Double Betrayal
A Soap Opera18 total reviews
Comment from papa55mike
Now that's what I call many twists inside a poem. I love the gender switch. What a wonderfully written rhyme. Best of luck with your writing!
Congrats on the win!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
Now that's what I call many twists inside a poem. I love the gender switch. What a wonderfully written rhyme. Best of luck with your writing!
Congrats on the win!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 01-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
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Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. :)
Comment from Pantygynt
Double betrayal in a manner of speaking here in this story in a poem. It is easy to see how it was that this ran out the winner of the contest. The story has a good development from beginning through middle to end and the rhythm and rhyme scheme are both well maintained.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
Double betrayal in a manner of speaking here in this story in a poem. It is easy to see how it was that this ran out the winner of the contest. The story has a good development from beginning through middle to end and the rhythm and rhyme scheme are both well maintained.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem, it's very appreciated. :)
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this was very creative. The last stanza through me for a loop as I'm sure was the intent. It didn't really go with the earlier stanza that stated it should have been with another girl. Why would he think that if he was already in a gay relationship. Wouldn't a girl have been a surprise. So I was a bit confused by that. Still, really enjoyed the poem. Love your amazing story telling in this poem. This was a joy to read.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
I thought this was very creative. The last stanza through me for a loop as I'm sure was the intent. It didn't really go with the earlier stanza that stated it should have been with another girl. Why would he think that if he was already in a gay relationship. Wouldn't a girl have been a surprise. So I was a bit confused by that. Still, really enjoyed the poem. Love your amazing story telling in this poem. This was a joy to read.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
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It was a woman being cheated on be her husband. She found out he ceated on her with her twin brother, maybe because they looked alike but he found he was attracted to men. Sometimes people aren't aware that they are gay or bisexual or they deny it. It happens. Thanks again for reading my poem. :)
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Oh! Thanks. I probably should have seen that.
Comment from Rx kingpen
Hahaha. Love that finishing touch. That's actually reminiscent of my former style..is this true or did you create that ending will n the fly? Regardless, you have an ear for meter. Well done.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
Hahaha. Love that finishing touch. That's actually reminiscent of my former style..is this true or did you create that ending will n the fly? Regardless, you have an ear for meter. Well done.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
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Thank you for reading and for this great review...kind of made it up as I went. Lol. :)
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem of betrayal, Double Betrayal, runs quickly through this odd relationship fractured by a husband's cheating, plus with another man, plus plus with the wife's brother. Quite the oddity. Cool.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
This poem of betrayal, Double Betrayal, runs quickly through this odd relationship fractured by a husband's cheating, plus with another man, plus plus with the wife's brother. Quite the oddity. Cool.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
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Thanks for reading my poem, I really appreciate it :)
Comment from kmoss
This is very good! I love this twist at the end. I'm hoping this is fiction. Strong rhymes and a great picture to go with it. Good luck in the contest with the sure-fire winner!
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
This is very good! I love this twist at the end. I'm hoping this is fiction. Strong rhymes and a great picture to go with it. Good luck in the contest with the sure-fire winner!
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Thank you for such a nice review, it is fiction..lol. I really appreciate you reading my poem. :)
Comment from l.raven
WOW!!!! what a poem...and a story told...
your rhythm and rhyme are perfect...and a good
flow as well...
the ending just grabs your reader...veryyyyyy
well written...love your poem...and the perfect picture...
well done...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
WOW!!!! what a poem...and a story told...
your rhythm and rhyme are perfect...and a good
flow as well...
the ending just grabs your reader...veryyyyyy
well written...love your poem...and the perfect picture...
well done...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Wow! Thank you for this fantastic review. I really appreciate it. :)
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you are so very welcome...well deserved...love xxoo
Comment from LJbutterfly
Wow! This poem was masterfully written. I like the smooth flow and rhythm, not to mention the subject of betrayal. This was written tenderly and with tact, even though I knew something was going to happen when you wrote, "There's nothing like a woman scorned," but I was not ready for the surprise ending. Your artwork was perfect. Well done.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
Wow! This poem was masterfully written. I like the smooth flow and rhythm, not to mention the subject of betrayal. This was written tenderly and with tact, even though I knew something was going to happen when you wrote, "There's nothing like a woman scorned," but I was not ready for the surprise ending. Your artwork was perfect. Well done.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Thank you for this wonderful review and for taking the time to read my poem. :)
Comment from LisaMay
At first i thought your poem was heading towards a homophobic slant but then it became a case of "Betrayals the same, no matter who".
(note: Betrayal's should have an apostrophe to show it is a contraction of "Betrayal is")
Your poem will probably deservedly win because it is very well constructed, carries the theme of betrayal well in a story, and the twist at the end is one of gasp-inducing humor.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
At first i thought your poem was heading towards a homophobic slant but then it became a case of "Betrayals the same, no matter who".
(note: Betrayal's should have an apostrophe to show it is a contraction of "Betrayal is")
Your poem will probably deservedly win because it is very well constructed, carries the theme of betrayal well in a story, and the twist at the end is one of gasp-inducing humor.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Thank you for pointing out my error, I've never been good at putting apostrophes where they should be..lol. I appreciate you reading my poem. :)
Comment from equestrik
This is a sad write and, I suppose that is just the plain truth about betrayals. The are sad and they haunt us for sure. You wrote well. Your ending lines were the real surprise!
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
This is a sad write and, I suppose that is just the plain truth about betrayals. The are sad and they haunt us for sure. You wrote well. Your ending lines were the real surprise!
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Thank you for this nice review, I really appreciate it. :)