NaPoWriMo 2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "19. Laughter"NaPoWriMo 2021 Poetry Challenge
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Comment from JudyE
Oh dear. Did you set any others off with your giggling? I've had something a bit similar but it occurred during a church service. Not as bad as laughing at a funeral but still pretty embarrassing.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Oh dear. Did you set any others off with your giggling? I've had something a bit similar but it occurred during a church service. Not as bad as laughing at a funeral but still pretty embarrassing.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Hi Judy :) My brother found it quite amusing, but he managed to hold himself together!
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
this is a nicely written poem. It has a Great flow and rhyme scheme. Nice overall presentation background colour and font. Nice photo as well. Well done . Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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this is a nicely written poem. It has a Great flow and rhyme scheme. Nice overall presentation background colour and font. Nice photo as well. Well done . Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much, Joanne, for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. Kind regards, Debra :)
Comment from pome lover
Oh, how funny - made even more so by his sympathy and generous? gesture. Wish I could've been there. I'm sure I'd have been trying to smother cackles, too. I hope you had the proper expression on your face when you returned his hanky.
I don't know which would actually sound worse of your two examples. maybe the dying duck, although wailing cat sounds are pretty nerve wracking.
Going to see what else you've been up to.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Oh, how funny - made even more so by his sympathy and generous? gesture. Wish I could've been there. I'm sure I'd have been trying to smother cackles, too. I hope you had the proper expression on your face when you returned his hanky.
I don't know which would actually sound worse of your two examples. maybe the dying duck, although wailing cat sounds are pretty nerve wracking.
Going to see what else you've been up to.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Hah! I was mortified, I just couldn't stop laughing... and yes, when he tapped me on the shoulder and handed me the hanky, it just made it all the more funny (but not funny!) It was a paper hanky, so I didn't return it! Thanks for the feedback, Katharine :) Best wishes, Debra
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paper hankies. who goes around with...oh, you mean a tissue? funny.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Been there and done that, but not at a funeral. I enjoyed your poem, Debra. The rhymes work well, there's good flow and great details. You told a great little story in a poem. This event is one that will be hard to live down.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Been there and done that, but not at a funeral. I enjoyed your poem, Debra. The rhymes work well, there's good flow and great details. You told a great little story in a poem. This event is one that will be hard to live down.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Hi Jan :)
Thank you for your lovely feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Gloria ....
Super good job with this finely rhymed and metred moment of apparent feelings opposite to what they should. But when it gets going, it's hard to hide.
Really enjoyed this, and thank goodness for handkerchiefs.
Gloria
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Super good job with this finely rhymed and metred moment of apparent feelings opposite to what they should. But when it gets going, it's hard to hide.
Really enjoyed this, and thank goodness for handkerchiefs.
Gloria
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Hi Goria :)
Thank you for your lovely feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from lyenochka
Lol! It's a good thing that laughter can sound like crying (especially when you can't see the face.) I totally can understand the giggles as we can be a mix of emotions during that kind of situation. The handkerchief would be a good way to mask the laugh!
Extra "me" in:
but then someone behind me me did this 'harmonising' thing
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Lol! It's a good thing that laughter can sound like crying (especially when you can't see the face.) I totally can understand the giggles as we can be a mix of emotions during that kind of situation. The handkerchief would be a good way to mask the laugh!
Extra "me" in:
but then someone behind me me did this 'harmonising' thing
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Hi Helen :)
Thank you for your lovely feedback and for pointing out the duplicate 'me'. All sorted! Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Hilarious! The funeral was the perfect cover--brilliant depiction of the event in colorful phrasing and clever rhyme. I'm relieved the yowler was a man--I'd have wondered if you'd meant me.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Hilarious! The funeral was the perfect cover--brilliant depiction of the event in colorful phrasing and clever rhyme. I'm relieved the yowler was a man--I'd have wondered if you'd meant me.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Hi Liz :)
Thank you for your feedback! Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Laughter
by Debra White
Hello, Debra,
Great Rhymed Poem about laughter when least expected.... Hah hah hah.... it's funny but I'm sure at the time was embarrassing. I can't stand it when people sing off key. Good chapter for the NaPoWriMo 2021 challenge book.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Laughter
by Debra White
Hello, Debra,
Great Rhymed Poem about laughter when least expected.... Hah hah hah.... it's funny but I'm sure at the time was embarrassing. I can't stand it when people sing off key. Good chapter for the NaPoWriMo 2021 challenge book.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Hi Gypsy :)
Thank you for your lovely feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Darling girl...you are not alone. Sometimes laughter at such moments is a reaction to stress. One of my classmates died and I laughed - we were shown a movie with sound effects of passion...I guffawed - it happens and the embarrassment factor is through the roof. Very well written and presented!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Darling girl...you are not alone. Sometimes laughter at such moments is a reaction to stress. One of my classmates died and I laughed - we were shown a movie with sound effects of passion...I guffawed - it happens and the embarrassment factor is through the roof. Very well written and presented!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Hi Sherry :)
Thank you for your empathetic feedback! Best wishes as always, Debra
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Love your work!! Am a big fan, girlfriend!!
Comment from royowen
What a time to break into such mirch, as a sign of grief seemed to be the order of the day, yes, sometimes in church the one most heard is the self possessed worshiper who can't sing a note in pitch. Beautifully written Debra, in articulate rhyming couplets, well done, good post, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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What a time to break into such mirch, as a sign of grief seemed to be the order of the day, yes, sometimes in church the one most heard is the self possessed worshiper who can't sing a note in pitch. Beautifully written Debra, in articulate rhyming couplets, well done, good post, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Hi Roy :)
Thank you for your lovely feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra
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Most welcome.
