When I Was Young
Some dreams from....16 total reviews
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
Great use of the required words! I didn't even realize it was one of those types of poems until I read your author's notes. It's a cute story of one who longed for fame and glory when young (didn't we all?) and grew up to realize that they could have a fulfilled life without outward fame!
Thank you for sharing.
Susan
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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Great use of the required words! I didn't even realize it was one of those types of poems until I read your author's notes. It's a cute story of one who longed for fame and glory when young (didn't we all?) and grew up to realize that they could have a fulfilled life without outward fame!
Thank you for sharing.
Susan
Comment Written 01-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for reading my poem, it's always great to hear from you. :)
Comment from Carlos' girl
This is a very Cute poem, it is well.writtwn has a good metre and rhymes. I especially like the last stanza; it is very humorous. I very much enjoyed your poem..
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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This is a very Cute poem, it is well.writtwn has a good metre and rhymes. I especially like the last stanza; it is very humorous. I very much enjoyed your poem..
Comment Written 01-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for this nice review, it's very appreciated. :)
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Xoxo
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I'm not sure that fame is all it's cracked up to be and many famous people have a little regret in their minds as they are often hounded by the press, especially when they make a mistake and the world is watching. But here you yearn to be famous and enjoy the accolade, a fun write, well rhymed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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I'm not sure that fame is all it's cracked up to be and many famous people have a little regret in their minds as they are often hounded by the press, especially when they make a mistake and the world is watching. But here you yearn to be famous and enjoy the accolade, a fun write, well rhymed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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Thank you. Besides being a star, I wanted to a race car driver, a nurse, a lab technician and a baker. Isn't being young wonderful? So many possibilities. Thanks again for reading. :)
Comment from Sharon Nolen
You did it!!!! You wrote a wonderful poem. It used all the words required. It was well thought out describing a dream. I liked the way you developed it so that I would think you were going to be an entertainer of some kind. Then you surprised me with your fame as MOM. How clever.
Some observations:
You used the word persue. It is actually spelled, pursue.
I felt that in some places, the rhythm wasn't consistent. The rhymes were very good, though.
One suggestion is, in your sentence, "A gently breeze blows and I reminisce", I would like to suggest that you change the word gently to gentle.
Overall, it is a really good work. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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You did it!!!! You wrote a wonderful poem. It used all the words required. It was well thought out describing a dream. I liked the way you developed it so that I would think you were going to be an entertainer of some kind. Then you surprised me with your fame as MOM. How clever.
Some observations:
You used the word persue. It is actually spelled, pursue.
I felt that in some places, the rhythm wasn't consistent. The rhymes were very good, though.
One suggestion is, in your sentence, "A gently breeze blows and I reminisce", I would like to suggest that you change the word gently to gentle.
Overall, it is a really good work. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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Thank you for correcting my errors. The second one with gentle was a mistake, the first one...well thats me not knowing how to spell..lol. I really appreciate you. Thanks again. :)
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You're welcome.
Comment from Nowae20
"Perhaps a famous author's who I'd be,
I'd write detective novels, poetry.
The publisher's will rave how my books sell,
my family would be very proud of me." This line speaks to me because I really want to be a writer. I might not be as famous, however I am willing to try to reach my dreams.
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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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"Perhaps a famous author's who I'd be,
I'd write detective novels, poetry.
The publisher's will rave how my books sell,
my family would be very proud of me." This line speaks to me because I really want to be a writer. I might not be as famous, however I am willing to try to reach my dreams.
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Comment Written 31-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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You should definitely follow your dreams no matter where they may lead. Anything else would cause regrets. Thank you for reading my poem. :)
Comment from Anne Johnston
You have written a very good poem using all the words that were given. Rhyming is good. I did notice a word error: "I'd right detective novels and poetry." You might want to change "right" to "write."
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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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You have written a very good poem using all the words that were given. Rhyming is good. I did notice a word error: "I'd right detective novels and poetry." You might want to change "right" to "write."
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Comment Written 31-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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Thank you, how silly of me. I appreciate you reading my poem. :)
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You are welcome. If you were using spell check, this would not show up as an error.
