senryu (he's playing around)
Whether it's golf or politics, he can't stand losing.13 total reviews
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
Excellent poem!
I'm encouraged to see that you won here on-site with this kind of political statement. Maybe even Trump supporters recognize great writing.
I love your satire on Trump, as I hate him more than I can say.
But your poem is excellent in other ways:
wonderful play-on-words with "playing around"
"driving a wedge" and "fair way."
This really is a first-rate work.
Congrats.
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Excellent poem!
I'm encouraged to see that you won here on-site with this kind of political statement. Maybe even Trump supporters recognize great writing.
I love your satire on Trump, as I hate him more than I can say.
But your poem is excellent in other ways:
wonderful play-on-words with "playing around"
"driving a wedge" and "fair way."
This really is a first-rate work.
Congrats.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2020
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I like your wordplay. That is one of my favorite literary techniques. I think this gets the reader to pause, to picture both images per word. The words you've chosen is genius. I'm voting for this and giving A+
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2020
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I like your wordplay. That is one of my favorite literary techniques. I think this gets the reader to pause, to picture both images per word. The words you've chosen is genius. I'm voting for this and giving A+
Comment Written 13-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2020
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I'm pleased you appreciate my wordplay.... and thank you very much for your vote. I agree with you that by using wordplay it can engage an intelligent reader to see more in the poem. (Sometimes it flies right over the heads of some readers.)
Comment from equestrik
This is a good write for the political senryu contest. I enjoyed the picture and like the play on words at the end. Nice job. Best to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2020
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This is a good write for the political senryu contest. I enjoyed the picture and like the play on words at the end. Nice job. Best to you in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2020
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Thanks for your kind comments.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, my friend,
Great entry for the
Political Senryu writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. I agree, Trump is playing while our country goes through the worse pandemic in decades. Can't wait to get rid of him. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2020
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Hello, my friend,
Great entry for the
Political Senryu writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. I agree, Trump is playing while our country goes through the worse pandemic in decades. Can't wait to get rid of him. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2020
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Trump is a dangerous man - he has diseased many minds with his malevolence and selfishness. I wish he'd go and build a golf course on Pluto... it'd take him light years to get there and we need never hear of him again.
Comment from lyenochka
What a great play on words! You're absolutely right that he missed the "fair" and right way to promote democracy to go with what the voters said! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2020
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What a great play on words! You're absolutely right that he missed the "fair" and right way to promote democracy to go with what the voters said! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your review. When I heard how he cheated at golf i wasn't surprised at all.
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Sigh. I am sure he cheated in his business practices as well. That's probably why he's under audit.
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He has a track record of cheating in everything he's been involved in. He intrigues me that he grew up so twisted and amoral.
Comment from Eternal Muse
Are you talking about Trump? It's a little hard to tell from the back (lol). A witty and original senryu which should do well in the contest. I created this writing prompt originally years ago, and am surprised it's still running.
Great job, thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2020
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Are you talking about Trump? It's a little hard to tell from the back (lol). A witty and original senryu which should do well in the contest. I created this writing prompt originally years ago, and am surprised it's still running.
Great job, thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2020
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Thanks for your positive response to my poem! ...and thanks for suggesting the concept years ago; it has obviously proved popular.
Comment from mauial
Very good job with this senryu prompt. I like your line of reflection and the double meaning of it with golfing and politics. Personal ambition has no place in public service. Things are only fair if they go his way.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2020
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Very good job with this senryu prompt. I like your line of reflection and the double meaning of it with golfing and politics. Personal ambition has no place in public service. Things are only fair if they go his way.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2020
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Thanks for your positive response to my poem! He is a self-centred megalomaniac.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I hope he is enjoying a well deserved rest now as he took a battering from the press when he was in office and they were unfair, the mess America are in now will be far worse that anything Trump ever did, watch this space, Armageddon is coming, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2020
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I hope he is enjoying a well deserved rest now as he took a battering from the press when he was in office and they were unfair, the mess America are in now will be far worse that anything Trump ever did, watch this space, Armageddon is coming, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2020
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Thanks for reviewing - I hope he gets out of the way. He's set it up to be a mess, creating the forthcoming Armageddon.
Comment from Vanna1
Ha. "He missed the fair way"! Can't stand to lose at anything. Ridiculous and very sad for others at the same time. You expressed the reality of dictatorship. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2020
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Ha. "He missed the fair way"! Can't stand to lose at anything. Ridiculous and very sad for others at the same time. You expressed the reality of dictatorship. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2020
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It's a terrible state of affairs that he can be so undermining. He is setting the country up for disaster.
Comment from sammielwf
He's Playing Around is a reality based senryu. Your creative streak really hit the fairway with this shot at the off course president.
I liked the verse but not the man who inspired it. Well done.
Sammielwf
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2020
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He's Playing Around is a reality based senryu. Your creative streak really hit the fairway with this shot at the off course president.
I liked the verse but not the man who inspired it. Well done.
Sammielwf
Comment Written 13-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2020
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I can't stand him. I wish he'd get lost in the rough and get eaten by a mountain lion.
