First Snow
Winter has just begun.26 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Loved this poem, Rod! I'm surprised that it didn't win. Your descriptions of the snow on the park is so visually and textually accurate. And I like that you cover the sounds of warm weather with the child's "madcap laugh." Beautifully done as always!
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2020
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Loved this poem, Rod! I'm surprised that it didn't win. Your descriptions of the snow on the park is so visually and textually accurate. And I like that you cover the sounds of warm weather with the child's "madcap laugh." Beautifully done as always!
Comment Written 23-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2020
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Thank you, lyenochka, for your wonderful praise of my poem. I am especially pleased you liked my descriptions. Have a wonderful Christmas. Rod
Comment from Lobber
hi there
i love all of your images especially: The lawn is sugar-powdered now like brownie crusts, . . My 2nd fav: willow trees with snow fast-swirling in the air.
- Lobber
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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hi there
i love all of your images especially: The lawn is sugar-powdered now like brownie crusts, . . My 2nd fav: willow trees with snow fast-swirling in the air.
- Lobber
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Hi, Lobber. You just put a big smile on my face. I am so pleased you enjoyed my winter poem and especially those lines. Rod
Comment from Ann Market
This is a very descriptive and vivid poem! I loved your imagery here and I enjoyed reading this; I also found it impressive that you also told a story through this. Beautifully written, and good luck to you in the contest!
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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This is a very descriptive and vivid poem! I loved your imagery here and I enjoyed reading this; I also found it impressive that you also told a story through this. Beautifully written, and good luck to you in the contest!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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I truly appreciate your kind praise of the imagery in my poem, Ann. Many thanks for sharing. Rod
Comment from Teri7
This is a very nice and well written poem you have penned for the No Restrictions poetry for the writing prompt. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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This is a very nice and well written poem you have penned for the No Restrictions poetry for the writing prompt. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 29-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Thank you, Teri, for sharing my poem. I am delighted you enjoyed its imagery and choice of words. Rod
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Rod,
Somehow I get the feeling of loneliness in this poem. I think you're taking your Lab puppy for a walk through a deserted park during the first snowfall of the season, remembering your mother cooking an apple pie, and how you used to swing and jump off when you were high enough. Nobody else is in the park. The only footprints are your own.
You dread the coming winter season. Then you'll have some company in the park. Kids will be on those swings.
"But winter's come. I won't see him.
Though this snowfall may vanish soon,
those storms that follow in its wake
will banish kids till May or June."
I am also dreading the coming winter. I'm 70 now... how will I make out shoveling snow with this narrowed aortic valve in my heart? Sometimes it feels like I need to burp, but it's just a sloppy valve. I used to love winter. My wife & I would dress warmly and walk in a storm!
Nicely penned!
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Hi Rod,
Somehow I get the feeling of loneliness in this poem. I think you're taking your Lab puppy for a walk through a deserted park during the first snowfall of the season, remembering your mother cooking an apple pie, and how you used to swing and jump off when you were high enough. Nobody else is in the park. The only footprints are your own.
You dread the coming winter season. Then you'll have some company in the park. Kids will be on those swings.
"But winter's come. I won't see him.
Though this snowfall may vanish soon,
those storms that follow in its wake
will banish kids till May or June."
I am also dreading the coming winter. I'm 70 now... how will I make out shoveling snow with this narrowed aortic valve in my heart? Sometimes it feels like I need to burp, but it's just a sloppy valve. I used to love winter. My wife & I would dress warmly and walk in a storm!
Nicely penned!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 29-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Hi Kimbob. It's always good to hear from you. I am delighted you enjoyed my winter poem and appreciate your kind praise. I do not envy you shoveling snow this winter if your aortic valve causes you problems. Maybe a neighbor boy can be recruited. Rod
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There aren't any. I'm just going to have to suck it up. I prefer to shovel, but I do have a Craftsman Tecumseh Snowblower.
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One of the best investments I ever made was a snowblower. I have saved myself much pain and aggravation by using it, not a shovel. Rod
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My wife bought mine over ten years ago, and I might have used it 20 times.
Comment from kmoss
Snow: Beautiful to look at and terrible to be in. Unless you are a child or remembering the good days of childhood fun in the now. The word winter chills me. I enjoyed this poem a lot. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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Snow: Beautiful to look at and terrible to be in. Unless you are a child or remembering the good days of childhood fun in the now. The word winter chills me. I enjoyed this poem a lot. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2020
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It means a lot to know you enjoyed my poem. The word ?winter? chills me too. Many thanks for sharing. Rod
Comment from Boogienights
You make the first snowfall sound lovely and cold. . .brrrr. winter came early to Minnesota this year, but still we walk through the parks, just for the shear beauty of it all. Thanks for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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You make the first snowfall sound lovely and cold. . .brrrr. winter came early to Minnesota this year, but still we walk through the parks, just for the shear beauty of it all. Thanks for sharing. :)
Comment Written 29-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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I think Minnesota got winter before we did in Chicago. What I detest most about that season is the COLD. Let's hope spring comes soon. Rod
Comment from zanya
It's a great choice of subject matter for the No Restrictions contest - atmosphere of onset of winter snow so effectively evoked with the first light layer and the absence of children at play - wish I had 6 !
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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It's a great choice of subject matter for the No Restrictions contest - atmosphere of onset of winter snow so effectively evoked with the first light layer and the absence of children at play - wish I had 6 !
Comment Written 28-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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I truly appreciate the virtual six you gave my winter poem, zanya. Many thanks for your kind praise. Rod
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, First Snow, describes well the park scene where summer fun has taken a back swing to the demands of the winter season.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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This poem, First Snow, describes well the park scene where summer fun has taken a back swing to the demands of the winter season.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Many thanks, Bill, for sharing FIRST SNOW and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a beautiful poem rich with imagery. I grew up in the northeastern part of the country known for heavy snow storms. But, snow flurries falling from the sky was a glorious and peaceful sight. Your poem captures that peace. I especially like the third stanza as I can visualize the path splotched with prints. Your artwork pairs perfectly with your poem. Well done.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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This is a beautiful poem rich with imagery. I grew up in the northeastern part of the country known for heavy snow storms. But, snow flurries falling from the sky was a glorious and peaceful sight. Your poem captures that peace. I especially like the third stanza as I can visualize the path splotched with prints. Your artwork pairs perfectly with your poem. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much, Lorraine, for your enthusiastic response to FIRST SNOW. I am delighted you could visualize his taking a walk down that path. Rod
