Evil
Man s dark side.. people that enjoy torturing3 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This makes me think of what I say about how tomatoes are tortured. I hate to list them for my neighbor who shops for me. Although I have to admit to boiling, skinning, squeezing, tearing, ripping, slicing along with the canned ones that have been crushed, diced, pasted, puréed etc. This may set the readers off to admit to their actions of tortured.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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This makes me think of what I say about how tomatoes are tortured. I hate to list them for my neighbor who shops for me. Although I have to admit to boiling, skinning, squeezing, tearing, ripping, slicing along with the canned ones that have been crushed, diced, pasted, puréed etc. This may set the readers off to admit to their actions of tortured.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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I guess that explains why my poem didn t get even one vote.
.. hiding one s head in the sand isn t going to change things though...
Sadly, man has a dark side and it often prevails..
Thank you for the insight, much appreciated!
Take care!
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Sadly people don't like to look at reality. Or they have no conscious. They feel threatened. It's a bit like the book by F. Scott Fitzgerald called People of the Lie.
https://openlibrary.org/books/OL18304671M/People_of_the_lie
Comment from Y. M. Roger
The last two lines of your poem certainly fit the syllable count, but the rest of the contest requirements have not been met:
Write a six line poem [yours is but two]
consisting of 2, 2, 2, 2, 9, 9 syllables.
The first four lines rhyme or near rhyme [your four words do not ALL rhyme] and are all descriptive words.
The last two lines rhyme [because your four words do not rhyme, your two lines do not] and incorporate the first, second, third and fourth lines as the 5th through 8th syllables.
Please let me know when you've had a chance to fix it and I'd be happy to re-review. :) ;) Good luck with your re-work and best of luck in the contest! ;)
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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The last two lines of your poem certainly fit the syllable count, but the rest of the contest requirements have not been met:
Write a six line poem [yours is but two]
consisting of 2, 2, 2, 2, 9, 9 syllables.
The first four lines rhyme or near rhyme [your four words do not ALL rhyme] and are all descriptive words.
The last two lines rhyme [because your four words do not rhyme, your two lines do not] and incorporate the first, second, third and fourth lines as the 5th through 8th syllables.
Please let me know when you've had a chance to fix it and I'd be happy to re-review. :) ;) Good luck with your re-work and best of luck in the contest! ;)
Comment Written 28-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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oops I was not even aware I had sent the poem in .. must have pressed wrong button
I hope you will give me a chance to edit and will reconsider your vote
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I have added quickly the 4 lines /four verbs that appear in the poem ..
Now I will find a pic.
Comment from LJbutterfly
Your poem doesn't seem to match the pattern outlined in the prompt description (six lines of 2-2-2-2-9-9 syllables), but it still deserves five stars because in itself, it is a well written and creative poem with a perfect rhyming pattern. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Your poem doesn't seem to match the pattern outlined in the prompt description (six lines of 2-2-2-2-9-9 syllables), but it still deserves five stars because in itself, it is a well written and creative poem with a perfect rhyming pattern. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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I made a mistake .. I pressed the wrong button XX I thought it was still in preview .. the pic is missing too and the first 4 verbs
Thank you for not giving me a bad vote like the other reviewer ..