Plowing the Field
a tribute to all farmers30 total reviews
Comment from Pen-ZIE
I think this is an okay poem, but the rhymin' sort of sounds forced to me; rhymes doesn't always make a beautiful poem; you gotta go with your voice sometimes and do what it says. So, work on your rhyme patterns and you never know, you might have a master piece here. ð???
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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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I think this is an okay poem, but the rhymin' sort of sounds forced to me; rhymes doesn't always make a beautiful poem; you gotta go with your voice sometimes and do what it says. So, work on your rhyme patterns and you never know, you might have a master piece here. ð???
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Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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A Shakespearian sonnet has a very prescribed rhyme pattern, Pen-ZIE. Thank you for sharing my poem. Rod
Comment from royowen
Well done with your sonnet entry, if you're not used to writing them I would understand the use of more or less in the syllable count, your rhyming's fine. The use of certain words I judge as incorrect, incisions are normally applied to surgical cuts to human skin, and freckles are light brown patches on the skin. I would change them and recheck your syllable count. But good effort, word power is important in poetry, but can be a mistake if wrongly used. Good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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Well done with your sonnet entry, if you're not used to writing them I would understand the use of more or less in the syllable count, your rhyming's fine. The use of certain words I judge as incorrect, incisions are normally applied to surgical cuts to human skin, and freckles are light brown patches on the skin. I would change them and recheck your syllable count. But good effort, word power is important in poetry, but can be a mistake if wrongly used. Good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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Hi, Roy. I chose to write a SHAKESPEARIAN sonnet which requires iambic pentameter. As far as my word choice, I took poetic license in using "incisions" and "freckles" as I did. Thank you for sharing my poem and your comments. Rod
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Well done
Comment from jenintorre
I really enjoyed reading your poem about plowing. I also found it very informative. Very well chosen artwork and rhyme. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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I really enjoyed reading your poem about plowing. I also found it very informative. Very well chosen artwork and rhyme. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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I am delighted you found my sonnet both enjoyable and informative, Jen. Many thanks for sharing and your best wishes. Rod
Comment from Susan Larson
I love it when someone can see and write poetry, especially a sonnet, about what most would see as a mundane task. This almost makes me want to go out and plow a field just to experience carving incisions into that terrain. And what a touching tribute to farmers!
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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I love it when someone can see and write poetry, especially a sonnet, about what most would see as a mundane task. This almost makes me want to go out and plow a field just to experience carving incisions into that terrain. And what a touching tribute to farmers!
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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I truly enjoyed writing this poem, Susan, but I have no yen to actually go out in the fields and plow. Thank you so much for your great response to my sonnet and that super rating. Rod
Comment from Patty Cicero
"Tomorrow I shall freckle furrows made
with hand-dropped seeds I saved from last year's crop.
Success depends on placement, how they're laid.
In strings of mounds they'll slumber when I stop."
*Smartly written. If this is for a contest, I hope you win !
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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"Tomorrow I shall freckle furrows made
with hand-dropped seeds I saved from last year's crop.
Success depends on placement, how they're laid.
In strings of mounds they'll slumber when I stop."
*Smartly written. If this is for a contest, I hope you win !
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Patty, you have made my day with your encouraging remarks about my sonnet. Many thanks!
Comment from Cathy M
What a great sonnet about spring planting. I love the picture you decided to use with it. The horses white faces fit perfectly. I love the following line because it shows preparedness in the plantings (even thought the tense is past instead of future):
Tomorrow I shall freckle furrows made
with hand-dropped seeds I saved from last year's crop.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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What a great sonnet about spring planting. I love the picture you decided to use with it. The horses white faces fit perfectly. I love the following line because it shows preparedness in the plantings (even thought the tense is past instead of future):
Tomorrow I shall freckle furrows made
with hand-dropped seeds I saved from last year's crop.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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I am truly delighted by your response to my sonnet, Cathy. Thank you for pointing out the line you love.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello anon, a well written sonnet, true to form with good abab rhyme throughout. Iambic pentameter is good, except for a tiny typo in first line of your third stanza - too many syllables (12) - but the content of the poem I like. Unusual, and very interesting. Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Hello anon, a well written sonnet, true to form with good abab rhyme throughout. Iambic pentameter is good, except for a tiny typo in first line of your third stanza - too many syllables (12) - but the content of the poem I like. Unusual, and very interesting. Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Hello, Dorothy. Thank you so much for sharing my sonnet and your close reading. I?m feeling sheepish. Indeed that line has too many syllables. I shall correct.
Comment from nancyjam
This is a wonderful Sonnet in tribute to farmers. I loved reading each well crafted line. Each descriptive line gives the reader a sense of what it's like to plow the fields.
Strong meter throughout and get rhyming.
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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This is a wonderful Sonnet in tribute to farmers. I loved reading each well crafted line. Each descriptive line gives the reader a sense of what it's like to plow the fields.
Strong meter throughout and get rhyming.
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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I am delighted you enjoyed my sonnet, Nancy. Thank you for your kind praise.
Comment from Leann DS
That was quite a unique topic for a sonnet! As someone who grew up in a rural area, I can relate to the joy that planting, tending, and harvesting crops can bring. Your poem was a fun and different treat. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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That was quite a unique topic for a sonnet! As someone who grew up in a rural area, I can relate to the joy that planting, tending, and harvesting crops can bring. Your poem was a fun and different treat. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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Leann, it gives me much pleasure to know you can relate to my poem and enjoyed it. Many thanks for your review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Plowing the Field
Great entry for the Write A Sonnet writing prompt contest. We don't give farmers enough thanks. I appreciate that you honey them here.
Your poem could improve the flow. The structure makes sense. It draws on emotions.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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Plowing the Field
Great entry for the Write A Sonnet writing prompt contest. We don't give farmers enough thanks. I appreciate that you honey them here.
Your poem could improve the flow. The structure makes sense. It draws on emotions.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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It was my pleasure to honor these hard-working farmers who put food on our tables. Thank you, Gypsy, for your review and kind praise.
