First Snow
Winter has just begun.26 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about a winter scene in a park where no one goes for now because the weather is cold and wet. Everyone prefer the warmness of a cozy chimney fire.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2020
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A very well-written poem about a winter scene in a park where no one goes for now because the weather is cold and wet. Everyone prefer the warmness of a cozy chimney fire.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2020
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Indeed, winter is hard to like. Many thanks, Sandra, for sharing my poem and your kind praise.
Comment from equestrik
This is a good presentation with your words matching so well with your well chosen picture. I love the peace and serenity depicted in both. This is well done.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2020
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This is a good presentation with your words matching so well with your well chosen picture. I love the peace and serenity depicted in both. This is well done.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2020
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Indeed there is serenity to be found in winter?s first snowfall. I am delighted you enjoyed my poem and accompanying artwork.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and
presentation.
-You wrote a good poem
with effective meter,
imagery, and rhyme.
-You create a vivid word
picture of this snowy day:
"The lawn is sugar-powdered now
like brownie crusts, Mom's apple pie."
-Each verse has a special scene
and the concluding verse is good, too.
-A good entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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-Nice image and
presentation.
-You wrote a good poem
with effective meter,
imagery, and rhyme.
-You create a vivid word
picture of this snowy day:
"The lawn is sugar-powdered now
like brownie crusts, Mom's apple pie."
-Each verse has a special scene
and the concluding verse is good, too.
-A good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Thank you, Pam, for your close reading of FIRST SNOW and your very kind praise. Rod
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You are very welcome, Rod. It was a very good poem.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A collection of fine metaphors to describe winter's snow fall and the subsequent calm it paints on the scene as the park is still and the swings are empty, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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A collection of fine metaphors to describe winter's snow fall and the subsequent calm it paints on the scene as the park is still and the swings are empty, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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I am delighted you enjoyed the metaphors employed in FIRST SNOW, Dolly. Many thanks for sharing. Rod
Comment from Jan Perry
Hi I'm Jan. Winter is such a popular choice for poetry and you've got such pretty benches in the snow! (I can't see benches as squatting though.)
The rest falls into place nicely, from mums apple pie to a storm stopping kids using the swings. The end rhymes nicely.
Why won't you see Winter? Am still learning how to interpret poetry.
Good luck with further works.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Hi I'm Jan. Winter is such a popular choice for poetry and you've got such pretty benches in the snow! (I can't see benches as squatting though.)
The rest falls into place nicely, from mums apple pie to a storm stopping kids using the swings. The end rhymes nicely.
Why won't you see Winter? Am still learning how to interpret poetry.
Good luck with further works.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Hi, Jan. Many thanks for sharing FIRST SNOW. As you could tell, I am NOT a big fan of winter. I appreciate your kind praise. Somehow, when I gaze at that photo, I see those benches "squatting." Rod
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Okay thanks
Comment from Rx kingpen
I got a little thrown off in the last stanza. I wonder if there's a way to reconfigure the opening lines to it. I understood, after a couple reads, that the children will be indoors mostly by Spring showers?
Overall, it was a smooth walk through the snow. Good imagery. The fourth stanza, my favorite.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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I got a little thrown off in the last stanza. I wonder if there's a way to reconfigure the opening lines to it. I understood, after a couple reads, that the children will be indoors mostly by Spring showers?
Overall, it was a smooth walk through the snow. Good imagery. The fourth stanza, my favorite.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Thank you, Rx kingpen, for sharing FIRST SNOW. In the last stanza, the Speaker is lamenting the fact that he won't see a child in that swing until late spring because winter stays so long. Rod
Comment from Patty Palmer
The first snow is always the most beautiful snowfall of the whole winter. Walking through the park, covered in snow, the silence is deafening. The rest of the winter, snow will come and melt over and over, but there's no snow like the first snow of winter. Nice job! Good luck with the contest!
Patty
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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The first snow is always the most beautiful snowfall of the whole winter. Walking through the park, covered in snow, the silence is deafening. The rest of the winter, snow will come and melt over and over, but there's no snow like the first snow of winter. Nice job! Good luck with the contest!
Patty
Comment Written 28-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Your comment about first snowfall is intriguing, Patty. I think I dislike the first one the most because it only foretells winter's approach. In late winter I appreciate the beauty of snow only because I am used to it by then. Many thanks for sharing my poem. Rod
Comment from w.j.debi
You paint some vivid imagery with your words. I especially liked the line
The lawn is sugar-powdered now
like brownie crusts, Mom's apple pie.
It set up the expectation for some additional imagery, and you did not disappoint.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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You paint some vivid imagery with your words. I especially liked the line
The lawn is sugar-powdered now
like brownie crusts, Mom's apple pie.
It set up the expectation for some additional imagery, and you did not disappoint.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Many thanks for sharing my poem. I am especially pleased you enjoyed its imagery. Rod
Comment from poetwatch
It is snowing way up north, Christmas time is in the air, author. Yet, it looks lonely where you are at. Does no one want to play? :) You have a very good poem it speaks of the emptiness without the sound of joy. This is a good offering for the No Restrictions Poetry contest. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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It is snowing way up north, Christmas time is in the air, author. Yet, it looks lonely where you are at. Does no one want to play? :) You have a very good poem it speaks of the emptiness without the sound of joy. This is a good offering for the No Restrictions Poetry contest. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Sadly, there are no children playing in the park these days because we got an Arctic blast. Later, when snow does arrive--and stays--I'll see them on the sledding hill. Many thanks for sharing my poem. Rod
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Keep your spirit up, Rod. :)
Comment from Wendy G
This is a lovely poem, celebrating winter, and reflecting on the impact it has on our lives and the lives of children. It is well-written and enjoyable. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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This is a lovely poem, celebrating winter, and reflecting on the impact it has on our lives and the lives of children. It is well-written and enjoyable. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much, Wendy, for your kind praise of FIRST SNOW. Rod
