Driving Miss Vivian
Her new car and Vivian on full display31 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a fun write and your description of Eddie is vivid and he sounds like quite a character with his buck teeth and horse appearance, much fun Mary, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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This is a fun write and your description of Eddie is vivid and he sounds like quite a character with his buck teeth and horse appearance, much fun Mary, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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Thank you Dolly for your kind review. It is appreciated.
Regards,
Mary
Comment from palmart
Nice poem that caress the souls of your readers. Using a car and a character you show the princess side of Vivian and the human side of her chauffeur, in opposite ends and showing the humanity as two sides of the same coin. Picture was a great choice!!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Nice poem that caress the souls of your readers. Using a car and a character you show the princess side of Vivian and the human side of her chauffeur, in opposite ends and showing the humanity as two sides of the same coin. Picture was a great choice!!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Thank you I appreciate your review and kind comments.
Take care and regards,
Mary
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You`re very welcome, Mary!!
Have a Blessed time!!
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You`re very welcome, Mary! Thanks for your nice message! Have a blessed time!
Comment from Leann DS
Your two characters seem like... Well... Characters! :-) This was a light and fun read, which I desperately needed after reading 25,000 love poems. I did not notice any typos. :-) Thank you for sharing this. Hugs and blessings to you.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Your two characters seem like... Well... Characters! :-) This was a light and fun read, which I desperately needed after reading 25,000 love poems. I did not notice any typos. :-) Thank you for sharing this. Hugs and blessings to you.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Thank you, I truly appreciate your kind words and review.
Blessings and stay well.
Regards,
Mary
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Both your description and character development are excellent, and bring Vivian and Eddie leaping off the page. However, I feel that the action is a little lame, and this means the conclusion is flawed. Using description for that part of the flash doesn't work for me I'm afraid.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Both your description and character development are excellent, and bring Vivian and Eddie leaping off the page. However, I feel that the action is a little lame, and this means the conclusion is flawed. Using description for that part of the flash doesn't work for me I'm afraid.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your review and honesty. It is appreciated.
Comment from royowen
He may have been here "chauffa" but she was a gracious lady, who quite obviously thought him a fitting driver for her beloved Cadillac Fleetwood sedan, beautifully written Mary, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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He may have been here "chauffa" but she was a gracious lady, who quite obviously thought him a fitting driver for her beloved Cadillac Fleetwood sedan, beautifully written Mary, blessings Roy
Comment Written 07-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Thank you Roy, I appreciate your review and comments.
Regards and blessing to you.
Mary
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Most welcome
Comment from equestrik
I think I would enjoy vivian as well as Eddie. So often, gflamboyant characters are ridiculd and gossiped about, even feared. All the best to you in your writing.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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I think I would enjoy vivian as well as Eddie. So often, gflamboyant characters are ridiculd and gossiped about, even feared. All the best to you in your writing.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Thank you I appreciate your review and comments.
Regards,
Mary
Comment from robyn corum
Mary,
My, I imagine those two made quite a pair, didn't they? But I'm glad they had befriended each other and were able to help each other out - though I'm not sure what Eddie got out of it, yet. *smile*
A couple of notes for you -- remember to try not to use the same words repeatedly...
1.) Eddie was, as she put it, was her "chaufa."
--> 'was' x2
2.) He was tall and thin with matted black hair. A long thin face
--> 'thin' x2
Thanks so much!
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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Mary,
My, I imagine those two made quite a pair, didn't they? But I'm glad they had befriended each other and were able to help each other out - though I'm not sure what Eddie got out of it, yet. *smile*
A couple of notes for you -- remember to try not to use the same words repeatedly...
1.) Eddie was, as she put it, was her "chaufa."
--> 'was' x2
2.) He was tall and thin with matted black hair. A long thin face
--> 'thin' x2
Thanks so much!
Comment Written 06-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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Thank you for the review and catches.i corrected on your advise.
Regards
Mary
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Mary:
I was glad to read your author's notes about Vivian because I could not decide if she was eccentric, a bit daffy, or one of Ned's Dancing Pigs all dressed up for a night on the town! Good luck in the contest. I hope to
read more about Vivian at a later date.
Rdfrdmom2
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2021
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Mary:
I was glad to read your author's notes about Vivian because I could not decide if she was eccentric, a bit daffy, or one of Ned's Dancing Pigs all dressed up for a night on the town! Good luck in the contest. I hope to
read more about Vivian at a later date.
Rdfrdmom2
Comment Written 05-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your kind thoughts and review.
Earlier I wrote that she
Would not drink water
because it made her gag. Her beverage of choice was beer!
Regards
Mary
Comment from RetroStarfish
What a colourful pair. This is a nifty little character drawing of the two of them. I especially like the way you describe Eddie's laugh.
One small thing:
Eddie was as she put it was her "chaufa." [suggest: Eddie was, as she put it, her "chaufa." ]
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2021
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What a colourful pair. This is a nifty little character drawing of the two of them. I especially like the way you describe Eddie's laugh.
One small thing:
Eddie was as she put it was her "chaufa." [suggest: Eddie was, as she put it, her "chaufa." ]
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2021
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Thank you for the review and kind comments.
Also, for the correction. It is much appreciated.
Regards,
Mary
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well, both of them seemed to enjoy their place in society. Vivian was high falutin' so she thought, and Eddie liked showing off in the big car. But both of them had their place and each understood it. I enjoyed your contest entry. Your lines read well. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Well, both of them seemed to enjoy their place in society. Vivian was high falutin' so she thought, and Eddie liked showing off in the big car. But both of them had their place and each understood it. I enjoyed your contest entry. Your lines read well. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 04-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Thank you Jan, I appreciate your kind words and review.
Take care,
Mary
