Snow Visited Today
a Naani15 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I like your sense of personification or animation. This may bring a shiver, then a snicker from the reader. Your metaphor is strong. Cat owners will especially enjoy this. Well described.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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I like your sense of personification or animation. This may bring a shiver, then a snicker from the reader. Your metaphor is strong. Cat owners will especially enjoy this. Well described.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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I don't own a cat, but my niece's cat always darts away from strangers and disappears quickly. Many thanks, Liz, for sharing my poem and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from Jessica M Lee
Smoothly written! This poem flowed nicely for me. I love the picture too:) Your analogy comparing the snowy weather to cats is an interesting way of turning something innocent and beautiful into one with personality and attitude. Like cats, the snow found little interest in staying before it found something more interesting to do - which was to either melt away or move on to a different city. Good luck in the contest:)
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Smoothly written! This poem flowed nicely for me. I love the picture too:) Your analogy comparing the snowy weather to cats is an interesting way of turning something innocent and beautiful into one with personality and attitude. Like cats, the snow found little interest in staying before it found something more interesting to do - which was to either melt away or move on to a different city. Good luck in the contest:)
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Hi, Jessica. I truly appreciate your wonderful praise of my Naani. I am so pleased you enjoyed the analogy. Many thanks for all those stars, too. Rod
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You are welcome:)
Comment from sammielwf
Snow Visited today and I read it and I liked it!
This was such a gentle rhyme.
It was beautiful in its simple imagery. It was a visit....not a storm!
It was whimsical....like a cat....who walks with tail held high....and then leaves...bit by bit...
Yes, Snow Visited today and then left on gentle cats feet
Yes. I enjoyed this small gentle taste of winter.
Sammielwf
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Snow Visited today and I read it and I liked it!
This was such a gentle rhyme.
It was beautiful in its simple imagery. It was a visit....not a storm!
It was whimsical....like a cat....who walks with tail held high....and then leaves...bit by bit...
Yes, Snow Visited today and then left on gentle cats feet
Yes. I enjoyed this small gentle taste of winter.
Sammielwf
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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I am glad someone likes snow. I was very pleased to see this snowfall vanish QUICKLY. It's interesting that you remember Carl Sandburg's description of fog. Many thanks for sharing my poem and your very kind praise. Rod
Comment from robyn corum
Dera Mystery Poet,
Oh, wow. I don't usually care for a lot of poetry forms - like the naani, for example - because it is soooo stinking hard to come up with anything good in this format.
Well, you dear writer, have proved that theory to be wrong-O. haha
This was magical. It began with the image (beautiful and mesmerizing!) and continued all the way through to the final line.
In just 24 syllables, you have created a mental portrait of that beautiful, magical time of the year --SNOW! The use of the metaphor really punches home the point in a perfect way. I can't imagine any entry that could beat this one. I'm gonna continue reading, but so far, you have my vote, and handily!
Thanks a bunch and good luck!
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Dera Mystery Poet,
Oh, wow. I don't usually care for a lot of poetry forms - like the naani, for example - because it is soooo stinking hard to come up with anything good in this format.
Well, you dear writer, have proved that theory to be wrong-O. haha
This was magical. It began with the image (beautiful and mesmerizing!) and continued all the way through to the final line.
In just 24 syllables, you have created a mental portrait of that beautiful, magical time of the year --SNOW! The use of the metaphor really punches home the point in a perfect way. I can't imagine any entry that could beat this one. I'm gonna continue reading, but so far, you have my vote, and handily!
Thanks a bunch and good luck!
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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I am delighted you enjoyed my Naani, robyn. I am especially pleased you thought it was "magical." Many thanks for your strong support. Rod
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Naani about the snow that comes to visit but decide not to stay for long like most cats also only come for a brief visit but never stay.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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A very well-written Naani about the snow that comes to visit but decide not to stay for long like most cats also only come for a brief visit but never stay.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much, Sandra, for your kind praise of my Naani. Rod
Comment from equestrik
Good writing here for the Naani Poem writing prompt contest. We got snow yesterday but some has already melted. Good presentation with the picture going well with your writing.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Good writing here for the Naani Poem writing prompt contest. We got snow yesterday but some has already melted. Good presentation with the picture going well with your writing.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Many thanks for sharing my Naani and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from juliaSjames
Gorgeous artwork for your lovely, lilting poem. Cats can be unpredictable in their likes and dislikes. And I suppose snow can be fickle too.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Gorgeous artwork for your lovely, lilting poem. Cats can be unpredictable in their likes and dislikes. And I suppose snow can be fickle too.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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I have Google to thank for the artwork which inspired this Naani, Julia. Many thanks for sharing my short poem and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
Great entry for the Naani Poem writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines...it flows nicely.
I like the snow play on words.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Hello, anonymous,
Great entry for the Naani Poem writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines...it flows nicely.
I like the snow play on words.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Hi, Gypsy. I am so pleased you enjoyed my Naani and that you liked my play on words. Many thanks for sharing. Rod
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Well, I would be singing praises for the cat-like behavior - lol!! ;) Yeah, not a fan of the snow, here... ;) A fun offering for the contest here - best of luck at the polls! ;)
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Well, I would be singing praises for the cat-like behavior - lol!! ;) Yeah, not a fan of the snow, here... ;) A fun offering for the contest here - best of luck at the polls! ;)
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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I am delighted you found my poem to be a fun offering. Many thanks for sharing and your kind praise.
Comment from AnnieDawn
I like the way you have incorporated some rhyme into this poem which is difficult to do with these short ones. We just got snow last week but it sure is not going any where. I love it and also the way you have described it in your entry. Great job.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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I like the way you have incorporated some rhyme into this poem which is difficult to do with these short ones. We just got snow last week but it sure is not going any where. I love it and also the way you have described it in your entry. Great job.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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I am very pleased you like my use of rhyme in this short poem. Many thanks for sharing and your kind praise.
