Paradise Lost
Lovely Eden was...19 total reviews
Comment from Jo Elle
The well-known story is beautifully told here, in excellent rhyme. I liked the description of the garden especially, with its colourful imagery.
The best to you in the contest :)
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2021
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The well-known story is beautifully told here, in excellent rhyme. I liked the description of the garden especially, with its colourful imagery.
The best to you in the contest :)
Comment Written 13-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for this great review, it's very appreciated. :)
Comment from Patty Palmer
A wonderful poem, beautifully written, describing the Garden of
Eden. The rhythm and rhyme are perfect. This is easily read and very descriptive. I can see Eden from here, I think. Good luck with the contest~
You have my vote~~
Patty
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2021
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A wonderful poem, beautifully written, describing the Garden of
Eden. The rhythm and rhyme are perfect. This is easily read and very descriptive. I can see Eden from here, I think. Good luck with the contest~
You have my vote~~
Patty
Comment Written 13-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2021
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Thank you for this exceptional rating and your vote....I'm thrilled. :)
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You're very welcome!
Patty
Comment from LJbutterfly
This poem/story is creative, rhythmic, and delightful to read. It flowed easily from beginning to end, telling the story of creation and the Garden of Eden. The story culminated in a perfect moral, "Trust in God to see you through, He's there to keep you safe that's true." Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2021
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This poem/story is creative, rhythmic, and delightful to read. It flowed easily from beginning to end, telling the story of creation and the Garden of Eden. The story culminated in a perfect moral, "Trust in God to see you through, He's there to keep you safe that's true." Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2021
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Thank you for this nice review, I'm so glad you took the time to read my poem. :)
Comment from Dumadog aka Ricah
I certainly respect a poet who uses rhyme and meter to express a vision of a subject familiar to almost everyone's imagination. In fact I respect any poet who uses rhyme and meter in poetry (as I do) since such work is considered restrictive and passé in current pseudointellectual literary circles. I would suggest, however, that in doing so you avoid forced rhymes (such as "looked" and "brooks") and not use, where possible, inevitable rhyming words like "be" and "free." The rhyme and meter in, "The Devil in a serpent's guise, beguiled Eve with all his lies," is promising.
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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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I certainly respect a poet who uses rhyme and meter to express a vision of a subject familiar to almost everyone's imagination. In fact I respect any poet who uses rhyme and meter in poetry (as I do) since such work is considered restrictive and passé in current pseudointellectual literary circles. I would suggest, however, that in doing so you avoid forced rhymes (such as "looked" and "brooks") and not use, where possible, inevitable rhyming words like "be" and "free." The rhyme and meter in, "The Devil in a serpent's guise, beguiled Eve with all his lies," is promising.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thanks.
Comment from rindy ryan
You have crafted a well thought out story in your poem. Your use of rhyme helps to drive the words. And you allowed the story to turn with the conflict. I do think you might have allowed it to do even darker at the turn. But very good job! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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You have crafted a well thought out story in your poem. Your use of rhyme helps to drive the words. And you allowed the story to turn with the conflict. I do think you might have allowed it to do even darker at the turn. But very good job! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you for this great review, I really appreciate it. :)
Comment from equestrik
This is a lovely presentation for the garden of Eden poetry contest. The picture is beautiful and your writing reflects lovely rhythm and ease. All the best to you.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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This is a lovely presentation for the garden of Eden poetry contest. The picture is beautiful and your writing reflects lovely rhythm and ease. All the best to you.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you for this terrific review, it's very appreciated. :)
Comment from Earthspoet
This had a really nice feel
and like a picture you drew it well.but in parts I felt it lost its magic and sparkle an over kill in parts I felt that I real master piece was within the over kill
God Luck in our contest
Earthspoet
12/04/21
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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This had a really nice feel
and like a picture you drew it well.but in parts I felt it lost its magic and sparkle an over kill in parts I felt that I real master piece was within the over kill
God Luck in our contest
Earthspoet
12/04/21
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you for taking time to read and review my poem.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this was an excellent story disguised as a poem. And a well written poem at that! The rhyme was natural. This flowed beautifully and was easy to read. Great job.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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I thought this was an excellent story disguised as a poem. And a well written poem at that! The rhyme was natural. This flowed beautifully and was easy to read. Great job.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you for this great review, I always appreciate it. :)
Comment from Jean Lutz1
So happy to adorn this poem that pours out God's plan line-by-line with stars. Artwork and words work in harmony. I wish you the best, mystery writer, in writing and in living.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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So happy to adorn this poem that pours out God's plan line-by-line with stars. Artwork and words work in harmony. I wish you the best, mystery writer, in writing and in living.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you for this fantastic review, it truly makes my day. :)
Comment from Gert sherwood
Nice very nice rhyming poem of what you wrote, about the Garden of Eden ---
God's paradise was lost to them,
life never was the same again.
Expelled they were and life was hard,
a lesson learned, so be on guard.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
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Nice very nice rhyming poem of what you wrote, about the Garden of Eden ---
God's paradise was lost to them,
life never was the same again.
Expelled they were and life was hard,
a lesson learned, so be on guard.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
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Thank you, I appreciate this great review. :)
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You are most welcome unknown author of Paradise Lost.
Gert
