Deer Herd
20 words poem12 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Gyspy,
I like the use of the colors of Autumn as the font colors for that is deer season. I agree with you about hunting. In general I don't like the idea. I somewhat accept it if it is just for food and not for just sport and display.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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Gyspy,
I like the use of the colors of Autumn as the font colors for that is deer season. I agree with you about hunting. In general I don't like the idea. I somewhat accept it if it is just for food and not for just sport and display.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. Joan.
Gypsy hugs
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You are most kindly welcome, Gypsy.
Joan
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Gypsy--congrats on your prize for this stunner--vividly evocative--I can imagine the autumn scene and the hunter taking aim at the herd. Glad I caught up to this. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 01-May-2021
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Gypsy--congrats on your prize for this stunner--vividly evocative--I can imagine the autumn scene and the hunter taking aim at the herd. Glad I caught up to this. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 30-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-May-2021
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Thank you very much, Liz. I appreciate your review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
Comment from DonandVicki
Your poem took me back untold years when my mother took me to the preview of "Bambi" I was so heart broken when the hunters killed Bambi's mother that I had nightmares for years of losing my mother.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Your poem took me back untold years when my mother took me to the preview of "Bambi" I was so heart broken when the hunters killed Bambi's mother that I had nightmares for years of losing my mother.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read this poem and the review.
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Comment from Goodadvicechan
This is a poem of misery. The description of the forest is miserable like: "amber and rust leaves commingle with dying green..." Future is unpredictable... Who knows what will be killed at hunting.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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This is a poem of misery. The description of the forest is miserable like: "amber and rust leaves commingle with dying green..." Future is unpredictable... Who knows what will be killed at hunting.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you. I appreciate your review and time.
Gypsy
Comment from Gloria ....
Yes this is full of imagery, both visual and aural. You have most adeptly drawn your readers right into this scene, and those vegetarians among us, hope the deer herd overheard the hunter and head for the hills.
Beautiful presentation too. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Yes this is full of imagery, both visual and aural. You have most adeptly drawn your readers right into this scene, and those vegetarians among us, hope the deer herd overheard the hunter and head for the hills.
Beautiful presentation too. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much, Gloria. It's always great to hear from you. Excellent review.
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Comment from kahpot
"deer herd" intriguing, I know against predators deer rely on speed and their "hearing" I will have to ponder this some more, I love works that make one think, love the art work very well written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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"deer herd" intriguing, I know against predators deer rely on speed and their "hearing" I will have to ponder this some more, I love works that make one think, love the art work very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy--I HATE hunting; hunting used to be a necessity if you wanted to eat, but now days we have all-nigh convenience stores so you can both fuel up and fuel up!
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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Another fine poem, Gypsy--I HATE hunting; hunting used to be a necessity if you wanted to eat, but now days we have all-nigh convenience stores so you can both fuel up and fuel up!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from robyn corum
M,
Wow. This presentation is GORGEOUS. You and Yvette amaze me how y'all can get your colors and fonts to all stand to attention and behave like that. I get far too frustrated and just give up looonnng before I can make things look so pretty. *smile* But you sure do make it look worth the effort. I just think it's a talent some of us have or don't have. (me = don't. you and Yvette = have.)
I really liked the message of this poem, too. It was quite clever what you did in here. Some really subtle but daring and clever messages in there, too.
amber and rust leaves
commingle with dying green
where hunter holds his breath
aiming at his innocent victims
deer herd
What IF those variously aged leaves were metaphors for members of that deer herd. Some green (young), some amber (middle-aged), and some rust (elderly). Standing right in the middle of all those leaves, that obtuse hunter doesn't see that those leaves he's in can kinda represent those deer he's hunting. Oh, my -- and sooooo many other things.
This is exceptional, M. Marvelous. Well worth a six. Thanks!
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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M,
Wow. This presentation is GORGEOUS. You and Yvette amaze me how y'all can get your colors and fonts to all stand to attention and behave like that. I get far too frustrated and just give up looonnng before I can make things look so pretty. *smile* But you sure do make it look worth the effort. I just think it's a talent some of us have or don't have. (me = don't. you and Yvette = have.)
I really liked the message of this poem, too. It was quite clever what you did in here. Some really subtle but daring and clever messages in there, too.
amber and rust leaves
commingle with dying green
where hunter holds his breath
aiming at his innocent victims
deer herd
What IF those variously aged leaves were metaphors for members of that deer herd. Some green (young), some amber (middle-aged), and some rust (elderly). Standing right in the middle of all those leaves, that obtuse hunter doesn't see that those leaves he's in can kinda represent those deer he's hunting. Oh, my -- and sooooo many other things.
This is exceptional, M. Marvelous. Well worth a six. Thanks!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much, Robyn. I sure appreciate the exceptional review and six stars. I'm having fun with this one different people see different things. :)
Comment from lyenochka
I guess that the last line is a pun? The deer "heard" ?
I love how you showed that it is the autumn time with the blending of amber and rust leaves with the 'dying green' which foreshadows death.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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I guess that the last line is a pun? The deer "heard" ?
I love how you showed that it is the autumn time with the blending of amber and rust leaves with the 'dying green' which foreshadows death.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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You are the second one to putting the 'herd and heard' together. I didn't do it consciously. I write so many it happens without trying... LoL
Thank you very much, Helen!
Comment from royowen
A great entry in this 20 word contest Gypsy, never heard of "commingle" before, to blend or mix with, a great word and a super entry in this contest, well done, great job, good luck, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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A great entry in this 20 word contest Gypsy, never heard of "commingle" before, to blend or mix with, a great word and a super entry in this contest, well done, great job, good luck, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
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