Through Darkness
Light can shine...21 total reviews
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello anon, this is a lovely poem and you have put the required words to good use without your work sounding contrived in order to accomplish this. Good abcb throughout the poem and the story line is excellent. some good use of metaphor - 'You tore my heart to pieces, it won't beat.' Seven very well executed stanzas and an excellent write. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Hello anon, this is a lovely poem and you have put the required words to good use without your work sounding contrived in order to accomplish this. Good abcb throughout the poem and the story line is excellent. some good use of metaphor - 'You tore my heart to pieces, it won't beat.' Seven very well executed stanzas and an excellent write. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thank you, that's very kind of you. I appreciate you reading my poem. :)
Comment from E. Denison
This is a great from-dark-to-light entry that does an excellent job of telling a story while navigating through the words required. Well done and best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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This is a great from-dark-to-light entry that does an excellent job of telling a story while navigating through the words required. Well done and best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this great review. It's always appreciated. :)
Comment from Goodadvicechan
Through darkness may appears to be a sad poem but the hidden message is that there is always "hope."
The poem says: "Just like a fledgling bird I'll find my wings,
and soon, I will careen through azure sky."
Happy writing and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Through darkness may appears to be a sad poem but the hidden message is that there is always "hope."
The poem says: "Just like a fledgling bird I'll find my wings,
and soon, I will careen through azure sky."
Happy writing and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this great review. :)
Comment from DonandVicki
We all get an oppertunity to come out of the darkness if we are lucky. To see the light at the end of the tunnel takes some vision and imagination. Well composed, Don.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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We all get an oppertunity to come out of the darkness if we are lucky. To see the light at the end of the tunnel takes some vision and imagination. Well composed, Don.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review. :)
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
A beautifully written poem using the suggested words. Nicely done. Nice flow and rhyme scheme . Great photo to go with your words. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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A beautifully written poem using the suggested words. Nicely done. Nice flow and rhyme scheme . Great photo to go with your words. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this great review. Have a nice evening. :)
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
Wow, you did such a good job incorporating the required words that I didn't realize it was one of those types of poems until I read your Author's Notes! Very well done and I love the optimism you express in the face of darkness.
Thank you for sharing.
Susan
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Wow, you did such a good job incorporating the required words that I didn't realize it was one of those types of poems until I read your Author's Notes! Very well done and I love the optimism you express in the face of darkness.
Thank you for sharing.
Susan
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Thank you, I'm glad you liked it, I always appreciate hearing from you.:)
Comment from WriterHeather
Wow! This is a stunning, thought provoking piece you have penned for the use these words contest. I got emotional reading it. Beyond that, this piece is written with obvious skill for poetry. Well done!
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Wow! This is a stunning, thought provoking piece you have penned for the use these words contest. I got emotional reading it. Beyond that, this piece is written with obvious skill for poetry. Well done!
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this wonderful review, it's so awesome. :)
Comment from Erika Seshadri
Ah, very dark and lovely. I see you have entered it into the "Use These Words Contest." I wish you the best of luck with that.
My favorite stanza:
The monsters in the dark will lose their grip,
then hope, restored, will cause my heart to soar.
The darkness in my soul will fade away,
your poison won't effect me anymore.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Ah, very dark and lovely. I see you have entered it into the "Use These Words Contest." I wish you the best of luck with that.
My favorite stanza:
The monsters in the dark will lose their grip,
then hope, restored, will cause my heart to soar.
The darkness in my soul will fade away,
your poison won't effect me anymore.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem, that's very thoughtful of you. :)
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
Oh, wow. No one would have ever guessed there were word requirements for this piece. Even I, LOOKING, as I read had a hard time listening for them to fall. Most of the time, unfortunately, they have a tendency to fall HARD on the ear and sound like they might not QUITE belong. Not here.
And then you introduced a message that was powerful and important for us all to hear. Along with an image that was hard to tear myself away from.
I have a feeling this will be hard to beat. GOOD LUCK!
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Dear Mystery Writer,
Oh, wow. No one would have ever guessed there were word requirements for this piece. Even I, LOOKING, as I read had a hard time listening for them to fall. Most of the time, unfortunately, they have a tendency to fall HARD on the ear and sound like they might not QUITE belong. Not here.
And then you introduced a message that was powerful and important for us all to hear. Along with an image that was hard to tear myself away from.
I have a feeling this will be hard to beat. GOOD LUCK!
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this amazing review, I can't tell you how much it means to me. You are awesome. :)
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hahaha Welcome!
Comment from Krissy Abbott
This poem is deeply intriguing. It's dark and vulnerable but ends with a ray of hope : "And then, I will in peace make my descent,
and find serenity as time goes by." Well done!
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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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This poem is deeply intriguing. It's dark and vulnerable but ends with a ray of hope : "And then, I will in peace make my descent,
and find serenity as time goes by." Well done!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much, I appreciate you reading my poem. :)
