Not a Bed of Roses
Free Verse - Human Suffering29 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
You cover the full extent of human suffering especially in your last lines:
"crushed mentally,
spiritually, financially and even physically to the edge
of sanity in a chasm of hopelessness and despair"
You met the contest challenge well. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2021
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You cover the full extent of human suffering especially in your last lines:
"crushed mentally,
spiritually, financially and even physically to the edge
of sanity in a chasm of hopelessness and despair"
You met the contest challenge well. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2021
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Thanks for the good wishes.
Comment from QC Poet
This is so very true in All Humanity, it transends nationalities, races, temperaments, an equalizing fact of Living. The degree to which each of us can get back up is relative to us as individuals. Excellent poetry writing. Thanks for Sharing this poem offering.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2021
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This is so very true in All Humanity, it transends nationalities, races, temperaments, an equalizing fact of Living. The degree to which each of us can get back up is relative to us as individuals. Excellent poetry writing. Thanks for Sharing this poem offering.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2021
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QCPoet, Yes the human condition wrought with reality can be more daunting.
Comment from Wendy G
A very well written poem which certainly is on the theme of human suffering covering all its various aspects. It would be very easy to become despondent and negative if this was the full picture of one's life. Well done in its writing and presentation.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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A very well written poem which certainly is on the theme of human suffering covering all its various aspects. It would be very easy to become despondent and negative if this was the full picture of one's life. Well done in its writing and presentation.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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Wendy, thank you 🙏
Comment from MissMerri
Somehow, you have managed to create a mood of sorrow and deep despair with your words. I think you must be talented to do that as convincingly as you have, and I commend you. Your poem certainly fits the prompt requirements. I'm not sure about this verse:
" The ego can fight fifteen rounds,
every waking hour or minute and sadly
for some, second upon second
when facing deep emotional trauma."
Did you leave out a word? The thought seems to be incomplete, unless I'm totally reading it wrong. Maybe I just don't know what you meant to say.
Anyway, you should do well in the contest if suffering is the desired theme. I'm pretty sad now.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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Somehow, you have managed to create a mood of sorrow and deep despair with your words. I think you must be talented to do that as convincingly as you have, and I commend you. Your poem certainly fits the prompt requirements. I'm not sure about this verse:
" The ego can fight fifteen rounds,
every waking hour or minute and sadly
for some, second upon second
when facing deep emotional trauma."
Did you leave out a word? The thought seems to be incomplete, unless I'm totally reading it wrong. Maybe I just don't know what you meant to say.
Anyway, you should do well in the contest if suffering is the desired theme. I'm pretty sad now.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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MM I agree the stanza needed broken up. Thank you,🙏🙏
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Great entry for the Free-style poem: human suffering writing prompt contest. It made think of buddhism. It's an excellent and informative poem. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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Great entry for the Free-style poem: human suffering writing prompt contest. It made think of buddhism. It's an excellent and informative poem. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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I appreciate the validation.
Comment from 4theloveoftrees
This is a great offering for the human suffering contest. How true, life is full of ups and downs, pain and joy. I enjoyed the reference to our cups not always overflowing with milk and honey--great line! Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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This is a great offering for the human suffering contest. How true, life is full of ups and downs, pain and joy. I enjoyed the reference to our cups not always overflowing with milk and honey--great line! Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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Thanks for the time you took to read and comment on this poem 🙏
Comment from papa55mike
It is amazing the pain we as humans can inflict on others with no guilt or remorse at all. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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It is amazing the pain we as humans can inflict on others with no guilt or remorse at all. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 25-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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Mike, 🙏🙏🙏🙏
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
Sometimes we feel the weight of human suffering of loneliness and despair. But we have to put up with these limiting factors, have trust and faith in Him and move on in life. After all life is for living and loving. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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Sometimes we feel the weight of human suffering of loneliness and despair. But we have to put up with these limiting factors, have trust and faith in Him and move on in life. After all life is for living and loving. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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Thank you, Yes it is!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a deeply moving and melancholy write and our emotions can indeed make us suffer if we don't take some control of them. Life has its sad moments but there are also many joys that often go unnoticed when concentrating on the sorrow. A poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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This is a deeply moving and melancholy write and our emotions can indeed make us suffer if we don't take some control of them. Life has its sad moments but there are also many joys that often go unnoticed when concentrating on the sorrow. A poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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Thank you, enjoy the day!
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Heartfelt sentiments--you have much to say; I think these words would flow more smoothly if rendered in prose than free verse.
fears, doubts, regrets ... that [has=>HAVE] the potential to cause suffering
"I should [of=>HAVE], I could [of=>HAVE], I would [of=>HAVE] ____."
The penultimate (means second to last--is that what you intend) onslaught
the worst in human sufferings,
is=>ARE the unexpected, heart-wrenching losses.
co-workers whose [life is=>LIVES ARE] taken far sooner than
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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Heartfelt sentiments--you have much to say; I think these words would flow more smoothly if rendered in prose than free verse.
fears, doubts, regrets ... that [has=>HAVE] the potential to cause suffering
"I should [of=>HAVE], I could [of=>HAVE], I would [of=>HAVE] ____."
The penultimate (means second to last--is that what you intend) onslaught
the worst in human sufferings,
is=>ARE the unexpected, heart-wrenching losses.
co-workers whose [life is=>LIVES ARE] taken far sooner than
Comment Written 24-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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In our part of the country it is should of...
