Fanning the Flames
5-7-5 about spreading rumors through idle chat.16 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about gossip between friends can become a hot fanning flame that spreads like a wildfire through a community and seems unstoppable.
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about gossip between friends can become a hot fanning flame that spreads like a wildfire through a community and seems unstoppable.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
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Thanks for reviewing1
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello anonymous
Great entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt contest.
Goodd syllables count and connection between lines. The presentation works well. The topic about gossiping is a fine choice. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Hello anonymous
Great entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt contest.
Goodd syllables count and connection between lines. The presentation works well. The topic about gossiping is a fine choice. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
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Thanks for your review!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is an excellent metaphor. You've used several literary techniques. Your alliteration is effective. The s's especially create the atmosphere and tone. I like your wordplay. This has a dual cautionary tale and tongue-in-cheek humor. It reminds me of a new young singer Grace VanderWaal who wrote and sings Gossip Girl.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jYv6yzMUlmI
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This is an excellent metaphor. You've used several literary techniques. Your alliteration is effective. The s's especially create the atmosphere and tone. I like your wordplay. This has a dual cautionary tale and tongue-in-cheek humor. It reminds me of a new young singer Grace VanderWaal who wrote and sings Gossip Girl.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jYv6yzMUlmI
Comment Written 05-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Thanks for your thoughtful review, and for introducing me to Grace VanderWaal's song.
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You're welcome. Grace is one of my favorite new singers.
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I just played a couple of other pieces she's done... talented all right!
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good...I'm glad you are enjoying her.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Fanning the Flames, has the right set up and seems to suggest that the madness of BS going around doesn't need much of a spin to hit the fan.
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This 5-7-5, Fanning the Flames, has the right set up and seems to suggest that the madness of BS going around doesn't need much of a spin to hit the fan.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2020
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There is so much BS going around the crock is full.
Comment from equestrik
Good presentation. The picture goes well with your write and it speaks the truth about gossip for sure. Gossip causes so many issues with people not only within families ut also with co-workers, kids etc..
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Good presentation. The picture goes well with your write and it speaks the truth about gossip for sure. Gossip causes so many issues with people not only within families ut also with co-workers, kids etc..
Comment Written 05-Dec-2020
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Thank you. Gossip is a scourge for spreading private information, embroidering half-truths, or telling outright lies.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Mystery Poet,
The tongue is a small member of the body, but it can do a lot of damage. In your poem, you've nicely explained how "breezy/small talk" can quickly become a "gust" of "inflaming hot air"...."gossip's gust", I like that. Nice alliteration, too.
I count the correct syllables.
Good Luck in the contest!
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Hi Mystery Poet,
The tongue is a small member of the body, but it can do a lot of damage. In your poem, you've nicely explained how "breezy/small talk" can quickly become a "gust" of "inflaming hot air"...."gossip's gust", I like that. Nice alliteration, too.
I count the correct syllables.
Good Luck in the contest!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 05-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Thanks for your supportive review of my poem.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Gossip is bad news or gust. The flames will heat up if there is gossip. And if people like to listen to small talk, it will sometimes feed that flame so the gossip lingers on, even though it might not be true.
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Gossip is bad news or gust. The flames will heat up if there is gossip. And if people like to listen to small talk, it will sometimes feed that flame so the gossip lingers on, even though it might not be true.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2020
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Thanks for reviewing!
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
This is a scene that is, no doubt familiar to us all.
I like to think teenage girls and young women eventually grow out of this, but some don't. I'm a girl but I was never like that.
Hot air, breezy and gust all work wonderfully as weather images and also contribute to the gossip theme.
Very well done.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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This is a scene that is, no doubt familiar to us all.
I like to think teenage girls and young women eventually grow out of this, but some don't. I'm a girl but I was never like that.
Hot air, breezy and gust all work wonderfully as weather images and also contribute to the gossip theme.
Very well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2020
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I hate gossip and try to nip it in the bud when others want to tell me something about somebody else in a snarky or malicious way.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Here you go again--blowing WIND and fanning FIRE (=two-thirds of a 70s insipid soft-rock group.) Fine choice of synonyms air/breeze gust--and gossip for alliteration.
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Here you go again--blowing WIND and fanning FIRE (=two-thirds of a 70s insipid soft-rock group.) Fine choice of synonyms air/breeze gust--and gossip for alliteration.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2020
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Soft rock is better than soft cock - is that too EARTHy?
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I just love your 5-7 - 5 The poem has a deep meaning and an interesting cadence: hot air - small talk - gossip's gust. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
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I just love your 5-7 - 5 The poem has a deep meaning and an interesting cadence: hot air - small talk - gossip's gust. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
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Thanks for your positive comments.
