Remembering Yesterday
Viewing comments for Chapter 89 "Highlights of The New Year"A widow's journey into her relationship with her
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Comment from mermaids
I enjoy our local fair here in July and would have loved to attend the World's Fair in New Orleans, it sounds like fun with the Gondolas. You had so much going with the wedding, your mother and the fair. It certainly was a busy time.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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I enjoy our local fair here in July and would have loved to attend the World's Fair in New Orleans, it sounds like fun with the Gondolas. You had so much going with the wedding, your mother and the fair. It certainly was a busy time.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and interesting comments.
Beth
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Beth, I found this post very interesting because I was not aware of things called world fairs. I hope the city did benefit from clearing a lot of older and unsafe buildings in the area because of the space needed for the fair and the river walk.
The only thing I would suggest to make this post better would be to leave it out the part about Wayne and Maxine, This paragraph only distracts from your main story and would be better placed somewhere else in your memoirs.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Dear Beth, I found this post very interesting because I was not aware of things called world fairs. I hope the city did benefit from clearing a lot of older and unsafe buildings in the area because of the space needed for the fair and the river walk.
The only thing I would suggest to make this post better would be to leave it out the part about Wayne and Maxine, This paragraph only distracts from your main story and would be better placed somewhere else in your memoirs.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for the review. It was an advantage to some of the older parts of the city cleared. I new the part about Maxine and Wayne would be a distraction for the readers. It is only there because my children were close to Wayne and it is a memory of their history they would want. Perhaps I could add it later when the FanStory readers have reviewed it. Thanks for the suggestion.
Beth
Comment from Mistydawn
I'm so glad your mom doesn't have cancer. I do hope this marriage works out for Carl. They do say opposites attract so maybe they bring out the best in each other. I'm glad you enjoyed the fair. It sounds like so much fun. Your chapter is well-written, very interesting. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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I'm so glad your mom doesn't have cancer. I do hope this marriage works out for Carl. They do say opposites attract so maybe they bring out the best in each other. I'm glad you enjoyed the fair. It sounds like so much fun. Your chapter is well-written, very interesting. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. The marriage isn't perfect but it will last a while. I'll post more about it soon.
Beth
Comment from royowen
1984 was significant for me, my younger daughter was born the year before, the same year as my experiencing God, feb 22d was my baptism. It's funny, your kids were making massive plans fo their adult futures and my children were so young. But their lives are so significant aren't they? Well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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1984 was significant for me, my younger daughter was born the year before, the same year as my experiencing God, feb 22d was my baptism. It's funny, your kids were making massive plans fo their adult futures and my children were so young. But their lives are so significant aren't they? Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you Roy. 1984 was a year of even more changes in my family's life and in the world. I'll get to that. I see it was indeed a time of change for you as well. I appreciate the great reviews.
Beth
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Good job
Comment from Ulla
Hi Beth, this is a lovely continuation to your narrative. So now Carol is getting married and then there's the World Expo. You got your wish there. At first I thought it strange that you said it was the last one in the US. Until I remembered that the one I visited in 86 was not in Seattle, but Vancouver, Canada. I and some of my crew drove up there to visit it. (I was a cabin attendant from 1974-1994 with Scandinavian Airlines) So now we have the wedding to look forward to, although, Don was not too happy about it. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Hi Beth, this is a lovely continuation to your narrative. So now Carol is getting married and then there's the World Expo. You got your wish there. At first I thought it strange that you said it was the last one in the US. Until I remembered that the one I visited in 86 was not in Seattle, but Vancouver, Canada. I and some of my crew drove up there to visit it. (I was a cabin attendant from 1974-1994 with Scandinavian Airlines) So now we have the wedding to look forward to, although, Don was not too happy about it. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you Ulla, I imagine you have some wonderful memories of all the place you visited as a flight attendant. I hope you write you life story or have you already? I thankful for your continued support.
Beth
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I have written some of it. It is in my portfolio. Of course it doesn't pay anymore. It also needs some serious editing. One day soon I want to get back to it and relaunch it on the site. Ulla:)))
Comment from Sankey
What a great, detailed chapter and good reading in spite of the "Spagarama" ©G.C.Moore2015 Here we go....In background....My mother visit(ed) in
OR My mother('s) visit in
few things I inhe(r)i[r](t)ed from her.
Enterprise did capture you(r) attention
Not sure of the word in inverted commas? figurines that "shouted" water and New Orleans.
Count(r)ies from all over the world
Maybe Mo[n](m)'s immune system
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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What a great, detailed chapter and good reading in spite of the "Spagarama" ©G.C.Moore2015 Here we go....In background....My mother visit(ed) in
OR My mother('s) visit in
few things I inhe(r)i[r](t)ed from her.
Enterprise did capture you(r) attention
Not sure of the word in inverted commas? figurines that "shouted" water and New Orleans.
Count(r)ies from all over the world
Maybe Mo[n](m)'s immune system
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the great review and comments. I had found a couple of the spags already. The word in the quotes I picked up from another source. shouted wasn't my word but I will replace it.
Beth
Comment from Pantygynt
The 1980s seem a long time ago now, but I remember them well. I found this interesting as I can actually remember something called the Festival of Britain in 1951 which I reckon must have been akin to a world fair.
There were a number of typos in this which I am drawing your attention to.
'inheired' - inherited I think?
Enterprise did capture you[r] attention - typo - the R was missing.
'In April, your sister, Maxine's husband, Wayne, had a heart attack...' - This looks a bit as if the 'your sister' was Maxine's husband, which of course is rediculous. I think it would be better to cut the comma after 'sister'.
'a visual cacophony' - an interesting expression that intentionally muddles our senses of sight and hearing since 'cacophony' is a hideous sound so whether it can be paired with the adjective 'visual' in a piece of prose such as this is a moot point. If this were poem on the other hand...
became involved in ther[e] other plans - typo - 'E' missing.
'Maybe Mo(n)[m]'s immune system...' - typo 'N' for 'M'.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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The 1980s seem a long time ago now, but I remember them well. I found this interesting as I can actually remember something called the Festival of Britain in 1951 which I reckon must have been akin to a world fair.
There were a number of typos in this which I am drawing your attention to.
'inheired' - inherited I think?
Enterprise did capture you[r] attention - typo - the R was missing.
'In April, your sister, Maxine's husband, Wayne, had a heart attack...' - This looks a bit as if the 'your sister' was Maxine's husband, which of course is rediculous. I think it would be better to cut the comma after 'sister'.
'a visual cacophony' - an interesting expression that intentionally muddles our senses of sight and hearing since 'cacophony' is a hideous sound so whether it can be paired with the adjective 'visual' in a piece of prose such as this is a moot point. If this were poem on the other hand...
became involved in ther[e] other plans - typo - 'E' missing.
'Maybe Mo(n)[m]'s immune system...' - typo 'N' for 'M'.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the review and comment. Every one of my errors were sentences, I added while reviewing it myself. I need to remember to renew my after thoughts. I appreciate you pointing out the errors. I have corrected them.
Beth
Comment from sammielwf
Dear Beth,
Your autobiographical writing style is fluid and entertaning. You give just enough detail and autobiographical detail to inform the reader- without overwhelming them You are leaving a legacy of your "married love" to Evan....that is sure to help your children know more about that important part of who you and Evan were as individuals !apart from being parents).
Good job with this piece of writing.
Sammielwf
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Dear Beth,
Your autobiographical writing style is fluid and entertaning. You give just enough detail and autobiographical detail to inform the reader- without overwhelming them You are leaving a legacy of your "married love" to Evan....that is sure to help your children know more about that important part of who you and Evan were as individuals !apart from being parents).
Good job with this piece of writing.
Sammielwf
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the review and nice comments. I'm glad you liked my style of writing. I appreciate you reading this and I hope you will read more.
Beth
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Once again thank you for sharing this with us. I always enjoy reading. I am curious about that wedding.
The cost of the fair was close to Five hundred Million dollars and it left New Orleans nearly a hundred million in debt. (I am pretty sure million should not be capitalized.)
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reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Once again thank you for sharing this with us. I always enjoy reading. I am curious about that wedding.
The cost of the fair was close to Five hundred Million dollars and it left New Orleans nearly a hundred million in debt. (I am pretty sure million should not be capitalized.)
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Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Thank you for you review and comments. I will post about the wedding probably by Tuesday. Thanks for noticing t a misplace capital letter. I'll fix it.
Beth
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a relief for your mother. And had she not questioned her doctor and just carried on, she might really have died. I remember passing the world fair when I was a schoolgirl on a school tour. We never went in, just had it pointed out to us. So, now you have a wedding to go to, that must have been nice. (I hope) Well done, another wonderful chapter in your life. I hope you had a nice Christmas, and I wish you a wonderful New Year. :)) Sandra xx
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reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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What a relief for your mother. And had she not questioned her doctor and just carried on, she might really have died. I remember passing the world fair when I was a schoolgirl on a school tour. We never went in, just had it pointed out to us. So, now you have a wedding to go to, that must have been nice. (I hope) Well done, another wonderful chapter in your life. I hope you had a nice Christmas, and I wish you a wonderful New Year. :)) Sandra xx
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Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Thank you, Sandra. I do appreciate the review and comments. I do think mother was wise to ask questions. I did have a nice Christmas with my children. I hope you have a happy and safe New Year.
Beth
