Outhouse
5/7/5 poem for contest21 total reviews
Comment from zanya
Yes - a location, no doubt that is filled with memories and moments in times past- a very atmospheric rendering achieved here and with such few words-lovely pic
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Yes - a location, no doubt that is filled with memories and moments in times past- a very atmospheric rendering achieved here and with such few words-lovely pic
Comment Written 17-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written 5-7-5 poem. I love it. Awesome photo to go with your poem as well. I love your wording. Full moon shines over grandfathers rustic outhouse. Chill goes up my shirt. I remember seeing old out houses around. Great inspiration for painting also. :)
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This is a nicely written 5-7-5 poem. I love it. Awesome photo to go with your poem as well. I love your wording. Full moon shines over grandfathers rustic outhouse. Chill goes up my shirt. I remember seeing old out houses around. Great inspiration for painting also. :)
Comment Written 17-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for your exceptional review, six stars, and kind words.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made effective use of your seventeen syllables. When I was a child, we lived in a REALLY rural area where outhouses were common. How well I remember! That was an element of the "good old days" I do NOT miss. LOL!
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You have made effective use of your seventeen syllables. When I was a child, we lived in a REALLY rural area where outhouses were common. How well I remember! That was an element of the "good old days" I do NOT miss. LOL!
Comment Written 17-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from Boogienights
I can well imagine! Thank goodness for indoor plumbing where available, outhouses are not comfortable. I know, I've used them a few times. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest. :)
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I can well imagine! Thank goodness for indoor plumbing where available, outhouses are not comfortable. I know, I've used them a few times. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 17-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, or the (dunnie) as the Aussies call it, you made me smile with this humorous 5-7-5 and you captures the chilling outside convenience perfectly, love Dolly x
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Ha ha ha, or the (dunnie) as the Aussies call it, you made me smile with this humorous 5-7-5 and you captures the chilling outside convenience perfectly, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Outhouse', is short succinct and delightfully descriptive. I'm still smiling while I write this review. I would dearly love to see an old 'outhouse' again!! Good luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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'Outhouse', is short succinct and delightfully descriptive. I'm still smiling while I write this review. I would dearly love to see an old 'outhouse' again!! Good luck with the contest!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Dear Anon you're very welcome :)))
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Mystery Writer!
"Chills!" You've got that right!
Wonderful imagery.
I wrote a poem - last spring - after I discovered that farmers in the midwest of America - during the 1800s grew lilacs around their outhouses. When the ground became too much to bear, the outhouses were moved, but the lilacs bloomed for years in the highly fertilized soil. Now, if you drive through the midwest, and note old homesteads with lilacs in a row, you'll know why! :)
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Hello Mystery Writer!
"Chills!" You've got that right!
Wonderful imagery.
I wrote a poem - last spring - after I discovered that farmers in the midwest of America - during the 1800s grew lilacs around their outhouses. When the ground became too much to bear, the outhouses were moved, but the lilacs bloomed for years in the highly fertilized soil. Now, if you drive through the midwest, and note old homesteads with lilacs in a row, you'll know why! :)
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 16-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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How interesting...I would like to see an old fashione outhose with lilacs. :)
Thank you very much, Diane, for your review and kind words.
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing this haiku contest entry. I have counted your syllables and there are indeed 5-7-5, which should serve you well in this contest. Your design layout reminds me of a departed friend who once participated in these. Good luck with your contest entry!
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Thank you for sharing this haiku contest entry. I have counted your syllables and there are indeed 5-7-5, which should serve you well in this contest. Your design layout reminds me of a departed friend who once participated in these. Good luck with your contest entry!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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You're welcome!
Comment from Wendy G
Great image and excellent haiku. This brings back childhood memories for many. The general sense of fear of a child in the middle of the night is not stated but suggested in the last line. Well done.
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Great image and excellent haiku. This brings back childhood memories for many. The general sense of fear of a child in the middle of the night is not stated but suggested in the last line. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well for a poem about an outhouse, you did a great job. I could see/feel everything your wrote. Great job with the style, Your satori is perfect for traipsing out in the middle of the night to the outhouse. But I know the satori is an observation based on the first two lines. It fits nicely with them. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Well for a poem about an outhouse, you did a great job. I could see/feel everything your wrote. Great job with the style, Your satori is perfect for traipsing out in the middle of the night to the outhouse. But I know the satori is an observation based on the first two lines. It fits nicely with them. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
