Empty Pockets
Can you relate?17 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
I might have swapped the first and third lines around, but what the hell - you won the contest and that is all that really matters at the end of the day! Congratulations on that first place.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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I might have swapped the first and third lines around, but what the hell - you won the contest and that is all that really matters at the end of the day! Congratulations on that first place.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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That would have worked too. Thanks so much for reading my poem. :)
Comment from ESOSTINE
Your poem captured the general situation of families at this moment of economic hardship. It spoke volume in quite a few words within the restrictions of the contest entry. The rhyming was equally perfect. Great job!
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Your poem captured the general situation of families at this moment of economic hardship. It spoke volume in quite a few words within the restrictions of the contest entry. The rhyming was equally perfect. Great job!
Comment Written 05-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Thank you for this great review. :)
Comment from djsaxon
Nice. Gotta say I hate the format. What's next, a two syllable poem? Only the god of writing prompts will ever know. Having said that, you nailed this one. Good luck in the contest - DJ
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Nice. Gotta say I hate the format. What's next, a two syllable poem? Only the god of writing prompts will ever know. Having said that, you nailed this one. Good luck in the contest - DJ
Comment Written 05-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Thanks, I agree. I usually write longer poems, but lately I've been trying the short ones🙄...lol. Thanks again for reading.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 1-6-1, Empty Pockets, has the right set up and states the sad truth that our funds have come under a tight squeeze with the slowed down economy.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
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This 1-6-1, Empty Pockets, has the right set up and states the sad truth that our funds have come under a tight squeeze with the slowed down economy.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
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It's terrible. I hope another stimulus comes our way soon. Thanks for reading my poem. :)
Comment from HarryT
Good attempt. But does store and poor rhyme? Not sure about that. But I guess others believe it does. So I guess I'm in the minority on this one. I guess if you stretch it poor it might be pronounced pour. Enjoy your work.
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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Good attempt. But does store and poor rhyme? Not sure about that. But I guess others believe it does. So I guess I'm in the minority on this one. I guess if you stretch it poor it might be pronounced pour. Enjoy your work.
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Comment Written 03-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Thanks for reading my poem. I honestly think all three words rhyme, I guess it depends on how you pronounce it. Have a great day and stay safe.
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Guess you are correct, it is in the pronunciation and I guess I'm in the minority on this site.
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Thanks. I loved your entry, I really thought it would win.
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Thanks for your good thought.
Comment from palmart
Reality sometimes brings lessons that we probably do not know how to learn from them. But they are right there: just to teach us. When we all learn at the same time, the same thing, like now with the COVID, we are all in the same line of evolution. Your poem shows a radiography of our internal feelings and your description hits all of us in the same point. Great artwork!
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Reality sometimes brings lessons that we probably do not know how to learn from them. But they are right there: just to teach us. When we all learn at the same time, the same thing, like now with the COVID, we are all in the same line of evolution. Your poem shows a radiography of our internal feelings and your description hits all of us in the same point. Great artwork!
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Thank you for reading my poem, I really appreciate it. :)
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You´re very welcome, Boogienights!
Blessings!
Comment from Lucy de Welles
All elements here. Well matched drawing and color combo for subject of text. A bit stark, gray, no bright colors. Just the basics in the drawing and in the wording. Simple, punchy, straight to the point. Most readers can relate.
Yes, I can remember when I wasn't a millionaire! :))))
Solid contest entry.
Lucy
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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All elements here. Well matched drawing and color combo for subject of text. A bit stark, gray, no bright colors. Just the basics in the drawing and in the wording. Simple, punchy, straight to the point. Most readers can relate.
Yes, I can remember when I wasn't a millionaire! :))))
Solid contest entry.
Lucy
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Hahahaha...me too. Thanks so much for reading my poem, I really appreciate it. :)
Comment from AnnaLinda
Yup! Appreciate you were able to capture current reality and include 3 rhymes in those 8 words
and adhere to the short syllable count. Very talented work indeed.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Yup! Appreciate you were able to capture current reality and include 3 rhymes in those 8 words
and adhere to the short syllable count. Very talented work indeed.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Thank you for reading my poem and for your kind words. :)
Comment from QC Poet
Excellent use of the 1-6-1 syllables slotted using them with an effective use of photography demonstrating the point of the message. Best of Luck to you in the contest. Prayer s for All to Receive of Needs and our Wants are for the things that truly enrich our Lives.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Excellent use of the 1-6-1 syllables slotted using them with an effective use of photography demonstrating the point of the message. Best of Luck to you in the contest. Prayer s for All to Receive of Needs and our Wants are for the things that truly enrich our Lives.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Thank you for this great review and your insightful comments. I hope everyone feels as you do, and extends charity to those in need. :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Poverty is rife at the moment and more people will suffer because of the economy just now. Not being able to buy food is a sad state of affairs, you highlighted people's plight here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
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Poverty is rife at the moment and more people will suffer because of the economy just now. Not being able to buy food is a sad state of affairs, you highlighted people's plight here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020
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It's hard all over I think, we lost all 6 of our paper routes because of covid, which gave us a surprising good income each month. We had done them for 30+ years but because of the pandemic they went digital. Now we struggle like so many others. I just hope it ends soon. Thanks again for reading.
