George

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
    thank you. God Bless you
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-Very nice image
and presentation.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-Effective imagery in line two,
and a good concluding line, as well.
-Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 13-Nov-2020
    thank you
reply by Pam (respa) on 13-Nov-2020
    You are welcome.
Comment from Bill Pinder
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Interesting poem that uses the metaphor of a mermaid with golden tresses as the foam at the edge of the sea. Enjoy the beauty of nature.Thanks for sharing your creativity. Bill

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 13-Nov-2020
    I thank you for your insight. Have a lovely day.