Why me, Lord?
Enough is enough even for Mom!22 total reviews
Comment from Susan Larson
What a funny and easy to believe story. Your dialogue was superb. It sounded so natural one might wonder if it was real, tape recorded and then transcribed. Have you tried writing scripts?
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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What a funny and easy to believe story. Your dialogue was superb. It sounded so natural one might wonder if it was real, tape recorded and then transcribed. Have you tried writing scripts?
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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I've written a script now and then but my son is the true scriptwriter. I prefer to fill in the sights and sounds around me. Thanks for your generous remarks and stars. Smiles to you.
Comment from Jaime Deagle
I found the character to be interesting and engaging. The story seemed natural. The character draws you into the story. The dialogue sounded natural. Overall a well-crafted piece. It was an easy read. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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I found the character to be interesting and engaging. The story seemed natural. The character draws you into the story. The dialogue sounded natural. Overall a well-crafted piece. It was an easy read. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for stopping by to read, enjoy, and comment on my contest entry. I appreciate your thoughts. Smiles to you!
Comment from Raul1
This is a very funny story about a dog with full of mud and needs a bath. I have enjoyed reading your story. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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This is a very funny story about a dog with full of mud and needs a bath. I have enjoyed reading your story. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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thanks for taking the time to read and enjoy. Thanks for the kind thoughts. Smiles to you!
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a great short story. It grabs the reader with the first line, where you see the picture of the puppy and think he is Jackson whose mother is on the grown. This story does not let the reader go until the end. It is very well crafted. But wow! How inconsiderate. Jackson is enjoying lunch while his mother is "bending over backwards" for him. Well written.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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This is a great short story. It grabs the reader with the first line, where you see the picture of the puppy and think he is Jackson whose mother is on the grown. This story does not let the reader go until the end. It is very well crafted. But wow! How inconsiderate. Jackson is enjoying lunch while his mother is "bending over backwards" for him. Well written.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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Thanks for reading and commenting. I truly appreciate your time. Smiles to you!
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
Oh, yes. I can relate really well. And then they're off again - to their own world where we are just supposed to be constantly on stand-by in case we're needed. haha
Thanks!
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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Dear Mystery Writer,
Oh, yes. I can relate really well. And then they're off again - to their own world where we are just supposed to be constantly on stand-by in case we're needed. haha
Thanks!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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Oh so right! thank you for reading and commenting on my contest entry. Appreciate it so very much. Smiles to you for a good day!
Comment from RetroStarfish
Cute story, although I dare say a mother's lot in life is to clean up their children's messes.
The dialogue in this piece is stellar. You also conveyed a lot of detail and plot context in a simple and straightforward way.
The only off note for me was the sudden switch to present tense at the end. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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Cute story, although I dare say a mother's lot in life is to clean up their children's messes.
The dialogue in this piece is stellar. You also conveyed a lot of detail and plot context in a simple and straightforward way.
The only off note for me was the sudden switch to present tense at the end. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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Yeah, a bad fault of mine! Taking on the role of the giver and switching the tense of my story. LOL Thank you for taking the time to read, comment and I hope enjoy. Smiles to you!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written story about mother's who are often leave everything to help out a child and sometimes all her efforts come to nothing without a notice.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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A very well-written story about mother's who are often leave everything to help out a child and sometimes all her efforts come to nothing without a notice.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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Amen...how many of us can relate to this story. As mothers we often act with out thinking when our children call for him. It's just part of our life. Thanks for reading and commenting. I appreciate your time and thoughts. Smiles to you!
Comment from Allezw2
Obviously, what we have hyeah is a presumption, an assumption and lack of real time communication to ensure cooperation.
Coordination by ouija board INC, LLC.
This does tweak the reader to keep up with the thread for certain.
Serious business and a runback to the beginning.
Done? Well, yeah, sort of.
Live long and write well,
Fantasist
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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Obviously, what we have hyeah is a presumption, an assumption and lack of real time communication to ensure cooperation.
Coordination by ouija board INC, LLC.
This does tweak the reader to keep up with the thread for certain.
Serious business and a runback to the beginning.
Done? Well, yeah, sort of.
Live long and write well,
Fantasist
Comment Written 07-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. Smiles to you!
Comment from Patty Palmer
The story gives a good example of trying to help someone "Jackson's mother trying to help him out" Jackson being irresponsible by not calling his mother with the change in plans so she didn't have to move quickly to bring the things that Jackson needed and he's off somewhere having lunch with Zack.
I felt the story was kind of confusing when I read it. Following the conversation was difficult. Good luck with the contest.
Patty
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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The story gives a good example of trying to help someone "Jackson's mother trying to help him out" Jackson being irresponsible by not calling his mother with the change in plans so she didn't have to move quickly to bring the things that Jackson needed and he's off somewhere having lunch with Zack.
I felt the story was kind of confusing when I read it. Following the conversation was difficult. Good luck with the contest.
Patty
Comment Written 07-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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Thanks for taking the time to read and comment. Smiles to you!
Comment from equestrik
this is quite a story with a very long-suffering person seeming aallowing himself to be taken advantage of and jerked around. I really feel for him. Best to you.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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this is quite a story with a very long-suffering person seeming aallowing himself to be taken advantage of and jerked around. I really feel for him. Best to you.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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Unfortunately, I believe most parents, especially mothers, trying over-accomplish and then come up on the short end. Thanks for reading and commenting. Smiles to you.
