The Double
Crazy_Precious17 total reviews
Comment from equestrik
This is a good write for the 'A Deep Secret' contest. It lays the foundation for a thought provoking concept. Good cretivity and well written, all the best to you.
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This is a good write for the 'A Deep Secret' contest. It lays the foundation for a thought provoking concept. Good cretivity and well written, all the best to you.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2021
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, The Double, is a little hard to comprehend, but, like the man said, if you buy the bit you enjoy the show. Sounds like a very original story.
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This story, The Double, is a little hard to comprehend, but, like the man said, if you buy the bit you enjoy the show. Sounds like a very original story.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2021
Comment from Wendy G
This is interesting and different, a very imaginative story that you have written. I don't think the bad language adds value, and it seems a bit inappropriate for little ones. Otherwise well done.
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This is interesting and different, a very imaginative story that you have written. I don't think the bad language adds value, and it seems a bit inappropriate for little ones. Otherwise well done.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2021
Comment from Karen Estep
Very creative writing! I have identical twin sisters and I can tell you I understand these personalities! Enjoyed your graphic also. Good luck in the contest!
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Very creative writing! I have identical twin sisters and I can tell you I understand these personalities! Enjoyed your graphic also. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2021
Comment from sunnilicious
Good artwork choice. You are very animated. Good storytelling. I never truly understood twins, but was raised with quite a few pairs. They have their own world. Nice work :)
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Good artwork choice. You are very animated. Good storytelling. I never truly understood twins, but was raised with quite a few pairs. They have their own world. Nice work :)
Comment Written 05-Apr-2021
Comment from Lori Fritz
It didn't follow the directions. The subject matter isn't a deep secret. Someone with psychological conditions isn't a deep secret, because others are readily able to know it. Needs work on punctuation and grammer. Reads at about an 8th grade reading level, which is great if thats what your intended audience is. Also precious might be I think a copyright violation issue. Wasnt there a fictional person called precious with a book and movie?
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It didn't follow the directions. The subject matter isn't a deep secret. Someone with psychological conditions isn't a deep secret, because others are readily able to know it. Needs work on punctuation and grammer. Reads at about an 8th grade reading level, which is great if thats what your intended audience is. Also precious might be I think a copyright violation issue. Wasnt there a fictional person called precious with a book and movie?
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Comment Written 05-Apr-2021
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
You have written an extremely imaginative deep secret that is revealed as your story progresses. I enjoyed reading this very much. Keep on with your writing.
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You have written an extremely imaginative deep secret that is revealed as your story progresses. I enjoyed reading this very much. Keep on with your writing.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is certainly a different take on a deep theme! Very well done. I especially like that the mother has known all along, as only a mother could. Good luck in the contest.
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This is certainly a different take on a deep theme! Very well done. I especially like that the mother has known all along, as only a mother could. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was lovely. I've just finished reading a book where there were three people all with different personalities all living in the same body. It was a lovely story, too. So when I was reading yours, I thought, you have a winner here. Mums do know when something is different, so it made sense that she knew before they'd told her. Well done, and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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That was lovely. I've just finished reading a book where there were three people all with different personalities all living in the same body. It was a lovely story, too. So when I was reading yours, I thought, you have a winner here. Mums do know when something is different, so it made sense that she knew before they'd told her. Well done, and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for your review my favorite novel author:) I hope the fan"_s will enjoy this story too and get it a vote of credibility.
Comment from bhogg
Well, an interesting post. As a young boy, I heard a sermon about the devil. Perhaps more simple than your story, but when my bad boy came out, I could always say, "The devil made me do it!"
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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Well, an interesting post. As a young boy, I heard a sermon about the devil. Perhaps more simple than your story, but when my bad boy came out, I could always say, "The devil made me do it!"
Comment Written 03-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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You review is so funny and I don't want to met that bad boy:)
