Remembering Yesterday
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Comment from Lyn Peters
Thank you, so much, for continuing to invite us into your family narrative. Your recounting of these events continues to engage. You continue to provide so much detail (which is appreciated). Wishing you good health and continued happy writing.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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Thank you, so much, for continuing to invite us into your family narrative. Your recounting of these events continues to engage. You continue to provide so much detail (which is appreciated). Wishing you good health and continued happy writing.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for being willing to read my family narrative. I'm so glad you are reading it.
Beth
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
These two kids ended up meeting at the rehearsal dinner? Well, who woulda thunk it? That is one crazy story! I suppose that next, you'll tell us that they ended up getting married? I guess we'll see!
You had some huge moving day, Beth. And that was a very touching scene you described -- you and Don, hugging in the old house, just before you moved out of it. That would be a great scene, in the movie of your life.
Here are my suggestions:
...Connie had a room upstairs with it's own bath ...
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...Connie had a room upstairs with its own bath ...
...and Christi and Don's twenty-fifth birthday had been the day before on the 17th of December.
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and Christi and Don's twenty-fifth birthday had been the day before, on the 17th of December.
In the past, I'd always made sure the children had a least three gifts each to unwrap...
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In the past, I'd always made sure the children had at least three gifts each to unwrap...
Christi choose Christmas morning as a time to show her displeasure.
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Christi chose Christmas morning as the time to show her displeasure.
...and she said it was her family's tradition to go around on New Years Eve ...
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...and she said it was her family's tradition to go around on New Year's Eve ...
It occurred to me Jane's hopes to meet Don, and have him meet her daughter was going to happen.
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I remembered that Jane was hoping to meet Don, and having him meet her daughter, which might have happened.
We had the same excuse for why, she wouldn't be able to meet our son.
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We had the same excuse for why she wouldn't be able to meet our son.
Don came home saying he'd met a girl that was in his friend's wedding.
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Don came home saying he'd met a girl who was in his friend's wedding.
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I wanted to ask you whether you're sure you wanted to put your twins' birthday, together with their exact age and the year 1987, in your family story. These days, with identity thieves combing the media, I keep my own special dates private (along with present and former addresses, and specific details of my work history). I cringe when I see parents with tattoos of their kids' birthdays on their arms. However, that being said, if your kids ("kids" who probably have children of their own, by now) are already posting these dates on their social media profiles, it probably doesn't make any difference at all.
Your Connie was quite a naughty teenager! But I was, more or less, in the same category. We went on vacation one time, and I told my Mom that I was sleeping over at a girlfriend's house. I was 15 years old. Meanwhile, a group of us were actually in the woods, camping out! It so happened that the one young man who was with us, had a mother who worked in the same office as my mother. He was a few years older than me, and told his mother about our adventure. Busted!
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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These two kids ended up meeting at the rehearsal dinner? Well, who woulda thunk it? That is one crazy story! I suppose that next, you'll tell us that they ended up getting married? I guess we'll see!
You had some huge moving day, Beth. And that was a very touching scene you described -- you and Don, hugging in the old house, just before you moved out of it. That would be a great scene, in the movie of your life.
Here are my suggestions:
...Connie had a room upstairs with it's own bath ...
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...Connie had a room upstairs with its own bath ...
...and Christi and Don's twenty-fifth birthday had been the day before on the 17th of December.
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and Christi and Don's twenty-fifth birthday had been the day before, on the 17th of December.
In the past, I'd always made sure the children had a least three gifts each to unwrap...
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In the past, I'd always made sure the children had at least three gifts each to unwrap...
Christi choose Christmas morning as a time to show her displeasure.
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Christi chose Christmas morning as the time to show her displeasure.
...and she said it was her family's tradition to go around on New Years Eve ...
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...and she said it was her family's tradition to go around on New Year's Eve ...
It occurred to me Jane's hopes to meet Don, and have him meet her daughter was going to happen.
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I remembered that Jane was hoping to meet Don, and having him meet her daughter, which might have happened.
We had the same excuse for why, she wouldn't be able to meet our son.
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We had the same excuse for why she wouldn't be able to meet our son.
Don came home saying he'd met a girl that was in his friend's wedding.
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Don came home saying he'd met a girl who was in his friend's wedding.
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I wanted to ask you whether you're sure you wanted to put your twins' birthday, together with their exact age and the year 1987, in your family story. These days, with identity thieves combing the media, I keep my own special dates private (along with present and former addresses, and specific details of my work history). I cringe when I see parents with tattoos of their kids' birthdays on their arms. However, that being said, if your kids ("kids" who probably have children of their own, by now) are already posting these dates on their social media profiles, it probably doesn't make any difference at all.
Your Connie was quite a naughty teenager! But I was, more or less, in the same category. We went on vacation one time, and I told my Mom that I was sleeping over at a girlfriend's house. I was 15 years old. Meanwhile, a group of us were actually in the woods, camping out! It so happened that the one young man who was with us, had a mother who worked in the same office as my mother. He was a few years older than me, and told his mother about our adventure. Busted!
Comment Written 10-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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Thank you once again for the review and great help getting the punctuation and spags taken care of. I've got exact dates already in this. I would never put them on Facebook, but I doubt if a thief is going to read this long story to scam me or them. Connie was a handful in teens but I wasn't a trouble free teen either.
Thanks for telling me about your woodland party. LOL
Beth
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You're very welcome, as always.
Yes, I guess most of us gave our parents our share of gray hairs. You're right, I don't think there are many scammers reading autobiographies.
Blessings and love, Mary Kay xoxo
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Beth, this was a very cheerful chapter which I was happy to read. Except for the ominous note about Connie and her duplicity. I do hope that this trait did not continue to cause you grief.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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Dear Beth, this was a very cheerful chapter which I was happy to read. Except for the ominous note about Connie and her duplicity. I do hope that this trait did not continue to cause you grief.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the review. Connie caused problems for a while. She eventually grows up.
Beth
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Dear Beth, I am so glad to know this about Connie, because as you told me Don still is accident prone. I hope he has Lots of chiropractic friends.
Comment from Mistydawn
Your moving day brings back the memory of hubby the kids and me moving to Colorado. I couldn't believe we had so much stuff. It was like it'd multiplied over night, lol. I'm beginning to wonder if Connie isn't rebelling. Hopefully she'll settle down now that you have moved. I guess Don and Kimberly were meant to be. Your chapter is well-written, interesting. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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Your moving day brings back the memory of hubby the kids and me moving to Colorado. I couldn't believe we had so much stuff. It was like it'd multiplied over night, lol. I'm beginning to wonder if Connie isn't rebelling. Hopefully she'll settle down now that you have moved. I guess Don and Kimberly were meant to be. Your chapter is well-written, interesting. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and the nice comments. I hate moving but at least we had a nice house to move into. Connie did rebel in her early teens. She straightens our eventually.
Beth
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Yes, I would say it was meant to be, That is just too much of a coincidence. In 1987 we were packing up and moving from Las Vegas to Ely. I have never forgotten that move! I will have to write about it someday. This was interesting, Beth. Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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Yes, I would say it was meant to be, That is just too much of a coincidence. In 1987 we were packing up and moving from Las Vegas to Ely. I have never forgotten that move! I will have to write about it someday. This was interesting, Beth. Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 10-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much Nancy. Moves are not so much fun but I would love to read about yours.
Beth
Comment from patcelaw
Beth, this is a wonderful thing you are doing for your children. I hope you are planning to put these stories in a book for them I have done much the same and my book called She Did Right-Now-She Does Write will be available around Easter through Amazon, Barnes and Nobel and through the publisher Xulon.
Patricia
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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Beth, this is a wonderful thing you are doing for your children. I hope you are planning to put these stories in a book for them I have done much the same and my book called She Did Right-Now-She Does Write will be available around Easter through Amazon, Barnes and Nobel and through the publisher Xulon.
Patricia
Comment Written 10-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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Thank you Patricia. I really appreciate the review and the wonderful comments. Yes, I plan to print it but I make have to break into more than one book. It is getting to be too long.
Beth
Comment from Bill Schott
There is @ great deal packed into your moving day piece. The loading up yourself is something my wife and I can understand. Whew! Such a ne@t coincidence with the kids meeting at a wedding. Another terrific entry.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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There is @ great deal packed into your moving day piece. The loading up yourself is something my wife and I can understand. Whew! Such a ne@t coincidence with the kids meeting at a wedding. Another terrific entry.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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Thank you Bill. I really appreciate your awesome review with all those stars. Much appreciated.
Beth
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
What an adventure you had with moving. It sounds like a mixture of excitement and disappointment, which is typical for change.
You've done an excellent job of relaying your feelings, and that of your family.
How fun that your son met Kimberly at the wedding! That was definitely Providence.
Thanks for sharing,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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What an adventure you had with moving. It sounds like a mixture of excitement and disappointment, which is typical for change.
You've done an excellent job of relaying your feelings, and that of your family.
How fun that your son met Kimberly at the wedding! That was definitely Providence.
Thanks for sharing,
Rhonda
Comment Written 10-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the review and nice comments. Yes, you can expect some things to go wrong during a move.
Beth
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I look forward to seeing how everyone adjusts to your new setting.
Comment from Pantygynt
You were very brave to contemplate a move so close to Christmas. Of course I have joined in the middle so i don't know how old your children were at the time of the move, perhaps a brief note to let the 'occasionals' know would not come amiss.
I appreciate that this is therapeutic writing for your own benefit as well as your children's and think it is a lovely idea.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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You were very brave to contemplate a move so close to Christmas. Of course I have joined in the middle so i don't know how old your children were at the time of the move, perhaps a brief note to let the 'occasionals' know would not come amiss.
I appreciate that this is therapeutic writing for your own benefit as well as your children's and think it is a lovely idea.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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Thanks for reviewing this and for the comments. I did mention the twins, Don and Christi were twenty-five the day before the move. Too old to be giving us problems, but do they ever stop. LOL Connie the youngest, a teen in rebellion was fourteen. Maybe I'll mention ages in the future for new readers.
Beth
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Just in the note I suggest.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I'm sure you had a wonderful Christmas the following year. I've moved twice in the month of December, and it is hectic. Are you still in that home? it sounds gorgeous. Your master suite was huge!
How amazing was it that Don got to meet Kimberly after all. As you say, it had to be destiny. I really enjoyed this part, Beth. Another lovely chapter in your life. :)) Sandra xx
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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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I'm sure you had a wonderful Christmas the following year. I've moved twice in the month of December, and it is hectic. Are you still in that home? it sounds gorgeous. Your master suite was huge!
How amazing was it that Don got to meet Kimberly after all. As you say, it had to be destiny. I really enjoyed this part, Beth. Another lovely chapter in your life. :)) Sandra xx
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Comment Written 10-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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Thank you Sandra. We had many lovely Christmases in that house. We were there 17years but eventually moved to one with less steps to climb.
Beth
