Magic moments
Free verse29 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Your free verse captures that peaceful "predawn" moment by the ocean so very well! And then the reality hits with the broken glass - the negligence of humankind causes pain for others.
Congratulations on your second place win!!
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2021
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Your free verse captures that peaceful "predawn" moment by the ocean so very well! And then the reality hits with the broken glass - the negligence of humankind causes pain for others.
Congratulations on your second place win!!
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2021
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Thank you for finding it !
Comment from Ric Myworld
Ouch, what a mystical moment destroyed by fear and pain. All because of inconsiderate people who don't appreciate our wonderful natural resources. I sense your kind heart and love of nature and the environment. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2021
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Ouch, what a mystical moment destroyed by fear and pain. All because of inconsiderate people who don't appreciate our wonderful natural resources. I sense your kind heart and love of nature and the environment. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2021
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Thank you very much .
Comment from dragonpoet
This shows the serenity and peace walking on a beach or in nature can bring and also states that you have to watch where you walk because dangerous things can be there. It shows the ups and downs of life.
Your word choice and line breaks works well.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healhy
Joan
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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This shows the serenity and peace walking on a beach or in nature can bring and also states that you have to watch where you walk because dangerous things can be there. It shows the ups and downs of life.
Your word choice and line breaks works well.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healhy
Joan
Comment Written 28-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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Thank you very much.
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You are most kindly welcome, Snku.
Joan
Comment from Aussie
Your lovely poem grabs the reader as you fell. Trash on beaches, needles, bottles etc are a constant threat to barefoot humans and dogs too. The beach in predawn light must have been very spiritual; alas, no warning of bodily harm. Good contrast in your words.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Your lovely poem grabs the reader as you fell. Trash on beaches, needles, bottles etc are a constant threat to barefoot humans and dogs too. The beach in predawn light must have been very spiritual; alas, no warning of bodily harm. Good contrast in your words.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for the generous remarks and the stars.
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
I like the words to your poem
it makes a lot of sense.
You captured my attention from the first line to the last
What we throw away returns to us and others
when will learn or care.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
This is what I call a food for thought poem
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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I like the words to your poem
it makes a lot of sense.
You captured my attention from the first line to the last
What we throw away returns to us and others
when will learn or care.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
This is what I call a food for thought poem
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for your great understanding of this little poem.You are the only one who got that point.Thanks a lot.
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As always it is my pleasure Wow I'm glad I got it
So far my mind is working good With this stroke so time i get confuse I have to pass a few poems.
Take care
Cookie
Comment from Mastery
Outstanding poetry, my friend, Sanku. I love free verse and in fact, it is the only poetry that I am personally any good at writing. (I should a gotten in this perhaps. LOL
I like these lines best:
"I stumbled and fell
on a broken bottle
the tides washed ashore.
My toes bleeding,
the magic was broken.
Might I suggest you use a brighter background color? Bless you, Bob
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Outstanding poetry, my friend, Sanku. I love free verse and in fact, it is the only poetry that I am personally any good at writing. (I should a gotten in this perhaps. LOL
I like these lines best:
"I stumbled and fell
on a broken bottle
the tides washed ashore.
My toes bleeding,
the magic was broken.
Might I suggest you use a brighter background color? Bless you, Bob
Comment Written 20-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thanks a lot Bob.
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:) Bob
Comment from Mastery
Outstanding poetry, my friend, Sanku. I love free verse and in fact, it is the only poetry that I am personally any good at writing. (I should a gotten in this perhaps. LOL
I like these lines best:
"I stumbled and fell
on a broken bottle
the tides washed ashore.
My toes bleeding,
the magic was broken.
Might I suggest you use a brighter background color? Bless you, Bob
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Outstanding poetry, my friend, Sanku. I love free verse and in fact, it is the only poetry that I am personally any good at writing. (I should a gotten in this perhaps. LOL
I like these lines best:
"I stumbled and fell
on a broken bottle
the tides washed ashore.
My toes bleeding,
the magic was broken.
Might I suggest you use a brighter background color? Bless you, Bob
Comment Written 20-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thanks.yes I will bear that in mind.
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:) Bob
Comment from Jenny Kartchner
I enjoyed this poem and the strong adjectives you used. It's disappointing that they were trying to enjoy the beach and then got cut with a bottle that others left behind.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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I enjoyed this poem and the strong adjectives you used. It's disappointing that they were trying to enjoy the beach and then got cut with a bottle that others left behind.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Patty Palmer
Good poem! It's true when people don't worry about throwing garbage around it sure can ruin someone else's day for sure. Hope you got a tetanus shot LOL Good luck with the contest.
Patty
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Good poem! It's true when people don't worry about throwing garbage around it sure can ruin someone else's day for sure. Hope you got a tetanus shot LOL Good luck with the contest.
Patty
Comment Written 20-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much Few people caught that message .Thanks for understanding.
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You're welcome
Patty
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A moment in time captured on your early morning walk on the beach with a gentle wind and a shy sun starting the day and they the passionate moment was broken literally with pain and suffering, how awful that you were injured and your peace was broken, from peace to trauma, your words soothes and pained me, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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A moment in time captured on your early morning walk on the beach with a gentle wind and a shy sun starting the day and they the passionate moment was broken literally with pain and suffering, how awful that you were injured and your peace was broken, from peace to trauma, your words soothes and pained me, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much.
