Remembering Yesterday
Viewing comments for Chapter 78 "Long Distance Parenting"A widow's journey into her relationship with her
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Comment from djsaxon
Heartwarming as always. I realize that it is an intensely personal journey but it is written in such a way that the reader feels very welcome. Don sounds like something of a handful ð??? Certainly passionate. When you take on a metal door, fair chance the door will always win. Blessings - DJ
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Heartwarming as always. I realize that it is an intensely personal journey but it is written in such a way that the reader feels very welcome. Don sounds like something of a handful ð??? Certainly passionate. When you take on a metal door, fair chance the door will always win. Blessings - DJ
Comment Written 14-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much for continuing to read my story. I so glad you find it worth reading. My son has always been quite a handful. I know that door represented the dean. If he'd hit him instead, he would have probably been expelled.
Beth
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I look forward to the next chapter - DJ
Comment from lyenochka
How stressful to have your kids away from home and getting injured! I hope Don's hand healed properly without the cast! You certainly have strong-willed children. They obviously knew how to care for themselves well.
Typos:
I thought her nose what perfectly fine, (was instead of 'what' ?)
he dean was watching (The)
we were the ones how had to pay (who instead of "how")
talking to much in class. (too)
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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How stressful to have your kids away from home and getting injured! I hope Don's hand healed properly without the cast! You certainly have strong-willed children. They obviously knew how to care for themselves well.
Typos:
I thought her nose what perfectly fine, (was instead of 'what' ?)
he dean was watching (The)
we were the ones how had to pay (who instead of "how")
talking to much in class. (too)
Comment Written 14-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Than you for the review and thank for promoting my story once again. You are so kind. Thank you also for catching my errors. They are all corrected now.
Beth
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Captivating, as always!
boy's dean s/b boys'
Christi had already been scolded by the supervisor of her on-campus job[omit comma] for being late for work.
She was the only one of the three older kids [omit comma] who hadn't gotten cosmetic surgery on her nose, and now she was wearing a clothespin on it at night, hoping she could make it turn up.
Instead of going back to the doctor to have it removed, after two and a half weeks [omit comma] he went to the campus metal shop and cut it off himself.
She probably thought that [omit comma] because she was being scolded for talking.
I found another job in a smaller shop where the people were friendlier [omit comma] and the pace was less hectic.
The owner's son, who worked there as a negative stripper and plate-maker [add comma] was a lay preacher [omit comma] for the Assembly of God Church.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
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Captivating, as always!
boy's dean s/b boys'
Christi had already been scolded by the supervisor of her on-campus job[omit comma] for being late for work.
She was the only one of the three older kids [omit comma] who hadn't gotten cosmetic surgery on her nose, and now she was wearing a clothespin on it at night, hoping she could make it turn up.
Instead of going back to the doctor to have it removed, after two and a half weeks [omit comma] he went to the campus metal shop and cut it off himself.
She probably thought that [omit comma] because she was being scolded for talking.
I found another job in a smaller shop where the people were friendlier [omit comma] and the pace was less hectic.
The owner's son, who worked there as a negative stripper and plate-maker [add comma] was a lay preacher [omit comma] for the Assembly of God Church.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the review Liz. I need to take a refresher course in comma placement. Maybe you should teach one. Thanks so much for helping me review this.
Beth
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I'm far from an expert--I go by ear--which doesn't suffice for the fine points. There's a good book, Confessions of a Comma Queen, that bears rereading.
Comment from AnnieDawn
Nicely done and I enjoyed the way you reminisced in the story. I have a couple of things to point out that need attention but otherwise great job.
he dean was watching and he told Don that he and Ce-Ce were dis-socialized, (first word needs a capital)
but we were the ones how had to pay the hospital ("who" had rather than "how" had)
(She complained than her teacher didn't like her. "that" rather than "than")
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
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Nicely done and I enjoyed the way you reminisced in the story. I have a couple of things to point out that need attention but otherwise great job.
he dean was watching and he told Don that he and Ce-Ce were dis-socialized, (first word needs a capital)
but we were the ones how had to pay the hospital ("who" had rather than "how" had)
(She complained than her teacher didn't like her. "that" rather than "than")
Comment Written 14-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I really appreciate you catching those typos.
Beth
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Talk about a whole lotta change and emotional upheaval at your house and about at the time!! Wow, Beth -- poor Connie probably felt like a fifth wheel... ;) At least the economy is about to turn around... Thanx for sharing, my lady! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
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Talk about a whole lotta change and emotional upheaval at your house and about at the time!! Wow, Beth -- poor Connie probably felt like a fifth wheel... ;) At least the economy is about to turn around... Thanx for sharing, my lady! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 14-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
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Thank you for reading and reviewing this. I appreciate your comments.
Beth
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Beth, you have titled this chapter just perfectly because from what I read, you were doing just that. It really shows in this particular post how the children were developing their own personalities and talents. You must've been So proud of them.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
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Dear Beth, you have titled this chapter just perfectly because from what I read, you were doing just that. It really shows in this particular post how the children were developing their own personalities and talents. You must've been So proud of them.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the review and comments. I was proud of them. but not thrilled that Don lost his temper to point he broke his hand. I was relieved that if he had to hit something, it was the door and not the dean. LOL
Beth
Comment from zanya
An interesting slice of family life portrayed here as youngsters move along learning to make their own way - how quickly they grow up and become independent !
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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
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An interesting slice of family life portrayed here as youngsters move along learning to make their own way - how quickly they grow up and become independent !
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Comment Written 14-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the review and the comments. It did seem the years went too fast. I think time has speeded up even more now.
Beth
