Comment from Sankey

Excellent

Wow! What a great chapter and full of surprises. A few spags for you. in Newton (to)visit with my parents

I can't pas(s)[t] this up.

I felt maybe (we)deserved

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2020

Thank you for a great review. You must be getting notices now because you seem to find my stories. Thank for catching the spags.
Beth

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

Captivating! So rich in detail. (Some graphic!)

circles and slits [splits] in the air

we left the kids in Newton [to] visit with my parents

The following morning, our students left [going=>to go] back to college.

in a freezing wind. [omit: ) after period]

The kids hadn't been back in school long [omit comma] before we got a call from Don.
there was [were] a lot of things left out

the fantastic car which [that] he found was

I felt maybe [we] deserved some of the blame

I have a feeling [omit comma] that this agreement was arranged

The car would bring about more problems [omit comma] during the following semester.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2020

Thank you so much Elizabeth. You are a fantastic editor and comma police. I don't know why I keep throwing those commas in at random.
I'll see if I've already nominated you or not.
Beth

Comment from bnair

Excellent

I love you are doing this for your kids. It is an amazing gift. I would work on some grammar stuff like "Newton visit" Maybe missing "to"? "Y`all won't believe this deal, I've found." ... you started quotes but did not continue them.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2020

Thank you so much for reviewing this. I've fixed the errors. Others pointed them out also but do appreciate you mentioning them.
Beth

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

The Firebird
by BethShelby
Hello Beth, I like reading your wonderful true story of what your boys did when the come from cottage
I was great, reminds me of our three and the different things they some crazy and others that made Stan and I smile
Gert

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2020

Thank you Gert, I'm so pleased you are enjoying my story. Boys can come up with some interesting problems that usually we have to bail them out of.
Beth

reply by Gert sherwood on 09-Dec-2020

You are welcome Beth, I had a boy that kept me on my toes, now he grown and 62 years of age.

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

I know it is not funny, but I am laughing over the car purchase. It is a memorable moment and I am sure your son has learned much about purchasing cars that do not run. Your family tales still hold my interest, excellent writing.

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 Comment Written 09-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2020

Thank you for the review. After a few years passed, we could laugh about it. Kids have to lhe hard way but unfortunately they provide some learning lessons for their parents, too.
Beth

Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.

Excellent

That Firebird! Ha ha

Noticed two typos:
One (On) the second day of 1982, we planned to leave Newton and to go back to New Orleans.


No more was said about the car for many, many months. If Don was having buyer's remorse, he didn't dare mention it. I'm thinking the anxiety over the deal, along with Don's hyperactive nature, and also the fact that he'd never really learned how to sturdy, (study)





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 Comment Written 09-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2020

Thank you for the review and for noticing my typos. I always appreciate your reviews. I'm glad it made you laugh.
Beth