Too Shy
A Shakespearian sonnet19 total reviews
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
I love the artwork it is perfect for your poem I could feel the emotion in your every word. This has happen to so many people they lose tire lovers because they were shy to claim
That you for sharing
Cookie
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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I love the artwork it is perfect for your poem I could feel the emotion in your every word. This has happen to so many people they lose tire lovers because they were shy to claim
That you for sharing
Cookie
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much🙏
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Your very welcome keep up the good work
Cookie
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A love that was never meant to be here. I enjoyed the sentiment, he who hesitates is lost. Lines 6 and 14 have an uneven metre. Good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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A love that was never meant to be here. I enjoyed the sentiment, he who hesitates is lost. Lines 6 and 14 have an uneven metre. Good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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Perhaps s/b. You have torn my big heart apart my dear...? So close
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are engaging, clear and creative. The poem flows and
connects well. I liked the title the author gave this poem. It goes well
with these words. The artwork is quaint and compliments these words.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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The author's words are engaging, clear and creative. The poem flows and
connects well. I liked the title the author gave this poem. It goes well
with these words. The artwork is quaint and compliments these words.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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Thank you a work in progress have a great week.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
There are some very positive points to this sonnet. Particularly fine are the image, and lines such as
> in lines from deep inside my heart this morn,
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> The fool am I! A love, at last, I lost. (exceptional)
unfortunately I think the iambic metre begins to waver in line 5, and is virtually absent from
> my heart bursts with awe of her sleek allure,
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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There are some very positive points to this sonnet. Particularly fine are the image, and lines such as
> in lines from deep inside my heart this morn,
or
> The fool am I! A love, at last, I lost. (exceptional)
unfortunately I think the iambic metre begins to waver in line 5, and is virtually absent from
> my heart bursts with awe of her sleek allure,
Comment Written 07-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Thanks. I will revisit
Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards
Reminds me of "Pretty Woman" by Roy Orbison, but she didn't come back. Loved your choice of descriptive wordings. Your sonnet followed the rules set out for rhyming.!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Reminds me of "Pretty Woman" by Roy Orbison, but she didn't come back. Loved your choice of descriptive wordings. Your sonnet followed the rules set out for rhyming.!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Dave thanks
Comment from royowen
A nicely written sonnet, that has a few problems with smoothness of meter, but articulate and and a great attendance to the pentameter and ababcdcdefefgg rhyming, and a good entry in this sonnet contest, well done, blessings Roy
Suggestion : Instead of a second "sleek" use:- such Grace, such charm.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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A nicely written sonnet, that has a few problems with smoothness of meter, but articulate and and a great attendance to the pentameter and ababcdcdefefgg rhyming, and a good entry in this sonnet contest, well done, blessings Roy
Suggestion : Instead of a second "sleek" use:- such Grace, such charm.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Thank you Roy,
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My pleasure
Comment from Leann DS
I love the symbolism and visual imagery you used for your sonnet. The meter was good and the Rimes worked very well to help the poem flow along. I wish somebody would write a love poem like that to me. :-) Hugs and blessings to you.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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I love the symbolism and visual imagery you used for your sonnet. The meter was good and the Rimes worked very well to help the poem flow along. I wish somebody would write a love poem like that to me. :-) Hugs and blessings to you.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Thank you Leann
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This Shakespearean Sonnet writing contest entry speaks how you have experienced to have your love to her who you think took your heart, you found her too shy and left you; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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This Shakespearean Sonnet writing contest entry speaks how you have experienced to have your love to her who you think took your heart, you found her too shy and left you; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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Comment Written 07-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Boogienights
This is a beautiful sonnet, speaking of an unrequited love. It can hurt so much, you have expressed that so eloquently in your poem. Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest. :)
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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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This is a beautiful sonnet, speaking of an unrequited love. It can hurt so much, you have expressed that so eloquently in your poem. Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest. :)
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Comment Written 07-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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I am grateful thank you.
