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Heart Crafted Poems -2021

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Musings of an old man -2021

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Comment from Goodadvicechan
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we all grow old day by day. I like how you describe aging as
"His aged hands displayed the hard times worn by blisters turned to callouses, turned to hardened "leather-like..."

I like grandpa's prayers. It gives us hope in our daily life as he says:
"His supper prayers always spoken with such positive assurance that His God provided for his every means, while I sat watching, and a waitin' ... he - making certain gramma
got her share of the vittles --"

Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
    Thank you.
Comment from equestrik
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I do truly love this so much! I feel that you were fortunate to have this man as family and I especially like this line,: "Isn't it just a wonder ... just look around!"

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
    Thank you I so much appreciate your kind remarks - It is wonderful! I hope your weekend is just supreme in every aspect.
Comment from Bill Schott
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This free verse, Grandpa John, pays tribute to that figure in a young man's life who becomes the epitome of manhood and a head of one's heart and household.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
    Bill, we who had have life lessons by grandparents are richly blessed by their wisdom. Have a splendid weekend.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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Wonderful memories JLR and they sound just as vivid reading your lovely free verse tribute as they did to that 18-year-old boy who took hold of the flag. Thanks for sharing, it is important for us to share their memories.
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
    Valda, thank you 🙏
Comment from tfawcus
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A fine salute honouring a fine man, the sort of man it is a privilege to meet. There are more lessons to be learnt from a man such as this than one can find in any school. You really make him come to life in your poem. Much enjoyed.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
    Tony, thank you🙏
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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Remember the life and joy of having a grandpa - I was eighteen when grandpa passed on ...
I stood man tall as I watched them --
ever so sacredly folded the flag into the symbolic tri-corned
shape -- thirteen times and then they laid that flag into my hand's.
Which I gripped vise-like and cried!

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
    Iza, thank you🙏
Comment from juliaSjames
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You paint a vivid word - portrait of your grandpa. Love and admiration shine through the lines. For it's evident your grandpa cared as deeply for you as you did for him.

Well composed prose poem that holds the reader's attention.

Best of luck in the contest.

Stay safe healthy and blessed

Julia


 Comment Written 15-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
    Julia, thank you🙏
Comment from R.E.R.
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Well written and touching. My great grandfather passed away when I was too young to really talk to him, and recently I've been wishing I could. Thank you for sharing this.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
    Thank you, so much!
Comment from Kerry L Batchelder
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Beautiful story of your grandfather. So very well written. What a wonderful man. You were blessed indeed with such a man and you honor him very well with your writing. Great job!

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
    Kerry, thank you.
Comment from bhogg
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I know that this was free verse, but to me to pace and cadence seemed so smooth, who would know? I enjoyed because I was so close to not only my grandparents, but some other folks so close to me. Well written and beautifully presented.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
    Bhogg, thank you so much!