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Me and You - 40+ years of Poems V2

Viewing comments for Chapter 74 "Shining Bright"
Life, Love, Pain, Regrets, Struggles, Blessings

7 total reviews 
Comment from Badger_29
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Gear to see, when I'm going to your portfolio and red hawk time flies I wanted to give the $6 but less I have none left I have to wait for that next week. I gave this 5 stars because I truly enjoy your products tile and I enjoy reading your saucers notes at the bottom. You do good research, and after reading the one about time I was going to replace one of the words with Sublime but then as I read on rhinos to use that word. Very clever you survive me I'm timer viewing coupons at once but the best is yet to come.

Bright,
Like Sun Star's.
In our Ga~lax~y!

This is a great opener, and I like how you broke forward Galaxy apart indicating its Darkness. Another good thing is that you only use that once in the whole poem which makes it more significant. I did not with the word reluctantly once in a poem I wrote called dammit! That's not the exact feeling but you're not supposed to promote your work in a review. I look forward to collaborating with you and reading more of your work thank you so much for the request I am honored.

Blessings,


Blessings,

Brother Badger Cull

Darren

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
    Very, Glad it struck a chord with you,
    My 2 eldest have also been playing guitar for many years.
    Thanks for your Support and Encouragement. Blessings to you and your family.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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I enjoyed reading your club challenge poem. Good job with the style. I like the reason you wishes to share this poem, too. Your presentation works well. Thanks for the notes. Your lines flow smoothly with interesting phrases that only you could share.

[no apostrophe in the word comet's-->comets]
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
    Thank you for your Review, Support and Rating. Bless you.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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The world seeing from their eyes: "In a new Time and Space Age!
Air Force Staff Sergeant Stripes Rock!
Younger one's Brilliant!
Stars." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
    Thank you for your Support, Review, and Encouragement. Blessings to you.
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
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I really love the shape you made with this poem. It tells a story both in words and form. I also really appreciate your page and bio. What a fascinating life you have had!

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
    I Thank you for your Support and Review.
    Working on my Dark side Stories just Hoping to show some of the Good Side before the Bad stuff. Blessings and Please Stay tuned your Reviews are Greatly Appreciated.
Comment from rindy ryan
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I hear the love you have for your comets and I love your emotion coming through. I just feel like your word choices are simplistic and don't really flow. I appreciate the difficulty when you are limited in the number of words you may use. But I think you repeat several of the words making the poem too simplistic and not as artistic. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
    Appreciate the the input,. The notes explain the reasoning behind the word choice's. My understanding of the star Rating system (Is Available on a FS page) it is for grammar and form composition rather than preferences. Thanks again.
Comment from KyColonel Randal
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Thank you for sharing this poem. It seems to come from the heart; reads as sincere. I believe "sergeant" is the spelling you are looking for. I enjoyed reading the author's notes as always. Be blessed.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
    Bless you for the review and oversight correction, I'll revisit and revise after a look at my grandson's rank acknowledgement. Thank you.
reply by KyColonel Randal on 06-Apr-2021
    You're welcome!
Comment from Teri7
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This is a very beautiful and very well written poem you have penned about your stars shining bright. You used great descriptive words that were very interesting to read. Nice job on the Joseph's Star form. I need to try that too. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
    Thank you for your Support, Time, and Rating, it's Greatly Appreciated. Blessings to you.