Work Week
a 5-7-5 suite17 total reviews
Comment from harmony13
I liked the way this author presented the days of the week. Some of
the stanza made me smile! The author's words are engaging,
interesting, clear and creative. I thought about Friday and I feel
the same way about it! Great Poem!
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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I liked the way this author presented the days of the week. Some of
the stanza made me smile! The author's words are engaging,
interesting, clear and creative. I thought about Friday and I feel
the same way about it! Great Poem!
Comment Written 06-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Thank you, Harmony
Comment from Aiona
Heh! What a cute poem. I like that the days of the week informed the number of stanzas. It's a relatable poem, as I used to be employed and familiar with those ups and downs. It also reminds me to be thankful they are not completely relatable anymore as I am self-employed, which means every day is new work day with potential for income, and I am no longer "chasing the paycheck" with acrobatics. I like that metaphor too. Being employed was so much like being a show dog or trick pony who's told to jump thru hoops for no good reason at all except to make other people money, while the acrobat is fed dog food or oats. Each stanza has the 5-7-5 syllable count.
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Heh! What a cute poem. I like that the days of the week informed the number of stanzas. It's a relatable poem, as I used to be employed and familiar with those ups and downs. It also reminds me to be thankful they are not completely relatable anymore as I am self-employed, which means every day is new work day with potential for income, and I am no longer "chasing the paycheck" with acrobatics. I like that metaphor too. Being employed was so much like being a show dog or trick pony who's told to jump thru hoops for no good reason at all except to make other people money, while the acrobat is fed dog food or oats. Each stanza has the 5-7-5 syllable count.
Comment Written 06-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Thanks, Aiona. I guess people still do that work thing.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I know these feelings when I worked a job I didn't enjoy and Monday morning I would just wish for Friday to come. Thankfully I get far more out of my working week now that I am retired, you brought back some memories here with your clever poem, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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I know these feelings when I worked a job I didn't enjoy and Monday morning I would just wish for Friday to come. Thankfully I get far more out of my working week now that I am retired, you brought back some memories here with your clever poem, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Thanks, Dolly
Comment from tfawcus
Unfortunately, many people's lives are similar to this. A mindless routine that fills the hours while life slips past unnoticed. Then, suddenly, it is too late.
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Unfortunately, many people's lives are similar to this. A mindless routine that fills the hours while life slips past unnoticed. Then, suddenly, it is too late.
Comment Written 06-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Thanks, Tony, for looking at this.
Comment from Melodie Michelle
You've definitely stated what a normal work week is to most people in a nice little poem.
Thanxxx for sharing and may God bless you and your family;-(
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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You've definitely stated what a normal work week is to most people in a nice little poem.
Thanxxx for sharing and may God bless you and your family;-(
Comment Written 06-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Thank you, Melodie
Comment from DentedSyke
I really liked the first two stanzas, but I feel that you slipped into a more mundane style after that. The first stanza, especially, shows me that you have talent!
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reply by the author on 05-May-2021
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I really liked the first two stanzas, but I feel that you slipped into a more mundane style after that. The first stanza, especially, shows me that you have talent!
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Comment Written 05-May-2021
reply by the author on 05-May-2021
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Thanks, Delbert, for giving this a look.
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My pleasure.
Comment from Anne Johnston
What a great entry for this contest, tracking through the week with what we do each day. Very well done. I like the way you ended:
"And then, finally,
Saturday allows us to
assess our 'success'.""
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reply by the author on 05-May-2021
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What a great entry for this contest, tracking through the week with what we do each day. Very well done. I like the way you ended:
"And then, finally,
Saturday allows us to
assess our 'success'.""
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Comment Written 05-May-2021
reply by the author on 05-May-2021
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Thank you, Anne
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You are welcome
