Born into it
joke on you14 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet.. you have now 2 votes.
Your entry made a strong an impact on me .. I could connect to your words.
After 14 months of covid , in my country there is 1 million more unemployed.. that takes us to 4 million now.
Unlike other European countries like Germany , France and England, our government never offered financial help to small and medium businesses.
More than 40% will never open again and another 40% is about to follow.
People are desperate: there is no work yet the bills keep coming .
We have lot of suicides...
People don't see the light at the end of the tunnel.
I hope your story was fiction but if it wasn't , I am sorry to hear of you grave situation and pray that you find the help you need and deserve.
Keep safe!
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Ciao mystery poet.. you have now 2 votes.
Your entry made a strong an impact on me .. I could connect to your words.
After 14 months of covid , in my country there is 1 million more unemployed.. that takes us to 4 million now.
Unlike other European countries like Germany , France and England, our government never offered financial help to small and medium businesses.
More than 40% will never open again and another 40% is about to follow.
People are desperate: there is no work yet the bills keep coming .
We have lot of suicides...
People don't see the light at the end of the tunnel.
I hope your story was fiction but if it wasn't , I am sorry to hear of you grave situation and pray that you find the help you need and deserve.
Keep safe!
Comment Written 29-Apr-2021
Comment from mobileliz
Good story that gives good visual. One minor typo. Quote at the end of the 3rd paragraph. The guy has no fear of hell as he considers his blindness hell on earth. good job
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Good story that gives good visual. One minor typo. Quote at the end of the 3rd paragraph. The guy has no fear of hell as he considers his blindness hell on earth. good job
Comment Written 28-Apr-2021
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, Born Into It, leaves the reader with a chuckle as the worst thing to happen to someone becomes just another bump in the night.
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This story, Born Into It, leaves the reader with a chuckle as the worst thing to happen to someone becomes just another bump in the night.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2021
Comment from Colleen The Garbanzo Bean
I like your story. It has good dark humor in it, pun intended. I think the ending has a nice twist to it. I'd like to see some more lines about how Darkness approached the person or a little more scene setting. Otherwise, very nice work!
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I like your story. It has good dark humor in it, pun intended. I think the ending has a nice twist to it. I'd like to see some more lines about how Darkness approached the person or a little more scene setting. Otherwise, very nice work!
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2021
Comment from royowen
What a clever short form response to this writing prompt. It's amazing how people can overcome almost anything, although this is a story, and a darn clever one, it sometimes true that hell is on earth. Beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
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What a clever short form response to this writing prompt. It's amazing how people can overcome almost anything, although this is a story, and a darn clever one, it sometimes true that hell is on earth. Beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Apr-2021
Comment from LJbutterfly
Wow! This is real creativity. What an imagination. The title is quite appropriate, and your artwork pairs perfectly. "I have no job, no home, no sight!" Your POV character is truly already in hell. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
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Wow! This is real creativity. What an imagination. The title is quite appropriate, and your artwork pairs perfectly. "I have no job, no home, no sight!" Your POV character is truly already in hell. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2021
Comment from Sharon Davis
This short piece of fiction, in response to a writing prompt featuring a character trapped in total darkness, is well written and presented. The title is well-suited.
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This short piece of fiction, in response to a writing prompt featuring a character trapped in total darkness, is well written and presented. The title is well-suited.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2021
Comment from Wendy G
A clever short piece, written well. Readers make different associations about the theme of darkness - yours is well chosen, because for many, to be blind would indeed be hell. Best wishes for the contest.
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A clever short piece, written well. Readers make different associations about the theme of darkness - yours is well chosen, because for many, to be blind would indeed be hell. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2021
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is a witty and satire fiction speaks about one who born in darkness, someone came to go into the other side; but the man answered, he is already in hell, the other side; well said; well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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This is a witty and satire fiction speaks about one who born in darkness, someone came to go into the other side; but the man answered, he is already in hell, the other side; well said; well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 28-Apr-2021
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
Oh, wow. -shoulder slump-
I was NOT expecting that. I do not care who you are, you cannot just go around kicking folks when they are already down. I think it is a rule, right?
Cause, I mean, otherwise, we would alllll be out there doing it, right? Man. It is like the cheapest, BEST entertainment!! Oh.
Not that I know personally. My uncle stayed with us once -er twice -- three times, tops! And told me about it. Yeah. But uhm I would never ... ummm.
What were we talking about?
Ha
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Dear Mystery Writer,
Oh, wow. -shoulder slump-
I was NOT expecting that. I do not care who you are, you cannot just go around kicking folks when they are already down. I think it is a rule, right?
Cause, I mean, otherwise, we would alllll be out there doing it, right? Man. It is like the cheapest, BEST entertainment!! Oh.
Not that I know personally. My uncle stayed with us once -er twice -- three times, tops! And told me about it. Yeah. But uhm I would never ... ummm.
What were we talking about?
Ha
Comment Written 28-Apr-2021